Farmer Brown's Goat
A farmer's goat that causes trouble.26 total reviews
Comment from Margaret Bednar
Ha! We had a Saanen goat when I grew up - and she was the best milker. She nibbled the laundry line and she LOVED the strawberry patch. I've never seen my dad so mad... She loved to butt and play king of the hill which was FINE when she was a little one, but when she grew up (they are good sized goats) it turned into a bad habit (and it hurt). I LOVE this poem - it clips along and is fun. The last stanza needs to be separated - it is currently 8 lines.
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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Ha! We had a Saanen goat when I grew up - and she was the best milker. She nibbled the laundry line and she LOVED the strawberry patch. I've never seen my dad so mad... She loved to butt and play king of the hill which was FINE when she was a little one, but when she grew up (they are good sized goats) it turned into a bad habit (and it hurt). I LOVE this poem - it clips along and is fun. The last stanza needs to be separated - it is currently 8 lines.
Comment Written 15-May-2020
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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Thank you so much for your review and comments. I enjoyed hearing about your goat. I always wanted one. Thanks for noticing the last stanza need separating.
Comment from Precious Owuamalam
Beautiful and just lovely. Oh, my! This has a great sense of humor in it. Poor Fred. He must have learnt a lot. You've written so well. The kids for whom this was written for will surely enjoy it.
Some points to note: In this paragraph: Brown said," Fred you much earn your keep.
It's not enough to eat and sleep.
Free time got you into trouble,
and you turned this farm to rubble.
The last quotation mark is missing. You may want to put it in its place. Again, this sentence :"Fred you much earn your keep" isn't clear. Did you mean to use "must" ?
Nice use of good rhymes. Apart from the aforesaid, you're good to go. My very best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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Beautiful and just lovely. Oh, my! This has a great sense of humor in it. Poor Fred. He must have learnt a lot. You've written so well. The kids for whom this was written for will surely enjoy it.
Some points to note: In this paragraph: Brown said," Fred you much earn your keep.
It's not enough to eat and sleep.
Free time got you into trouble,
and you turned this farm to rubble.
The last quotation mark is missing. You may want to put it in its place. Again, this sentence :"Fred you much earn your keep" isn't clear. Did you mean to use "must" ?
Nice use of good rhymes. Apart from the aforesaid, you're good to go. My very best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 15-May-2020
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and pointing out a couple of thing that need fixing. I really appreciate it.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Wow, what an amazing poem, so far this is my favorite entry in the contest. The structure is like a fable with morale: if you don't earn your food then you might get into trouble:"Now Fred has got himself a chore,
and life's no longer such a bore.
He pulls around a turnip cart
and proud as punch, he does his part."
The children will love this story. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest. You got my vote:)
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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Wow, what an amazing poem, so far this is my favorite entry in the contest. The structure is like a fable with morale: if you don't earn your food then you might get into trouble:"Now Fred has got himself a chore,
and life's no longer such a bore.
He pulls around a turnip cart
and proud as punch, he does his part."
The children will love this story. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest. You got my vote:)
Comment Written 15-May-2020
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and delightful comments. I will appreciate vote if I get it.
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As soon as the vote will begin:)
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Oh this is just a wonderful 'chain of events' read for children -- can just see each page with a differenct quatrain and fun accompanying pic to make up the book!! ;) :) Thanx so much for those giggles and reminders of the old Dr. Seuss this morning! ;) Yvette
spent mot days --> spent most days
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Oh this is just a wonderful 'chain of events' read for children -- can just see each page with a differenct quatrain and fun accompanying pic to make up the book!! ;) :) Thanx so much for those giggles and reminders of the old Dr. Seuss this morning! ;) Yvette
spent mot days --> spent most days
Comment Written 15-May-2020
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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Thank you for the review and great comment. I'll consider making a children's book with each quatrain on a page. I think I could illustrate it. Thanks for seeing the word that had a typo.
Comment from SS. Anjum
Oh this is such a cute poem......well i like the relationship between the goat and dog. It can be compared to the relation between siblings.....if one is in danger, the other tries to hide him from parents. Good luck for contest
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Oh this is such a cute poem......well i like the relationship between the goat and dog. It can be compared to the relation between siblings.....if one is in danger, the other tries to hide him from parents. Good luck for contest
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Comment Written 15-May-2020
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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Thank you for the review. I'm so glad you like it.
Comment from Drew Delaney
A bit of fun on the farm. Nice to see that Fred learned his lesson and now has a full time job pulling a cart. A nicely written entry for the children's rhyming contest.
Drew
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A bit of fun on the farm. Nice to see that Fred learned his lesson and now has a full time job pulling a cart. A nicely written entry for the children's rhyming contest.
Drew
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Comment Written 15-May-2020
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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Thank you for review my poem. I appreciate the comments.
