Antiques and Such
Something lovely this way comes43 total reviews
Comment from Joann Alexander
I certainly wasn't expecting the ending to this poem. I love the way you write, so descriptive. It creates a story that reminds us that we don't always know what's behind the door or "mask" that people present to us.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2020
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I certainly wasn't expecting the ending to this poem. I love the way you write, so descriptive. It creates a story that reminds us that we don't always know what's behind the door or "mask" that people present to us.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2020
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Thank you for reading and reviewing my poem, and for your nice words.
Comment from Raul1
The mask sure does have its way into her desires. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Congratulations on winning the contest! Nice work. Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2020
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The mask sure does have its way into her desires. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Congratulations on winning the contest! Nice work. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 11-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2020
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Thank you, you're very kind . I'm glad you liked my poem. :)
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You're welcome.
Comment from mvbrooks
Wow-enchanting story with a twist on Dorian Gray--and an unexpected ending. The rhyme flows and the description draws the reader in. The contrast of the elegant mask and the worn shoes and clothes gave the impression that the mask would magically transform her life. Unexpected that it ended her life and transformed the shop owner's. I can see why you won the contest.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2020
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Wow-enchanting story with a twist on Dorian Gray--and an unexpected ending. The rhyme flows and the description draws the reader in. The contrast of the elegant mask and the worn shoes and clothes gave the impression that the mask would magically transform her life. Unexpected that it ended her life and transformed the shop owner's. I can see why you won the contest.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2020
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing my poem. I'm so glad you liked it. Much appreciated. :)
Comment from Kathleen S.
Well that is a spell binding poem if I have heard one before. You've captured a spirit of mystery and enchantment in it. Your poem is super clever and descriptive. You should definitely publish this in a book, if you haven't already. K.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2020
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Well that is a spell binding poem if I have heard one before. You've captured a spirit of mystery and enchantment in it. Your poem is super clever and descriptive. You should definitely publish this in a book, if you haven't already. K.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2020
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Thank you so much for this fantastic review and the 6 star rating. It means a lot to me.
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You're welcome. :)
Comment from joycetreasures
Hello Boogienights,
I pray you are doing well doing the global pandemic. I love you enchanted and sad poem of mystic. I can see why you won the contest. Congrats!! It's a beautiful message. A masque that did things to the owner, takes her soul and waits for the next one. Your poem is a lovely message and story. Also, I like how you made your end words rhyme. Well-done. Happy writing in the future.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2020
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Hello Boogienights,
I pray you are doing well doing the global pandemic. I love you enchanted and sad poem of mystic. I can see why you won the contest. Congrats!! It's a beautiful message. A masque that did things to the owner, takes her soul and waits for the next one. Your poem is a lovely message and story. Also, I like how you made your end words rhyme. Well-done. Happy writing in the future.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2020
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Thank you so much for this great review. I'm so glad you liked it. :)
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You are so welcome. Stay blessed.
Comment from Bill Pinder
Amazing poem that is so well written and deserved to win the contest. This is a great example of a story in a poem that is written with great rhythm and rhyme. Thanks for sharing your creativity. Bill
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2020
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Amazing poem that is so well written and deserved to win the contest. This is a great example of a story in a poem that is written with great rhythm and rhyme. Thanks for sharing your creativity. Bill
Comment Written 11-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2020
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Thank you.... You're very kind. I really appreciate you reading my poem, and for the wonderful 6 stars. :)
Comment from lightink
I'm very much captivated by this story, you created such a mysterious, magical world! The mask as a symbol and cursed object, the well worked out character, who is clearly not very rich nor high in self worth - and the shop keepers secret - your poem holds attention pretty amazingly.
The only thing I would possibly play with is sticking with a little more 'constant' syllable count throughout the poem: 8/6/8/6 (and letting it differ in the last stanza, exactly as you did, 6/6/8/6 - it's a nice way to emphasize the ending of the story). But of course, this is all a matter of preference - I like very clean, steady form with rhyming poetry.
Fascinating story! Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2020
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I'm very much captivated by this story, you created such a mysterious, magical world! The mask as a symbol and cursed object, the well worked out character, who is clearly not very rich nor high in self worth - and the shop keepers secret - your poem holds attention pretty amazingly.
The only thing I would possibly play with is sticking with a little more 'constant' syllable count throughout the poem: 8/6/8/6 (and letting it differ in the last stanza, exactly as you did, 6/6/8/6 - it's a nice way to emphasize the ending of the story). But of course, this is all a matter of preference - I like very clean, steady form with rhyming poetry.
Fascinating story! Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 10-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2020
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Thank you for this lovely review, I really appreciate it. :)
Comment from Therese Caron
What an enchanting poem. It kept me spellbound as I read it, not knowing how the poem would turn out. She sounded so beautiful and so graceful with her mask on. She was like Cinderella, beautiful and secret, but then ran after it was time to reveal herself. I am not surprised you won the contest. Wonderfully written poem!
Terry
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2020
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What an enchanting poem. It kept me spellbound as I read it, not knowing how the poem would turn out. She sounded so beautiful and so graceful with her mask on. She was like Cinderella, beautiful and secret, but then ran after it was time to reveal herself. I am not surprised you won the contest. Wonderfully written poem!
Terry
Comment Written 10-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2020
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Thank you for reading my poem and for this very nice review.
Comment from richie b
Boogienights,
Wow! No wonder you won the mask contest.
Your story behind the poem is very creative.
A Cinderella fairy tale gone bad.
Your rhyming schemes are natural and drive
your poem.
Your are a fine poet, mature and sophisticated.
I look forward to reading more of your poetry.
Blessings,
Richie b
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reply by the author on 10-Jun-2020
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Boogienights,
Wow! No wonder you won the mask contest.
Your story behind the poem is very creative.
A Cinderella fairy tale gone bad.
Your rhyming schemes are natural and drive
your poem.
Your are a fine poet, mature and sophisticated.
I look forward to reading more of your poetry.
Blessings,
Richie b
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Comment Written 10-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2020
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Thank you so much, I'm glad you liked it. I value the opinions of my fellow writers, and I appreciate the 6 stars. I look forward to reading your work as well. :)
Comment from w.j.debi
Excellent storytelling in this poem. It starts out feeling like a romantic tale with the masquerade and the wonderful evening of possibly falling in love. But then you throw in the twist at the end and it becomes a horror story.
I see you won the contest. Congratulations. Well deserved.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2020
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Excellent storytelling in this poem. It starts out feeling like a romantic tale with the masquerade and the wonderful evening of possibly falling in love. But then you throw in the twist at the end and it becomes a horror story.
I see you won the contest. Congratulations. Well deserved.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2020
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Thank you so much for reading my poem..I'm glad you liked it.
