Spellbound
An Acrostic that will surprise some....51 total reviews
Comment from Gert sherwood
JLR your acrostic poem that say will surprise many be
spellbound; when they see the glory of four or more with white mast sailboat approaching the pier.
Gert
reply by the author on 25-May-2020
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JLR your acrostic poem that say will surprise many be
spellbound; when they see the glory of four or more with white mast sailboat approaching the pier.
Gert
Comment Written 24-May-2020
reply by the author on 25-May-2020
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Gert, thank you!
Comment from bluedragon776
Hey, I love how I believed you were talking about a woman you desired but the final line revealed that you're really speaking about a boat. Nicely done! Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 24-May-2020
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Hey, I love how I believed you were talking about a woman you desired but the final line revealed that you're really speaking about a boat. Nicely done! Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 24-May-2020
reply by the author on 24-May-2020
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bluedragon, yes and thank you for the good wishes, I tied for second place. yeah
Comment from catch22
Hello Poet, this is a good use of imagery that misdirects the reader for the surprise ending. I thought it was cleverly penned. The acrostic had descriptive images, but the flow read a bit stilted in a few places. For instance, in Lines 3 and 4, the end rhyme has different emphasis on the stressed syllable between symmetry and beauty. This difference throws off the rhythm in that part. I think the poem is strong as an acrostic, but could use a little extra attention to flow.
reply by the author on 24-May-2020
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Hello Poet, this is a good use of imagery that misdirects the reader for the surprise ending. I thought it was cleverly penned. The acrostic had descriptive images, but the flow read a bit stilted in a few places. For instance, in Lines 3 and 4, the end rhyme has different emphasis on the stressed syllable between symmetry and beauty. This difference throws off the rhythm in that part. I think the poem is strong as an acrostic, but could use a little extra attention to flow.
Comment Written 24-May-2020
reply by the author on 24-May-2020
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catch22 thanks for the critic I appreciate it. With polish I may have done better than for for second place.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Lulube
That is why boys/men fall in love with their toys. cars, boats, trains, all the same, their comparison is for the fantasy lady. Could be the actual lady at home, but usually the won/one they never had. She sure is a beaut, she never lets me down, look at her curves. I'm honored to be in so many minds. lol
lulube
reply by the author on 24-May-2020
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That is why boys/men fall in love with their toys. cars, boats, trains, all the same, their comparison is for the fantasy lady. Could be the actual lady at home, but usually the won/one they never had. She sure is a beaut, she never lets me down, look at her curves. I'm honored to be in so many minds. lol
lulube
Comment Written 24-May-2020
reply by the author on 24-May-2020
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lulube, thank you for this six -star review, All is so true.
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welcome
lulube
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a very well done Acrostic Poem for the writing prompt.
This describes being spellbound at the site of a boat is well done.
I wish you lots of luck with the contest.
Sharon
reply by the author on 24-May-2020
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I think this is a very well done Acrostic Poem for the writing prompt.
This describes being spellbound at the site of a boat is well done.
I wish you lots of luck with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 24-May-2020
reply by the author on 24-May-2020
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Sharon, thank you.
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
You've done a wonderful job of building and sharing an acrostic about something you admire. A bit tricky, you tease us to think you mean one thing, and then we realize you are describing another.
Great job,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 24-May-2020
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You've done a wonderful job of building and sharing an acrostic about something you admire. A bit tricky, you tease us to think you mean one thing, and then we realize you are describing another.
Great job,
Rhonda
Comment Written 23-May-2020
reply by the author on 24-May-2020
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Rhonda, thank you.
Comment from crzypnter
I love the twist that was so elegantly done. I have had a couple of she's in my time and found out the true meaning of
B break
O out
A another
T thousand
This was a joyful read that bought back some peaceful memories
Thank you for sharing stay safe, God bless
August
reply by the author on 24-May-2020
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I love the twist that was so elegantly done. I have had a couple of she's in my time and found out the true meaning of
B break
O out
A another
T thousand
This was a joyful read that bought back some peaceful memories
Thank you for sharing stay safe, God bless
August
Comment Written 23-May-2020
reply by the author on 24-May-2020
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August, I understand that one way transfer of paying to play :) Thank you for the six-stars and blessings to you and yours this Memorial weekend.
Comment from ImaginosBuzzardoDesdinova
Perhaps I am mistaken, but this puts me in mind of a beautiful tall ship. The poem was very well written in any case. It really reaches out to the reader.
reply by the author on 24-May-2020
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Perhaps I am mistaken, but this puts me in mind of a beautiful tall ship. The poem was very well written in any case. It really reaches out to the reader.
Comment Written 23-May-2020
reply by the author on 24-May-2020
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Yes, you are so correct and 32' sailboat, have a peaceful Memorial weekend.
Comment from tfawcus
A love affair with a difference. What sleek beauty for those who can afford it. Responsive as a lover in both the soft breezes and the storms of passion. Happy sailing!
reply by the author on 23-May-2020
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A love affair with a difference. What sleek beauty for those who can afford it. Responsive as a lover in both the soft breezes and the storms of passion. Happy sailing!
Comment Written 23-May-2020
reply by the author on 23-May-2020
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Yes sir she was a beauty!
Comment from rspoet
Hello JLR,
You've written an excellent acrostic for the contest.
Sounds like a great boat whose allure could not be resisted.
Many have similar experiences with classic cars.
Perfect title for poem and boat.
Best wishes to you.
Robert
reply by the author on 23-May-2020
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Hello JLR,
You've written an excellent acrostic for the contest.
Sounds like a great boat whose allure could not be resisted.
Many have similar experiences with classic cars.
Perfect title for poem and boat.
Best wishes to you.
Robert
Comment Written 23-May-2020
reply by the author on 23-May-2020
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Robert, thanks!
