House For Sale
Shadows Included8 total reviews
Comment from AprilViolet
This poem is just so beautifully haunting. Definitely unique in that it can be interpreted in different ways. You sure have a knack with words. Good luck in your contest!!!!
reply by the author on 26-May-2020
This poem is just so beautifully haunting. Definitely unique in that it can be interpreted in different ways. You sure have a knack with words. Good luck in your contest!!!!
Comment Written 26-May-2020
reply by the author on 26-May-2020
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Thank you for beautiful stars, it's really appreciated.
Comment from R. Hiland
Very well done. The rhymes are appropriate and not intrusive or forced. Metrically good, though a couple of lines I had to break rhythm to find the proper cadence.
Did you intend to alter the rhyme scheme in stanza 3? It doesn't change my appreciation of your work--just curious. Nice work over all. Good luck.
not perfect.
reply by the author on 26-May-2020
Very well done. The rhymes are appropriate and not intrusive or forced. Metrically good, though a couple of lines I had to break rhythm to find the proper cadence.
Did you intend to alter the rhyme scheme in stanza 3? It doesn't change my appreciation of your work--just curious. Nice work over all. Good luck.
not perfect.
Comment Written 25-May-2020
reply by the author on 26-May-2020
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Thank you for reading my poem. To be honest, I don't really pay attention to form, structure or meter. I just write whatever sounds good to me. Thanks again
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello my friend
Beautiful entry for the
Love Bites writing prompt contest. Wonderful poetic form and presentation. Your well chosen words flow nicely. Well done.
Your story is spooky..I like that.
reply by the author on 26-May-2020
Hello my friend
Beautiful entry for the
Love Bites writing prompt contest. Wonderful poetic form and presentation. Your well chosen words flow nicely. Well done.
Your story is spooky..I like that.
Comment Written 25-May-2020
reply by the author on 26-May-2020
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Thank you for that encouraging review, it means a lot to me. :)
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
So mystic or hallucinated state they experienced at the house, love's cruel twisted game harassed and caused losses; ultimately the house is haunted; well said, well done; enjoyed the read; thank you for sharing this; keep writing. Good luck for the contest. ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 26-May-2020
So mystic or hallucinated state they experienced at the house, love's cruel twisted game harassed and caused losses; ultimately the house is haunted; well said, well done; enjoyed the read; thank you for sharing this; keep writing. Good luck for the contest. ALCREATOR
Comment Written 25-May-2020
reply by the author on 26-May-2020
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Thank you for this great interview and for reading my poem.
Comment from zanya
A very powerful image of a love gone horribly wrong is conveyed here within these stanzas- almost a chill reverberates through the stanzas - akin to a story in a poem - thanks for sharing -
reply by the author on 26-May-2020
A very powerful image of a love gone horribly wrong is conveyed here within these stanzas- almost a chill reverberates through the stanzas - akin to a story in a poem - thanks for sharing -
Comment Written 25-May-2020
reply by the author on 26-May-2020
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Thank you so much for this great interview.
Comment from The_Boy_Whodunnit
I think this tells a wonderful story, building the characters and emotions with some original descriptions. I think the metaphor of lost love being like a ghost story works really effectively
reply by the author on 26-May-2020
I think this tells a wonderful story, building the characters and emotions with some original descriptions. I think the metaphor of lost love being like a ghost story works really effectively
Comment Written 25-May-2020
reply by the author on 26-May-2020
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Thank you for reading my poem and understanding it's meaning.
Comment from Lucy de Welles
Powerfully written story here. What a Photo! Compliments perfectly. Can feel the haunt. This lady seriously has to "Let Go and Let God!" Beautifully composed text. Nothing to improve here.
Thank you for the opportunity to read your fine poetry.
Well done!
reply by the author on 25-May-2020
Powerfully written story here. What a Photo! Compliments perfectly. Can feel the haunt. This lady seriously has to "Let Go and Let God!" Beautifully composed text. Nothing to improve here.
Thank you for the opportunity to read your fine poetry.
Well done!
Comment Written 25-May-2020
reply by the author on 25-May-2020
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Thank you for your nice comments, I'm so ,glad you liked it.
Comment from joycetreasures
Hello,
I pray you are well, as well as your family during this pandemic. I like the haunted house artwork with the bride in the doorway, you used to reflect your poem message. The haunted house is a sad place to live in with the broken relationship that has broken a heart in it now. So many relationship starts out with two loving hearts, then one day it's over. The one who loves the most is the one usually with a broken heart and feeling the pain, and sad memories. Her pain was so hard to live with, it was time to sale the house! Life can sometime throw you a curveball sometimes. Well-done. No errors. Happy writing:-) Happy Memorial Day tomorrow.
reply by the author on 25-May-2020
Hello,
I pray you are well, as well as your family during this pandemic. I like the haunted house artwork with the bride in the doorway, you used to reflect your poem message. The haunted house is a sad place to live in with the broken relationship that has broken a heart in it now. So many relationship starts out with two loving hearts, then one day it's over. The one who loves the most is the one usually with a broken heart and feeling the pain, and sad memories. Her pain was so hard to live with, it was time to sale the house! Life can sometime throw you a curveball sometimes. Well-done. No errors. Happy writing:-) Happy Memorial Day tomorrow.
Comment Written 24-May-2020
reply by the author on 25-May-2020
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Thank you for reading and reviewing my poem.. it's much appreciated. :)
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You are so welcome. Please have a blessed day:-)