A Desire to Kill
a La Tigre assassin 500-word story17 total reviews
Comment from Aiona
Wonderful descriptions. I like very much how you incorporate those descriptions into her thoughts about the person. It allows less exposition, and more insight into the main character of the story. I didn't see any typos, if there were any, because I was pretty engaged in the story.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
  |
Wonderful descriptions. I like very much how you incorporate those descriptions into her thoughts about the person. It allows less exposition, and more insight into the main character of the story. I didn't see any typos, if there were any, because I was pretty engaged in the story.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
-
I truly appreciate your kind praise of my story, Aiona. I am especially pleased you enjoyed the descriptions. Rod
Comment from lyenochka
Oh my! I wonder how she managed to tie him up and take him to the desert. I guess those details aren't possible in 500 words. You gave us an inside look at a mob family and the rationale for La Tigre and her ability to kill. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2020
|
Oh my! I wonder how she managed to tie him up and take him to the desert. I guess those details aren't possible in 500 words. You gave us an inside look at a mob family and the rationale for La Tigre and her ability to kill. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 01-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2020
-
Thank you so much, lyenochka, for sharing my story. Yes, that word max makes it difficult to give details. I have posted six other La Tigre stories which give more details. I introduced her in one called ?Hit Me.? Rod
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Wow, no exceptions made here. I wonder what he'd done that warranted his assassination. If it was for the same thing that had happened to her, then a good job was done! Well done, I enjoyed that. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 31-May-2020
|
Wow, no exceptions made here. I wonder what he'd done that warranted his assassination. If it was for the same thing that had happened to her, then a good job was done! Well done, I enjoyed that. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 31-May-2020
reply by the author on 31-May-2020
-
Hi, Sandra. Thank you so much for sharing A DESIRE TO KILL. Yes, when Aldo calls Acadia a ?monster,? I mean to suggest the man is very much like those who raped Corinne years ago. Rod
Comment from pome lover
wow, Rod, that was some story. And you started it off, perfectly, with a bang. :)(the thought of a bang, anyway) - also from a female's point of view - different and interesting when written by a man. Of course, an English teacher knows all the writing tricks.
Have you ever submitted any of your novels to publishers?
At any rate, it's very good and I enjoyed it.
Katharine - pome lover
reply by the author on 30-May-2020
|
wow, Rod, that was some story. And you started it off, perfectly, with a bang. :)(the thought of a bang, anyway) - also from a female's point of view - different and interesting when written by a man. Of course, an English teacher knows all the writing tricks.
Have you ever submitted any of your novels to publishers?
At any rate, it's very good and I enjoyed it.
Katharine - pome lover
Comment Written 30-May-2020
reply by the author on 30-May-2020
-
I am so pleased you enjoyed A DESIRE TO KILL, Katharine, and am flattered by your praise. No, the novels remain unpublished. This is the sixth La Tigre story. You might want to check out the others in my Portfolio. The first was HIT ME. Rod
Comment from Bill Pinder
You have written an excellent assassination story with an interesting lady who is a hired killer. Good luck in the contest and keep sharing your creativity. Bill
reply by the author on 30-May-2020
|
You have written an excellent assassination story with an interesting lady who is a hired killer. Good luck in the contest and keep sharing your creativity. Bill
Comment Written 30-May-2020
reply by the author on 30-May-2020
-
Thank you, Bill, for sharing my story and your praise of La Tigre.
Comment from Elon Vaughn
Certainly understand about handsome men and very bad handsome men. I was a bit surprised that the assassin used a .22, but I know that if that bullet hits the right spot, it can kill.
reply by the author on 29-May-2020
|
Certainly understand about handsome men and very bad handsome men. I was a bit surprised that the assassin used a .22, but I know that if that bullet hits the right spot, it can kill.
Comment Written 29-May-2020
reply by the author on 29-May-2020
-
Thank you very much for sharing A DESIRE TO KILL.
Comment from Bill Schott
This story, A Desire to Kill, is a passion-filled story with a character who is stone cold when it comes to doing the deed. La Tigre's past is quickly inserted so as to cement her unquestioning loyalty to Aldo. Well told.
reply by the author on 29-May-2020
|
This story, A Desire to Kill, is a passion-filled story with a character who is stone cold when it comes to doing the deed. La Tigre's past is quickly inserted so as to cement her unquestioning loyalty to Aldo. Well told.
Comment Written 29-May-2020
reply by the author on 29-May-2020
-
Hi Bill. Thank you so much for your high praise of my story. So far you are the only reviewer who understands how La Tigre?s past is ?cemented to her unquestioning loyalty to Aldo.?
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is a wonderful piece of writing that caught my attention from the beginning all the way to the end. This should do well in the Assassinate Me A Thriller! writing contest. Good luck.
reply by the author on 29-May-2020
|
This is a wonderful piece of writing that caught my attention from the beginning all the way to the end. This should do well in the Assassinate Me A Thriller! writing contest. Good luck.
Comment Written 29-May-2020
reply by the author on 29-May-2020
-
Thank you, Rebecca, for sharing my short story and your encouraging review. I am especially pleased the story was engaging from beginning to end.
-
/you're welcome.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Assassinate Me A Thriller writing prompt.
This short story is clear and well told.
Well done and I wish you good luck with the contest.
Sharon
reply by the author on 29-May-2020
|
I think this is a good entry for the Assassinate Me A Thriller writing prompt.
This short story is clear and well told.
Well done and I wish you good luck with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 29-May-2020
reply by the author on 29-May-2020
-
I am so pleased you think my story is ?clear and well told,? Sharon. Many thanks for your kind praise.
Comment from LisaMay
This is dramatically gripping - very well written. The details flesh out the characters, the locations, and the situation clearly. I thought your description of Acadia was brilliant: Acadia was Hollywood-handsome and much too impressed with himself... His glossy black hair was combed straight back from a high forehead and slate-gray eyes glittered behind a thicket of black lashes.
reply by the author on 29-May-2020
 |
This is dramatically gripping - very well written. The details flesh out the characters, the locations, and the situation clearly. I thought your description of Acadia was brilliant: Acadia was Hollywood-handsome and much too impressed with himself... His glossy black hair was combed straight back from a high forehead and slate-gray eyes glittered behind a thicket of black lashes.
Comment Written 29-May-2020
reply by the author on 29-May-2020
-
Thank you very much, Lisa, for your wonderful praise of my short story and those six bright stars. I am especially gratified you found my tale ?dramatically gripping? and liked my description of Acadia.
