Antiques and Such
Something lovely this way comes43 total reviews
Comment from Marjon van Bruggen
This is really beautifully written. A lovely story too, a bit mysterious, a mask does that to a person. An antique mask, with mystic powers, renders even an old and lived-through woman into a desirable, alluring woman.
I enjoyed this very much!
Much luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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This is really beautifully written. A lovely story too, a bit mysterious, a mask does that to a person. An antique mask, with mystic powers, renders even an old and lived-through woman into a desirable, alluring woman.
I enjoyed this very much!
Much luck in the contest!
Comment Written 02-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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Thank you for this nice review ....I'm glad you liked it. :)
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welcome!
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
Oh, my. This deserves six stars if I had any left! What a grand story told in a poetic form. It is easy to read and understand. I was caught from beginning to end, Lovely!
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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Oh, my. This deserves six stars if I had any left! What a grand story told in a poetic form. It is easy to read and understand. I was caught from beginning to end, Lovely!
Comment Written 02-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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Thank you for reading my poem, and for your kind words.
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You're welcome.
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Antiques and Stuff, presented in 8-6-8-6 metered ABCB-rhymed quatrains, tells a fantastic tale of magical allure, hearts captured, then sadly, a life sacrificed to the cursed mask. Well worded, I followed the tale through as it was rapidly unfolded.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2020
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This poem, Antiques and Stuff, presented in 8-6-8-6 metered ABCB-rhymed quatrains, tells a fantastic tale of magical allure, hearts captured, then sadly, a life sacrificed to the cursed mask. Well worded, I followed the tale through as it was rapidly unfolded.
Comment Written 31-May-2020
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2020
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Thank you for this nice review...I'm glad it held your attention.
Comment from fluffnstuff
WOWSERS i HAD TO READ IT TWICE AND THEN CAME THE IMPACT. tHIS IS AN INCREDIBLE POEM LADY. i BET YOU HIT THE TOP WITH THIS ONE. REALLY INCREDIBLE WRITE. HUGS FLUFF
reply by the author on 30-May-2020
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WOWSERS i HAD TO READ IT TWICE AND THEN CAME THE IMPACT. tHIS IS AN INCREDIBLE POEM LADY. i BET YOU HIT THE TOP WITH THIS ONE. REALLY INCREDIBLE WRITE. HUGS FLUFF
Comment Written 30-May-2020
reply by the author on 30-May-2020
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Thank you for this awesome review...it makes my day. Also for the 6 shining stars. You are so generous. Have a wonderful weekend. :)
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my pleasure
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my pleasure
Comment from AprilViolet
What a twist ending! It gave me the chills! I will definitely think twice before purchasing second hand masks from now one. Deserves a six star rating! Exceptional work!
reply by the author on 30-May-2020
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What a twist ending! It gave me the chills! I will definitely think twice before purchasing second hand masks from now one. Deserves a six star rating! Exceptional work!
Comment Written 29-May-2020
reply by the author on 30-May-2020
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Thank you so much for your kind words
Comment from nancy_e_davis
This is a wonderful spooky story about a exceptionally beautiful mask that wooed both male and female, but robbed them of their youthful beauty so the Antic dealer could remain young and beautiful. I think I have it right?
Perfect meter and rhyme. Well done, my friend. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 29-May-2020
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This is a wonderful spooky story about a exceptionally beautiful mask that wooed both male and female, but robbed them of their youthful beauty so the Antic dealer could remain young and beautiful. I think I have it right?
Perfect meter and rhyme. Well done, my friend. Nancy:)
Comment Written 29-May-2020
reply by the author on 29-May-2020
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You do have it right! Thank you, my daughter didn't at first. I appreciate the 6 star review, it means a lot. :)
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about the antique mask you found in an antique shop for a special masked ceremony you matched it with your dress and it was a perfect day.
reply by the author on 29-May-2020
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A very well-written poem about the antique mask you found in an antique shop for a special masked ceremony you matched it with your dress and it was a perfect day.
Comment Written 29-May-2020
reply by the author on 29-May-2020
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Thank you for taking time to read and review my poem. :)
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a sad story but also very mysterious with a gentle and touching meaning, I enjoyed this presentation and I loved the delicate and orange mask in your story, magical and fanciful, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 29-May-2020
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This is a sad story but also very mysterious with a gentle and touching meaning, I enjoyed this presentation and I loved the delicate and orange mask in your story, magical and fanciful, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 29-May-2020
reply by the author on 29-May-2020
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I used to love stories with a bit of a supernatural twist to them, it carried over to my poetry. Thanks so much for reading.
Comment from Gloria ....
I think this is a terrific response to the prompt. A story in a poem written in solid metre and rhymes and we get a clear idea of the power of this "antiques and such" mask that led to another trapped soul.
My only suggestion is to use the large presentation because these lines wrap around in odd ways.
Excellent job and I wish you great luck with the voters.
Gloria
reply by the author on 29-May-2020
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I think this is a terrific response to the prompt. A story in a poem written in solid metre and rhymes and we get a clear idea of the power of this "antiques and such" mask that led to another trapped soul.
My only suggestion is to use the large presentation because these lines wrap around in odd ways.
Excellent job and I wish you great luck with the voters.
Gloria
Comment Written 29-May-2020
reply by the author on 29-May-2020
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Thank you for your suggestion and for reading my poem. I really appreciate it. :)
Comment from Peter Henrich
Hmmm... I find myself disturbed by this story. A woman apparently of modest means indulged herself and... oof, then something that could be from Tales from the Crypt.
I gave 5 stars though I'd prefer to give it 4.5. There seem to two shifts in the point of view, one in stanza 9 and the other in stanza 14.
The first shift jarred me and took me out of the story.
The second felt simply out of place.
Still, great job evoking emotions.
reply by the author on 29-May-2020
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Hmmm... I find myself disturbed by this story. A woman apparently of modest means indulged herself and... oof, then something that could be from Tales from the Crypt.
I gave 5 stars though I'd prefer to give it 4.5. There seem to two shifts in the point of view, one in stanza 9 and the other in stanza 14.
The first shift jarred me and took me out of the story.
The second felt simply out of place.
Still, great job evoking emotions.
Comment Written 28-May-2020
reply by the author on 29-May-2020
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Thanks for reading and for this great review. Thanks also for your helpful observations. Have a very enjoyable weekend. :)
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With your advice in mind I revised the poem and would love to know what you think.
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I love the revision :) The flow the story is fluid like drifting on a raft down a river.
Great job!
