Remembering Yesterday
Viewing comments for Chapter 37 "Holidays and Another Year"A widow's journey into her relationship with her
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Comment from Spitfire
A lot of events packed in here. I hear you about the Xmas present. I can hint all year long, but hubby doesn't get it and buys something I don't care about.
What a horrible Christmas. I'm in awe that blood relations can't at least fake it for one day of the year.
Humorous stories about the birthday party and the baby chicks.
How sweet of you husband to want to take your mother along. My husband would have done something like that. But what a trip. I can picture your mom holding six dripping cones. LOL
reply by the author on 25-May-2020
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A lot of events packed in here. I hear you about the Xmas present. I can hint all year long, but hubby doesn't get it and buys something I don't care about.
What a horrible Christmas. I'm in awe that blood relations can't at least fake it for one day of the year.
Humorous stories about the birthday party and the baby chicks.
How sweet of you husband to want to take your mother along. My husband would have done something like that. But what a trip. I can picture your mom holding six dripping cones. LOL
Comment Written 24-May-2020
reply by the author on 25-May-2020
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Thanks so much for the review and comments. As for the Christmas with relatives, even now with my kids and grandkids and in-laws someone always gets roasted when we get together. So far, we are all still speaking. The next part of the trip gets worse.
Beth
Comment from Ben Colder
I can see your mother with all that ice cream. Sounds like something mine would have done. You bring so many great thoughts back of wonderful times and great people I once knew. Excellent, I am enjoying this.
reply by the author on 24-May-2020
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I can see your mother with all that ice cream. Sounds like something mine would have done. You bring so many great thoughts back of wonderful times and great people I once knew. Excellent, I am enjoying this.
Comment Written 24-May-2020
reply by the author on 24-May-2020
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I'm so glad you like it. My mom was an interesting character. She was a good person, but she was capable of doing some crazy stuff. You know I very pleased with the six starss. Thank for sticking with me on this.
Beth
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It brings back so many related situations in my personal life.
Stars well deserved.
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
I can see you all on the trip! We have done the traveling bit with five children at a time, and it was purely nerve wracking to say the least. Loved this chapter.
reply by the author on 24-May-2020
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I can see you all on the trip! We have done the traveling bit with five children at a time, and it was purely nerve wracking to say the least. Loved this chapter.
Comment Written 24-May-2020
reply by the author on 24-May-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and comments. The trip gets worse in the next chapter. At least I won' t be jumping around as much in this. It's pretty much about the trip.
Beth
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You write so well. It's very enjoyable.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
In P4 sibling should be siblings
In P5/L10, Wee hours of next needs "the" between of and next.
In P6, No need for "in part" after due - redundant from sentence before it.
In P8/L1, Children should not be capitalized.
In P11/L9, you need the word "a" between was and such.
In that same paragraph, boys should be boy's.
In P12/L6, you need an "a" between had and nightmare.
In P13 hippy's should be hippies.
In P14, Carol should be Carol's. Ad should be at. Get should be gets. And you need the word "the" in front of girls.
In L8 of that same paragraph, you need a "the" before rest.
In P26, span should be spans. Name should be named. You need the word "a" before loss. a fresh should be of fresh.
reply by the author on 24-May-2020
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In P4 sibling should be siblings
In P5/L10, Wee hours of next needs "the" between of and next.
In P6, No need for "in part" after due - redundant from sentence before it.
In P8/L1, Children should not be capitalized.
In P11/L9, you need the word "a" between was and such.
In that same paragraph, boys should be boy's.
In P12/L6, you need an "a" between had and nightmare.
In P13 hippy's should be hippies.
In P14, Carol should be Carol's. Ad should be at. Get should be gets. And you need the word "the" in front of girls.
In L8 of that same paragraph, you need a "the" before rest.
In P26, span should be spans. Name should be named. You need the word "a" before loss. a fresh should be of fresh.
Comment Written 24-May-2020
reply by the author on 24-May-2020
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Thank you so much for finding all those errors. I think I've corrected them all. I'll nominate you for a reviewer if I haven't already.
Beth
Comment from Lucy de Welles
Your memory is very good! I think that writing helps bring things back. You have an interesting family and you chronicle the happenings in an interesting way. This will be a good legacy to leave for your children. Thank you for sharing your life with all of us :)
You may want to run your work through the grammar/spell checker to complete the smoothness.
Well done!
reply by the author on 24-May-2020
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Your memory is very good! I think that writing helps bring things back. You have an interesting family and you chronicle the happenings in an interesting way. This will be a good legacy to leave for your children. Thank you for sharing your life with all of us :)
You may want to run your work through the grammar/spell checker to complete the smoothness.
Well done!
Comment Written 24-May-2020
reply by the author on 24-May-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and comments. I appreciate you being willing to read it. This one was a bit long. Every time I read it, I find things I've missed. I just finished correcting some things but I'm sure there is more.
Beth
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Looked good to me, but we have different pairs of eyes :)
Comment from royowen
I just read your author notes, and admire why you're writing this Beth, that is noble, and even if nobody reads a single work of mine, I know on day my grandkids will want to know me better, probably when I'm not here. We have made many family camping trips, some with mum, but we always had a caravan, so it was more comfortable, well done, most enjoyable Beth, well done, blessings, Roy
Typo : Since there was such (a) large group.
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reply by the author on 24-May-2020
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I just read your author notes, and admire why you're writing this Beth, that is noble, and even if nobody reads a single work of mine, I know on day my grandkids will want to know me better, probably when I'm not here. We have made many family camping trips, some with mum, but we always had a caravan, so it was more comfortable, well done, most enjoyable Beth, well done, blessings, Roy
Typo : Since there was such (a) large group.
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Comment Written 24-May-2020
reply by the author on 24-May-2020
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Thank you Roy, I really appreciate the great comments and the review. Thanks for catching the spag.
Beth
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Most welcome Beth
Comment from zanya
This episode is packed with family fun and family rows - all part of family life and a great idea to have a road trip together - all the joys of family life together -thanks for sharing -really enjoying the sense of immediacy of the writing style -as if it is all happening here and now !
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reply by the author on 24-May-2020
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This episode is packed with family fun and family rows - all part of family life and a great idea to have a road trip together - all the joys of family life together -thanks for sharing -really enjoying the sense of immediacy of the writing style -as if it is all happening here and now !
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Comment Written 24-May-2020
reply by the author on 24-May-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and comments. I'm so glad you like it.
Beth
