Benjamin
A angel in the midst10 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This cinquain, Newborn, has the proper 2-4-6-8-2 formatting and follows the specific parts of speech directives as we welcome this handsome fellow into the world.
reply by the author on 13-May-2020
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This cinquain, Newborn, has the proper 2-4-6-8-2 formatting and follows the specific parts of speech directives as we welcome this handsome fellow into the world.
Comment Written 13-May-2020
reply by the author on 13-May-2020
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Thank you, Bill. I actually had to research to find gerunds for that third line. Newborns don't have many actions, and they are all involuntary. I learned something from doing this one and appreciate your review.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Sooooo peaceful when they're asleep... ;) :) A wonderful employment of the Cinquain format here - thanx so much for sharing and best of luck in the contest! ;)
reply by the author on 13-May-2020
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Sooooo peaceful when they're asleep... ;) :) A wonderful employment of the Cinquain format here - thanx so much for sharing and best of luck in the contest! ;)
Comment Written 12-May-2020
reply by the author on 13-May-2020
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Thank you, Yvette.
Comment from Gloria ....
This is very good author. You've taken synonym into a more creative tact in my opinion, and your artwork choice while related, is not even close to the entirety of your intent.
Excellent write and best of luck to you in the voting booth.
Gloria
reply by the author on 10-May-2020
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This is very good author. You've taken synonym into a more creative tact in my opinion, and your artwork choice while related, is not even close to the entirety of your intent.
Excellent write and best of luck to you in the voting booth.
Gloria
Comment Written 10-May-2020
reply by the author on 10-May-2020
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Thank you, Gloria.
Comment from BeasPeas
This is a lovely post, done well, illustrated wonderfully with the newborn. I will assume it is a new addition to your family and say "congratulations" and best of luck in the contest. Thanks, too, for posting the Cinquain requirements. Marilyn
reply by the author on 10-May-2020
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This is a lovely post, done well, illustrated wonderfully with the newborn. I will assume it is a new addition to your family and say "congratulations" and best of luck in the contest. Thanks, too, for posting the Cinquain requirements. Marilyn
Comment Written 09-May-2020
reply by the author on 10-May-2020
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Thank you for your kind review, Marilyn.
Comment from Lorraine Rizzuto
Loved this Cinquain, and such a delightful topic. It places the exact feelings all of us have at the sight of a newborn. They do give us inspiring dreams and new hope for the world that they have been born into.
reply by the author on 10-May-2020
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Loved this Cinquain, and such a delightful topic. It places the exact feelings all of us have at the sight of a newborn. They do give us inspiring dreams and new hope for the world that they have been born into.
Comment Written 09-May-2020
reply by the author on 10-May-2020
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Thank you, Lorraine. You are right. It is the very sight of a newborn that stirs all sorts of emotions within us.
Comment from Michele Harber
First of all, congratulations on the birth of your grandson. He's absolutely beautiful! Your poem so perfectly describes a newborn baby, and does so in excellent Cinquain format. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 09-May-2020
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First of all, congratulations on the birth of your grandson. He's absolutely beautiful! Your poem so perfectly describes a newborn baby, and does so in excellent Cinquain format. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 09-May-2020
reply by the author on 09-May-2020
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Thank you, Michele. I've never done a cinquain that I remember, and the newborn baby seemed like the perfect subject matter.
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Good job on your first Cinquain but let's be honest, newborn babies are the perfect subject matter for anything!!! 😀
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Yes they are.
Comment from irishauthorme
Sorry, just fiver's left-
This is an accurate description of a newborn, the sounds, smells, and sleeps of a new 'little one' are awe inspiring, and indeed, signal "Fresh Hope."
They are so small and helpless, triggering our Care and Protection responses, something that must be from our primal years, otherwise the human race would not have survived.
Good work,
irish
reply by the author on 09-May-2020
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Sorry, just fiver's left-
This is an accurate description of a newborn, the sounds, smells, and sleeps of a new 'little one' are awe inspiring, and indeed, signal "Fresh Hope."
They are so small and helpless, triggering our Care and Protection responses, something that must be from our primal years, otherwise the human race would not have survived.
Good work,
irish
Comment Written 09-May-2020
reply by the author on 09-May-2020
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Thank you, Irish. I hate to post personal poems, but I needed to do something for Benjamin, and I tried to make it universal. I'm glad that it spoke to you.
Comment from Marjon van Bruggen
Lovely cinquain. Newborn babies always appeal to our warmest feelings, don't you think? And so true: it is fresh hope for the future. We have to care for them, nurture them, teach them everything to grow into a responsible, good person who will be able to help bring this distorted earth back to a healthy place to live in.
Good poem!
reply by the author on 09-May-2020
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Lovely cinquain. Newborn babies always appeal to our warmest feelings, don't you think? And so true: it is fresh hope for the future. We have to care for them, nurture them, teach them everything to grow into a responsible, good person who will be able to help bring this distorted earth back to a healthy place to live in.
Good poem!
Comment Written 09-May-2020
reply by the author on 09-May-2020
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Thank you, Marjon. I'm glad that you enjoyed my poem.
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Welcome!
Comment from Amanda Louise Davis
I liked this poem, but it didn't follow the writing prompt instructions. The title was supposed to be the first line, so it had to be two syllables. The 3rd line was also the wrong syllable count.
reply by the author on 09-May-2020
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I liked this poem, but it didn't follow the writing prompt instructions. The title was supposed to be the first line, so it had to be two syllables. The 3rd line was also the wrong syllable count.
Comment Written 09-May-2020
reply by the author on 09-May-2020
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Thank you, Amanda. I will go back and look at it. I did not think that the title had to be the first line. It's an easy fix. I'll check out the rules.
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Just in case, I made the first line the title. I actually like the entry better that way. As to the wrong syllable count, I assume you are referring to "gurgling" which is two. So, I count a correct syllable count. Please let me know if I am missing something.
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It's right. Good job. You improved it so it seems to fit the prompts now.
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Thanks for taking a second look.
Comment from January L'Angelle
That is such an adorable baby! The poem is so cute and really tells what a baby is all about. This is the first Cinquain that I've come across. I like it very much! Well done. -January L.
reply by the author on 09-May-2020
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That is such an adorable baby! The poem is so cute and really tells what a baby is all about. This is the first Cinquain that I've come across. I like it very much! Well done. -January L.
Comment Written 09-May-2020
reply by the author on 09-May-2020
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Thank you, January. It's such an easy format, I thought that I would try it. A newborn baby seemed the perfect subject matter.
