Just Once More
A Canzonetta poem for Potlatch Poetry26 total reviews
Comment from Pearl Edwards
A lovely scene you create in your Canzonetta poem Yvonne, in the enchanted wood, beside the brook. It's a really peaceful scene, with a touch of romance. Your repeated line works well to compliment each verse.
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 05-May-2020
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A lovely scene you create in your Canzonetta poem Yvonne, in the enchanted wood, beside the brook. It's a really peaceful scene, with a touch of romance. Your repeated line works well to compliment each verse.
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 05-May-2020
reply by the author on 05-May-2020
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Thank you. Wouldn't it be nice to visit a place like that? We can imagine it. 8-)
Comment from Bichon
This was a stunning poem. You really created a mystic environment that was immersive and interesting. The photo does a great job at furthering the image, great work!
reply by the author on 04-May-2020
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This was a stunning poem. You really created a mystic environment that was immersive and interesting. The photo does a great job at furthering the image, great work!
Comment Written 04-May-2020
reply by the author on 04-May-2020
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Thank you. I'm happy you think so.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
A Canzonetta poem for Potlatch Poetry
Just Once More
by damommy
Hello, my friend,
A fine entry for the canzonetta poem potlatch poetry challenge. I would suggest that you make the font smaller. Right now is hard to tell where your rhymes are because the lines are to big to align. Well done, my friend.
reply by the author on 03-May-2020
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A Canzonetta poem for Potlatch Poetry
Just Once More
by damommy
Hello, my friend,
A fine entry for the canzonetta poem potlatch poetry challenge. I would suggest that you make the font smaller. Right now is hard to tell where your rhymes are because the lines are to big to align. Well done, my friend.
Comment Written 03-May-2020
reply by the author on 03-May-2020
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I think that font problem varies from screen to screen. On here, it looks fine. It's hard to know. Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from Bill Schott
This cansonetta poem, Just Once More, blends, ever so subtly, the wish to see a favorite spot again with the longing to see a special person once more as well. Once I saw that part in your poem, I welled up a bit.
reply by the author on 03-May-2020
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This cansonetta poem, Just Once More, blends, ever so subtly, the wish to see a favorite spot again with the longing to see a special person once more as well. Once I saw that part in your poem, I welled up a bit.
Comment Written 03-May-2020
reply by the author on 03-May-2020
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That is indeed the best compliment. Thank you so much, Bill. It makes me happy to know my poem has touched someone.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Enchanting and beautiful.... those are the words that immediately come to mind, Yvonne. Don't know if it's just this new style or your talented pen, but this one gave me goosebumps with the way it almost sings as it conjures up the image of a young love long gone... Thank you for that touch of nostalgia this morning, my lady! ;) Yvette :)
reply by the author on 03-May-2020
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Enchanting and beautiful.... those are the words that immediately come to mind, Yvonne. Don't know if it's just this new style or your talented pen, but this one gave me goosebumps with the way it almost sings as it conjures up the image of a young love long gone... Thank you for that touch of nostalgia this morning, my lady! ;) Yvette :)
Comment Written 03-May-2020
reply by the author on 03-May-2020
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Thank you for these lovely comments. It makes it all worthwhile.
Comment from Pantygynt
This form, though not requiring a specific metre, is well suited to iambic tetrameter, and the repetition of 'the same' is most skilfully handled, enhancing the descriptive quality of the piece. Beautifully done.
reply by the author on 03-May-2020
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This form, though not requiring a specific metre, is well suited to iambic tetrameter, and the repetition of 'the same' is most skilfully handled, enhancing the descriptive quality of the piece. Beautifully done.
Comment Written 03-May-2020
reply by the author on 03-May-2020
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Oh, my! What a wonderful review. Thank you so much, Jim. I hope this finds you and your little ones safe and healthy.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice image
and presentation.
-An interesting form;
I might give it a try sometime.
-A well written poem with
vivid imagery and rhyme.
-There is also a peaceful mood:
I wouldn't mind being here, either:
"in this untamed, enchanted wood."
reply by the author on 03-May-2020
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-Very nice image
and presentation.
-An interesting form;
I might give it a try sometime.
-A well written poem with
vivid imagery and rhyme.
-There is also a peaceful mood:
I wouldn't mind being here, either:
"in this untamed, enchanted wood."
Comment Written 03-May-2020
reply by the author on 03-May-2020
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It's a nice place, isn't it? 8-) Yes, do give it a try. Thank you so much.
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It is a nice place, and I will definitely give the form a try. I copied your directions for it.
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Looking forward to reading it.
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Thanks. It will be a little while, but not too long:)
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Canzonetta about the magic brooke you wish to hear the tune just one more time. There are beautiful things in our lives that we will always remember no matter how long it takes.
reply by the author on 03-May-2020
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A very well-written Canzonetta about the magic brooke you wish to hear the tune just one more time. There are beautiful things in our lives that we will always remember no matter how long it takes.
Comment Written 03-May-2020
reply by the author on 03-May-2020
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So true. Thank you.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
There is a melancholy theme of remembrance here in your well metered and rhymed words, I loved the flow and the form here. Your words are full of melody, I have one suggestion for you for this line:
"In blink of eye, he's standing where" (I blinked by eye, he's standing there)
Love Dolly x
reply by the author on 03-May-2020
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There is a melancholy theme of remembrance here in your well metered and rhymed words, I loved the flow and the form here. Your words are full of melody, I have one suggestion for you for this line:
"In blink of eye, he's standing where" (I blinked by eye, he's standing there)
Love Dolly x
Comment Written 03-May-2020
reply by the author on 03-May-2020
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Thank you. That line goes on to say, "he's standing where I . . . "
Comment from smileycloud
that is lovely and the words and the sighting in the wood is enchanting
"that lilting air" must be my favourite words in amongst all this beautiful imagery
the font looks good large but a tiny bit smaller font might make each line fall where it ends and not skip down a line
or
it is just my computer screen messing it up
very good work
have a smiley day
blessings
reply by the author on 03-May-2020
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that is lovely and the words and the sighting in the wood is enchanting
"that lilting air" must be my favourite words in amongst all this beautiful imagery
the font looks good large but a tiny bit smaller font might make each line fall where it ends and not skip down a line
or
it is just my computer screen messing it up
very good work
have a smiley day
blessings
Comment Written 03-May-2020
reply by the author on 03-May-2020
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Thank you for a lovely review. and very nice comments. I'm glad you liked that line. I think it must be your computer screen, because it looks fine on this end. 8-)
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:):):)
