Farmer Brown's Goat
A farmer's goat that causes trouble.26 total reviews
Comment from Ben Colder
Good one. I can see this unfolding. I find nothing wrong and compliment the writer for a job well done. You earned my vote. Best to you and the write. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 16-May-2020
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Good one. I can see this unfolding. I find nothing wrong and compliment the writer for a job well done. You earned my vote. Best to you and the write. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 16-May-2020
reply by the author on 16-May-2020
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Thank you for the review and cool comments and you vote. Can you see this as maybe a Children's book with each stanza on a page with pictures? Several people suggested that.
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It would be nice and yes I would agree.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a fun write and very entertaining, the meter started off okay but then lost its way half way through, nonetheless it is a good story and ideal for the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 16-May-2020
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This is a fun write and very entertaining, the meter started off okay but then lost its way half way through, nonetheless it is a good story and ideal for the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 16-May-2020
reply by the author on 16-May-2020
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Thank you Dolly, I appreciate the review and comments.
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This is good children's literature. There is an underdog for the child to identify with. The underdog feels like a bungler in everything they do. There is a freeing and strengthening of the underdog to encourage the child. Well written. I am voting for this.
reply by the author on 16-May-2020
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This is good children's literature. There is an underdog for the child to identify with. The underdog feels like a bungler in everything they do. There is a freeing and strengthening of the underdog to encourage the child. Well written. I am voting for this.
Comment Written 15-May-2020
reply by the author on 16-May-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and for your comments and vote.
Comment from ESOSTINE
Waoh! I am truly learning a lot here. The poem surly will keep children entertained with its rhythmic flow and some lesson too that being usefully engaged keeps everyone out of trouble, also there is consequence for every action. Great job here. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 16-May-2020
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Waoh! I am truly learning a lot here. The poem surly will keep children entertained with its rhythmic flow and some lesson too that being usefully engaged keeps everyone out of trouble, also there is consequence for every action. Great job here. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-May-2020
reply by the author on 16-May-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and great comment. I like what you wrote.
Comment from Michele Harber
This is adorable. You tell an entire story with full drawn characters and an innocence and bounce that kids will enjoy. Your rhymes work well, and your story is definitely fun to read.
I just want to point out two typos, so they won't mar your story:
- One day the farmer when to town ["when" should be "went"]
- Gip was a proud as he could be [left out the "s" in "as"]
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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This is adorable. You tell an entire story with full drawn characters and an innocence and bounce that kids will enjoy. Your rhymes work well, and your story is definitely fun to read.
I just want to point out two typos, so they won't mar your story:
- One day the farmer when to town ["when" should be "went"]
- Gip was a proud as he could be [left out the "s" in "as"]
Comment Written 15-May-2020
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and for spotting those two typos . I appreciate it.
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No problem. I enjoyed reading your poem very much.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This is an excellent narrative poem in every respect. It tells a great story and conveys an inspirational message about redirecting energy from destructive to productive habits. It is skillfully written and creative.
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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This is an excellent narrative poem in every respect. It tells a great story and conveys an inspirational message about redirecting energy from destructive to productive habits. It is skillfully written and creative.
Comment Written 15-May-2020
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and the affirmative comments.
Comment from zanya
What an enjoyable and fun read for an adult !! the antics of this pair of farm animals - brimming with imagination and a great picture of a goat to illustrate
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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What an enjoyable and fun read for an adult !! the antics of this pair of farm animals - brimming with imagination and a great picture of a goat to illustrate
Comment Written 15-May-2020
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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Thank you for the review and the comments. I'm glad you found it enjoyable.
Comment from A. Louise Robertson
This is an amazing children's story set to rhyme. I enjoyed reading this very much, and I am sure that it would captivate any child if read outloud. You have a real gift for poetry, the story and the writing style are perfect. The picture of the goat is just right too!
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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This is an amazing children's story set to rhyme. I enjoyed reading this very much, and I am sure that it would captivate any child if read outloud. You have a real gift for poetry, the story and the writing style are perfect. The picture of the goat is just right too!
Comment Written 15-May-2020
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and the lovely comment. I enjoyed reading what you said.
Comment from AJ McCall
A perfect poem for children! The rhymes flow well, but I would say change 'prickly pear' part to 'he landed on some prickly pears'. I hope this was helpful. Hope you win!
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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A perfect poem for children! The rhymes flow well, but I would say change 'prickly pear' part to 'he landed on some prickly pears'. I hope this was helpful. Hope you win!
Comment Written 15-May-2020
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and comments.
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No problem!
Comment from Jacob David Collins
I liked that Fred finally realised that he had a role to play and that the farmer didn't have a reason to get rid of him. I thought this was done really well and the mischievous Fred made me smile, it seemed as though there was nothing he couldn't upset. A really enjoyable piece, good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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I liked that Fred finally realised that he had a role to play and that the farmer didn't have a reason to get rid of him. I thought this was done really well and the mischievous Fred made me smile, it seemed as though there was nothing he couldn't upset. A really enjoyable piece, good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 15-May-2020
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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Thank you for the review and comment. I enjoyed reading what you had to say.
