Full House
a hundred-word story17 total reviews
Comment from damommy
Love it.
"Better neighborhood" really says it all. That's a hand I'd love to have. I'd bet more than $5 on it, although I'm not much of a gambler. lol
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2020
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Love it.
"Better neighborhood" really says it all. That's a hand I'd love to have. I'd bet more than $5 on it, although I'm not much of a gambler. lol
Comment Written 18-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2020
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Thank you, Yvonne.
Comment from Gail Denham
Cute and I do miss playing cards with friends - friends who now must stay hidden in their own homes - and my husband isn't keen on playing games. Oh well - I have stories and poems to write.
Cute poem
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2020
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Cute and I do miss playing cards with friends - friends who now must stay hidden in their own homes - and my husband isn't keen on playing games. Oh well - I have stories and poems to write.
Cute poem
Comment Written 18-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2020
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Thanks, Gail.
Comment from Joseph Registrato
i'll give you character and setting, although both are thin. But what's the conflict and resolution of a poker hand? Very hard to do in 100 words, but that's the challenge.
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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2020
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i'll give you character and setting, although both are thin. But what's the conflict and resolution of a poker hand? Very hard to do in 100 words, but that's the challenge.
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Comment Written 18-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2020
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The conflict of a poker game is obvious and assumed.
I guess if we?re going to map out the plot, I?ll break the hundred word story down for you. The exposition shows a setting of a poker game between two characters. Having a mere hundred words in total, a maximum of twenty words is allotted to this introduction. In short stories the author must rely on the reader?s ability to build the scene with their own experiences without the author spoon-feeding each detail or over-explaining what is common knowledge to ninety percent of readers.
Rising action occurs with the dealing and dialogue leading to the climax which is arguably both Kevin?s red herring hand and Kelly?s superior winning pat hand she dealt herself. Kevin?s tens and eights might be considered rising action, but Kelly?s announcement is definitely the climax and resolution. The falling action and trailing off resolution are truncated to fall within the limits.
I have fulfilled all requirements of a short story here.
You should reassess this review and raise this undeserved low rating.
Comment from Kathleen S.
Interesting turn of events in your short story. Good picture to go with your tale as well. - I have played some fun card games before, but it's been awhile. - Fun to read about. Well done.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2020
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Interesting turn of events in your short story. Good picture to go with your tale as well. - I have played some fun card games before, but it's been awhile. - Fun to read about. Well done.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2020
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Thank you, Kathleen,
Comment from BeasPeas
This is amusing. I know next to nothing about cards, but I think I got this. The face cards (royalty) win over the drab regular cards. Best of luck in the contest. Marilyn
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2020
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This is amusing. I know next to nothing about cards, but I think I got this. The face cards (royalty) win over the drab regular cards. Best of luck in the contest. Marilyn
Comment Written 16-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2020
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Thank you, Marilyn, for playing this hand.
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
You've got to be careful. It applies to everything in life. If you think that it's a sure thing and it's to easy, then, you might need to rethink it. I love the message conveyed in this and enjoyed reading this well written work. Well done!
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2020
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You've got to be careful. It applies to everything in life. If you think that it's a sure thing and it's to easy, then, you might need to rethink it. I love the message conveyed in this and enjoyed reading this well written work. Well done!
Comment Written 16-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2020
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Thank you, Jeffrey
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, my friend,
Good job with the 100-word dash flash fiction. I think the story is clever and for such a short story you managed to have a beginning, a middle, and an end... well done~
Stay safe, stay home, save lives
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2020
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Hello, my friend,
Good job with the 100-word dash flash fiction. I think the story is clever and for such a short story you managed to have a beginning, a middle, and an end... well done~
Stay safe, stay home, save lives
Comment Written 16-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2020
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Thank you, Gypsy
Comment from Anya Trofimova
I think that this piece reads very well. You strike the nail on the head when it comes to finding the balance between too much and too little description. Your characters are very believable, thanks in part to the natural and realistic dialogue. Well done!
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2020
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I think that this piece reads very well. You strike the nail on the head when it comes to finding the balance between too much and too little description. Your characters are very believable, thanks in part to the natural and realistic dialogue. Well done!
Comment Written 16-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2020
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Thank you, Anya, for giving this a look.
Comment from humpwhistle
There's a significant breach of strategy here--Kevin would wait until Kelly either drew, or decided to stand pat before giving away his betting strategy. Poker is a game of strict sequences.
With so many (relatively) high cards showing, out of a deal of only 11, I'd guess Kelly is a poor shuffler.
Best of luck.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2020
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There's a significant breach of strategy here--Kevin would wait until Kelly either drew, or decided to stand pat before giving away his betting strategy. Poker is a game of strict sequences.
With so many (relatively) high cards showing, out of a deal of only 11, I'd guess Kelly is a poor shuffler.
Best of luck.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 16-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2020
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This game began with Kelly, Kevin, Kyle, and Kenny playing. Revision to achieve one hundred words cost two players, a fold, a check to the power, an explanation of tells, and any other characterizations of the surviving poker pals.I?d say Kelly is a downright cheat.
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hi Mystery Writer. That's a well written 100 word Dash. You played the game and raised the bet. The first full house sounded great, and Kelly didn't take any cards. Shew definitely had a house in a "Better neighborhood." Good luck I the contest.
Robert
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2020
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Hi Mystery Writer. That's a well written 100 word Dash. You played the game and raised the bet. The first full house sounded great, and Kelly didn't take any cards. Shew definitely had a house in a "Better neighborhood." Good luck I the contest.
Robert
Comment Written 16-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2020
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Thanks, Robert
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You're welcome
