Spellbound
An Acrostic that will surprise some....51 total reviews
Comment from estory
I like the stream of consciousness style of this, there's great flow to it, and great rhythm. I also liked the images. These blue green jealous eyes, the smooth, almost seductive shape of the boat, the buoyancy in the water. You really painted that scene of the boat enticing you to buy her right on the dock. estory
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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I like the stream of consciousness style of this, there's great flow to it, and great rhythm. I also liked the images. These blue green jealous eyes, the smooth, almost seductive shape of the boat, the buoyancy in the water. You really painted that scene of the boat enticing you to buy her right on the dock. estory
Comment Written 22-May-2020
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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thank you estroy, she was a beauty for certain.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Of course we were surprised! lol. It most definitely is not just a boys toy! I would love one, if I could afford to buy one. Black and sleek. Bliss. I did enjoy your acrostic, you swooned all the way down the page. :)) I could see you staring at it, drooling and wanting to board. Wonderful contest entry, I wish you loads of luck! :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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Of course we were surprised! lol. It most definitely is not just a boys toy! I would love one, if I could afford to buy one. Black and sleek. Bliss. I did enjoy your acrostic, you swooned all the way down the page. :)) I could see you staring at it, drooling and wanting to board. Wonderful contest entry, I wish you loads of luck! :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 22-May-2020
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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Sandra, I delight that you enjoyed my Acostic, Spellbound carried me on many wonderful currents of life, but alas I retired and retired her as well, I am still grieving my loss. :)
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Oh that?s such a shame. But you still have your memories. xxx
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is a tantalizing poem. I thought of a woman until I got to the end.
It is said, how a man treats his vehicle is how he will treat his woman. I would say the same applies to his boat. Just from your writing I think your woman and your boat are blessed!
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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This is a tantalizing poem. I thought of a woman until I got to the end.
It is said, how a man treats his vehicle is how he will treat his woman. I would say the same applies to his boat. Just from your writing I think your woman and your boat are blessed!
Comment Written 22-May-2020
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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Rebecca, you are a dear! Yes in both regards. A man must take very good care of those who make his life so grand!
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You hit the nail on the head!
Comment from write hand blue
An acrostic poem is not the easiest of subjects to get right. You have managed to make this sound unforced and natural. It must be, some special sort of thirty two footer. I imagine there are some beauties out there. Interesting and well crafted a great read. ~Mel~
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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An acrostic poem is not the easiest of subjects to get right. You have managed to make this sound unforced and natural. It must be, some special sort of thirty two footer. I imagine there are some beauties out there. Interesting and well crafted a great read. ~Mel~
Comment Written 22-May-2020
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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Mel thank you, she was a beauty that provided me with many wonderful memories, but like all boys toys, when I retired last year I retired her also. Still grieving :)
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My condolences. LOL
Comment from ElPoetry001
The structure of you story is supported by strong descriptions. Sort of like "rebar," except different.
As you have stated so well architecture follows Nature.
Even "rebar" that is used to reinforce concrete comes from Nature.
The strong fibrous strands found in plant leaves support the long leaves of giant plants.
Similar to the long metal bars inserted into columns and beams.
You already knew that when you wove those strong supporting words into your story.
We can learn much from Nature by "spending" some of our energy and "paying attention."
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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The structure of you story is supported by strong descriptions. Sort of like "rebar," except different.
As you have stated so well architecture follows Nature.
Even "rebar" that is used to reinforce concrete comes from Nature.
The strong fibrous strands found in plant leaves support the long leaves of giant plants.
Similar to the long metal bars inserted into columns and beams.
You already knew that when you wove those strong supporting words into your story.
We can learn much from Nature by "spending" some of our energy and "paying attention."
Comment Written 22-May-2020
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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ElPoetry, I danced with every word of your reflection of this poem thank you for this artistic reflection.
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Thank you
Comment from Bichon
This was an interesting acrostic poem! I presume you are speaking about a very nice boat, of some sorts? I liked the happy tone in the poem also, really stood out!
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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This was an interesting acrostic poem! I presume you are speaking about a very nice boat, of some sorts? I liked the happy tone in the poem also, really stood out!
Comment Written 22-May-2020
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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Bichon, yes a fun 32' sailboat. I enjoyed playing with this, the boat and the poem, some levity these days is good medicine.
Comment from Frank Jauregui
Blessings, I found your Acrostic very entertaining, I took your description as a challenge, I thought I was right in thinking you were writing about a boat you'd bought but still I thought the other option might be true. LOL! Relieved to find it was a boat and not the other, in your notes.
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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Blessings, I found your Acrostic very entertaining, I took your description as a challenge, I thought I was right in thinking you were writing about a boat you'd bought but still I thought the other option might be true. LOL! Relieved to find it was a boat and not the other, in your notes.
Comment Written 22-May-2020
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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Frank, you are so correct, very relieved myself, nice to put a little levity into this one,
Comment from Alchera
The acrostic is well written throughout its versification subject flirt matter or renting a first sight attractive woman for fun found along the pier of Brighton if I don't mistake. I like the interwoven way as You have move d your threads along the running-on- lines. Was it a pleasant choice and walk? Great job!
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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The acrostic is well written throughout its versification subject flirt matter or renting a first sight attractive woman for fun found along the pier of Brighton if I don't mistake. I like the interwoven way as You have move d your threads along the running-on- lines. Was it a pleasant choice and walk? Great job!
Comment Written 22-May-2020
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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Tony, a pleasant choice and walk combined, but the pier is Santa Barbara.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I'm not quite sure what this acrostic is about and you present a wonderful pier here wherever this is? A spellbound is a toy? An impulsive buy as you describe your joy at buying this object, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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I'm not quite sure what this acrostic is about and you present a wonderful pier here wherever this is? A spellbound is a toy? An impulsive buy as you describe your joy at buying this object, love Dolly x
Comment Written 22-May-2020
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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Hi Dolly in the author notes, she was a 32' sailboat. Yes an impulsive buy. Her name was Spellbound.
Comment from January L'Angelle
Boy's and their toys. I can see you Mystery Writer, SPELLBOUND over the boat of your dreams. I like this poem because it is at it's core, fun. The writing is very good and the photo goes really well. Great job. -January L.
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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Boy's and their toys. I can see you Mystery Writer, SPELLBOUND over the boat of your dreams. I like this poem because it is at it's core, fun. The writing is very good and the photo goes really well. Great job. -January L.
Comment Written 21-May-2020
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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January, thank you! you are so correct, very relieved myself, nice to put a little levity into this one,
