A Window On My World
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "Golden Silence"Daily 5-7-5 simplicities for April Na-Po-Wri-Mo
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Comment from lyenochka
I like the "honey of silence." I also don't like the daily death toll count. We have a funny expression in Korean, "mute who ate honey." That came to mind when I read your poem.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2020
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I like the "honey of silence." I also don't like the daily death toll count. We have a funny expression in Korean, "mute who ate honey." That came to mind when I read your poem.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2020
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Thanks for reviewing. Regional sayings are always interesting - I've been trying to think of a similar saying in English.
Comment from poetwatch
Hi LisaMay. The feeling of being left alone in silence is a mood-downer. Yet, it can really blow your mind if you have tinnitus. I know, I'm hearing impaired. I'm not left alone though, my company is the chirping of crickets and the buss of a bee. Sleep in hard especially when in your head one hears and explosion as cells blow up. I'm an old-timer case with a tint of dementia. Sometime I wish I was stuck in suspended animation. Don't feel so down woman, cut your grass. :)
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2020
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Hi LisaMay. The feeling of being left alone in silence is a mood-downer. Yet, it can really blow your mind if you have tinnitus. I know, I'm hearing impaired. I'm not left alone though, my company is the chirping of crickets and the buss of a bee. Sleep in hard especially when in your head one hears and explosion as cells blow up. I'm an old-timer case with a tint of dementia. Sometime I wish I was stuck in suspended animation. Don't feel so down woman, cut your grass. :)
Comment Written 10-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2020
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Wise words, Jose. My grass is still way too long - it rained and that made it too hard to mow. Also, I feel guilty about disturbing the quiet neighbourhood with noise.
Comment from Gail Denham
There has definiately been so much bad news - and frankly bad predictions - perhaps meant to stir the fear and panic we're facing. The death toll is terrible - dehumanizing - pray for our country - for the world.
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There has definiately been so much bad news - and frankly bad predictions - perhaps meant to stir the fear and panic we're facing. The death toll is terrible - dehumanizing - pray for our country - for the world.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2020
Comment from Bill Schott
This 5-7-5 suite, Golden Silence, has the proper construction and finds the world's greatest luxury in the absence of the world. Neat.
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This 5-7-5 suite, Golden Silence, has the proper construction and finds the world's greatest luxury in the absence of the world. Neat.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2020
Comment from Y. M. Roger
I turned it off weeks ago... got a couple of reliable sources that I check at specific times each day and the rest of the time it's me and 'work' or writing or reading or packing (we're trying to move sometime this summer/early fall) because you're right: it's just too much damn negativity! Love the emotional 'weight' you're able to convey in this form --- very well done in both poem and presentation! ;) Thanx for sharing and 'chin up'... we'll get through it! ;) Yvette
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I turned it off weeks ago... got a couple of reliable sources that I check at specific times each day and the rest of the time it's me and 'work' or writing or reading or packing (we're trying to move sometime this summer/early fall) because you're right: it's just too much damn negativity! Love the emotional 'weight' you're able to convey in this form --- very well done in both poem and presentation! ;) Thanx for sharing and 'chin up'... we'll get through it! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 10-Apr-2020
Comment from Louise Michelle
I know exactly how you feel. At times I want to shut it all out, but wanting to be informed prevails. I'm trying to view the news as a sort of reality show. It's happening, but only on TV. Is this working for me? Only when I don't leave the house and go out into the real world. Hugs, Lou
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2020
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I know exactly how you feel. At times I want to shut it all out, but wanting to be informed prevails. I'm trying to view the news as a sort of reality show. It's happening, but only on TV. Is this working for me? Only when I don't leave the house and go out into the real world. Hugs, Lou
Comment Written 09-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2020
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It certainly is a macabre reality show, but if you keep it mentally outside at a different level of believability I hope it does work for you.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 5-7-5 suite about the crisis we are all facing. We need to keep updated about the happenings in the world but we do not have to be tuned in 24/7 take some breaks and just have some fun to take the thoughts away from the doom and gloom.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2020
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A very well-written 5-7-5 suite about the crisis we are all facing. We need to keep updated about the happenings in the world but we do not have to be tuned in 24/7 take some breaks and just have some fun to take the thoughts away from the doom and gloom.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2020
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Thanks for your review. I am enjoying my creative pursuits now, and just watch the 6pm news for updates.
Comment from Michele Harber
I know exactly what you mean, Lisa May. I wake up every day and watch the news, and there's never anything on the news but the Corona Virus. I watch for a while, and then change the channel to the most mindless show I can find just to get my mind off what's going on. I did that on 9/11 too. I watched the news from the time I got home that day, at around 11:30 a.m., 'til about 6:00 p.m., when I finally decided that watching that same scene over and over again was unhealthy, and I switched to a sit-com.
I enjoyed your alliteration in the first verse (see, I remembered this was supposed to be a review), and I love the image of the "golden honey of silence" creeping into your soul.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2020
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I know exactly what you mean, Lisa May. I wake up every day and watch the news, and there's never anything on the news but the Corona Virus. I watch for a while, and then change the channel to the most mindless show I can find just to get my mind off what's going on. I did that on 9/11 too. I watched the news from the time I got home that day, at around 11:30 a.m., 'til about 6:00 p.m., when I finally decided that watching that same scene over and over again was unhealthy, and I switched to a sit-com.
I enjoyed your alliteration in the first verse (see, I remembered this was supposed to be a review), and I love the image of the "golden honey of silence" creeping into your soul.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2020
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Thanks for (eventually) reviewing, haha.
Taking our minds off by watching mindless is probably happening everywhere.
We have just had a dire situation happen here in NZ last week. Unbeknown to most of us, a big German company owned many of our national weekly and monthly magazines, some were light entertainment but others were quality ones with investigative journalism, reviews, political analysis etc. Several were icons of the publishing industry. We are reeling. Lengthy subscriptions have been reneged on and many talented writers and designers have lost their jobs, printers lost contracts etc. Bauer, the German company, said it was because the advertising revenue had dropped too much. That just feels like a knee-jerk reaction - we are only 2 weeks into quarantine. We've been left high and dry - a really good example of why foreign companies should not get their hands on our stuff.
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Do the words "Better late than never" mean anything? ;-) I actually have a good excuse. My computer is better than my daughter's, so she's been using mine for the remote classes she's taking. Normally I get it back when she's done, but this week she had a term paper due, so I didn't exactly have a lot of time on my own computer. Luckily, she turned the paper in last night, so I'm able to reclaim my computer for longer periods of time.
I'm sorry about their stopping your publications. To be honest, I get most of my news from the TV, but I know for a fact that at least two of New York's major papers (including the renowned New York Times) are still in print.
By the way, a little update on the note I'd sent you previously. The elderly father who was quarantined after his son tested positive for Covid was himself hospitalized tonight. All anyone knows is that he got weak and either collapsed or merely fell, but he was taken away by ambulance. I just got off the phone with his wife, and she hasn't heard from the hospital yet, so she doesn't even know if he has the virus. It's definitely getting scary.
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That's terrible, to be left dangling not knowing what's going on with his diagnosis.
I am having a bit of a health scare here, too. i spent all yesterday trying to get medical advice on the phone, no one does walk-ups any more and phone lines are so congested you have to wait all day in a phone queue... I freaked a bit yesterday morning when I noticed i was tender around my belly button and there was a lump and a red patch the size of an orange. It is one of the incision sites for my recent appendix operation, which was on March 3rd. Eventually i got onto Healthline and had a verbal diagnosis that maybe some stitches, which were supposed to dissolve, might have got infected instead. Luckily i was able to get some antibiotics prescribed so hopefully a course of that will get me back to normal. I had a sudden glimpse of what an overwhelmed health system looks like - a lot of people are trying to get tested, but the overloaded phone lines are the main problem.
Ironically, my appendix operation was free, but a phone call and a $5 prescription cost me $88.
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Wow! First of all, please keep me posted, as you use the antibiotics, and let me know that they're working. You know I'm going to worry about you until I hear from you that you're okay.
Now, how in the world did a phone call and some antibiotics cost $88.00??!!
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I didn't mean to worry you. My next door neighbour knows and will check in every day.
The expense was incurred apparently because i spoke at length to a doctor at the Urgent Doctors clinic, who took up her own time asking unnecessary questions. Such as when i told her i had never been on any medications for any health conditions she asked me if i was allergic to any medications and what were my underlying health conditions, And when I said i had no symptoms whatsoever for Coro she took 5 minutes checking off with me every known symptom. All before even asking me what my problem was. I could have been haemorrhaging!! (All over my nice clean floor.) My own doctor usually charges $40 for a check-up but i couldn't get hold of him.
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I'm glad your next-door neighbor is taking care of you - but I still want updates to make sure you're okay!
I know what you mean about the unnecessary questions asked by the urgent care clinics. I have one across the street from me but, when I need one, I opt to go to one half a mile away. Several years ago, my husband went to the place across the street for a boil on his leg, and they did everything short of remove his tonsils!
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Better a boil on the leg than a boil on the bum.
Checking in: the red circular patch seems to be fading as the antibiotics kick in, unless it is wishful thinking. The tender lump is still there, but no bigger.
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Thank you for the update. No worse and possibly slightly better is OK. You may be heading in the right direction, and at least you're not heading in the wrong one. I hope it does turn out to be that the antibiotics are working.
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:)
Now my next problem is that I seem to be shedding hair more than usual. Stress? My dietary intake has not changed. Have you noticed any health or physical changes yourself?
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Only that I'm gaining weight. We've been keeping more nosh than usual in the apartment, so we each have a little pick-me-up when we need it, since the isolation (even with three of us together) has been depressing. I'm still limiting the amounts I'm eating, so my weight isn't ballooning, but it's still higher than I'd like it to be.
Other than that, it's just oversensitivity. I cry at the drop of a hat, from happy things, sad things, and a lot of neutral things that would have had no effect on me in normal times.
Comment from Patty Palmer
So true! Crisis overdose for sure! Have to get away from it to keep one's sanity! The golden color seems to calm down the nerves a bit. But even taking a break from it all, you can't help but the crisis still be right there still covering your thoughts.
Great job!
Luv!
Patty
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2020
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So true! Crisis overdose for sure! Have to get away from it to keep one's sanity! The golden color seems to calm down the nerves a bit. But even taking a break from it all, you can't help but the crisis still be right there still covering your thoughts.
Great job!
Luv!
Patty
Comment Written 08-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2020
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Thanks for your review - a bit of distraction away from talk of virus.
Comment from Rmocruz
You have presented an effective employment of alliteration and metaphor in 5-7-5 format. Well written as to be clearly understood. The art selection
looks surreal. I am experiencing bad news overload as well.
On a lighter note, I once saw a movie entitled: "Golden Shower."
Great job,keep it up.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2020
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You have presented an effective employment of alliteration and metaphor in 5-7-5 format. Well written as to be clearly understood. The art selection
looks surreal. I am experiencing bad news overload as well.
On a lighter note, I once saw a movie entitled: "Golden Shower."
Great job,keep it up.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2020
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Thanks for your comments.
(Wee thought that movie was piss-weak.)
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Were you pissed?
You're welcome Lisa, my pleasure!
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Pissed as a fart probably (meaning drunk, not angry.)
