Comment from Gina Reed

Excellent

I worked in a grocery store for 15 years. I'eve seen to many impatience as customers would wiggle around while standing in line. I became impatient watching them.

 Comment Written 23-May-2020

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reply by the author on 24-May-2020

Thanks for that interesting insight zanya

Comment from January L'Angelle

Excellent

I like this Senryu poem very much. I gave it an excellent. It felt like there should have been something on the bottom line instead of "at grocery store!" It was as if there was a "the" grocery store that was missing, but that would have been too many syllables. I would have tried: "at the grocery!" That's just to make the sentence complete. That's just a suggestion... it's fine the way it stands. I enjoyed it. Well penned. -January

 Comment Written 20-May-2020

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reply by the author on 24-May-2020

Thanks for sharing those insights -much appreciated - zanya

Comment from Pam (respa)

Excellent

-Good artwork.
-The poem goes well
with it, too.
-A good topic, description,
and message.
-The syllable count is good.
-Before our current situation,
I didn't always have a lot
of patience at the grocery store.
-You make a good point about
how things are now, and maybe
we should all be a little more patient.
-Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 20-May-2020

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reply by the author on 24-May-2020

Thanks for reading and insights zanya

reply by Pam (respa) on 24-May-2020

You are welcome. I changed your review.