White Bread
Dialogue between mom and son with few speech tags39 total reviews
Comment from Mastery
Hi Diae. This is an outstanding essay in narrative form. I think you summed up the situation going on today with this though:
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Could be. I think a lot of folks are angry and frustrated and they want to be heard. And their anger has reached a tipping point. Make no mistake, some have political agendas. Some have personal biases. Some are just destroying property because they are part of some sort of herd mentality. But sooner or later folks have to learn to get along with one another and respect each other's uniqueness... even if it's "white bread" or a green wooden necklace. If we don't, America is going to implode..."
Good job, my friend. : ) Bob
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2020
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Hi Diae. This is an outstanding essay in narrative form. I think you summed up the situation going on today with this though:
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Could be. I think a lot of folks are angry and frustrated and they want to be heard. And their anger has reached a tipping point. Make no mistake, some have political agendas. Some have personal biases. Some are just destroying property because they are part of some sort of herd mentality. But sooner or later folks have to learn to get along with one another and respect each other's uniqueness... even if it's "white bread" or a green wooden necklace. If we don't, America is going to implode..."
Good job, my friend. : ) Bob
Comment Written 16-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2020
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Hello Bob!
Oh my goodness!
I am honored by your exceptional rating and complimentary review.
I've wanted to share the Alma incident for years - never thought the recent chaos in our land would finally be the impetus to see it come to fruition on paper...
Thank you so much!
Take Care!
diane
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You are most welcome, dear neighbor. : ) Bob
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This is a timely post. I like the conversational flow of it. It sounds like it was well-organized based on true incidents. I really didn't find anything to correct in it, although I think I would tweak this line:
So, "Get over it."
I suggest:
She added dismissively, "Get over it."
Or something like that.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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This is a timely post. I like the conversational flow of it. It sounds like it was well-organized based on true incidents. I really didn't find anything to correct in it, although I think I would tweak this line:
So, "Get over it."
I suggest:
She added dismissively, "Get over it."
Or something like that.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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Hello Crystie!
Glad you enjoyed!
Thank you!
diane
Comment from mermaids
I enjoyed reading your story. There is a smooth flow of dialog between mother and son. I like the happy ending of two students remaining in touch. Your story is well written, I do not see any need for changes. Love the title "White Bread", it draws the reader into the story.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2020
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I enjoyed reading your story. There is a smooth flow of dialog between mother and son. I like the happy ending of two students remaining in touch. Your story is well written, I do not see any need for changes. Love the title "White Bread", it draws the reader into the story.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2020
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Hello Mermaids!
So pleased you enjoyed!
Thank you!
diane
Comment from Y. M. Roger
LOL - yeah, mom, no matching accessories! :) :)
A wonderful dialogue that puts a whole lot out there for people to think about. :) Discrimination sucks - as a female physicist I can attest to that many times over. Grew up in tension - desegregated South in the seventies - and had many instances of facing down confrontations because of my skin color. And, oh lordy, the brawls at school... you learned to become 'small' when you could 'feel' them coming. I really thought and felt those days were behind us... Thanx for sharing this piece of you, Beautiful Lady -- dialogue is the answer to make folks look at things. :) :) Yvette
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2020
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LOL - yeah, mom, no matching accessories! :) :)
A wonderful dialogue that puts a whole lot out there for people to think about. :) Discrimination sucks - as a female physicist I can attest to that many times over. Grew up in tension - desegregated South in the seventies - and had many instances of facing down confrontations because of my skin color. And, oh lordy, the brawls at school... you learned to become 'small' when you could 'feel' them coming. I really thought and felt those days were behind us... Thanx for sharing this piece of you, Beautiful Lady -- dialogue is the answer to make folks look at things. :) :) Yvette
Comment Written 15-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2020
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Hey Yvette!
Wow!
You really liked it!
The memory has always been waiting to be shared; just needed the right set of circumstances.
And, Oh My Goodness! That necklace was HEAVY and UGLY and I thought I was "stylin'!" Should have kept the shoes, though... :)
So very pleased you enjoyed this offering!
Thank you, m'lady!
diane
Comment from sibhus
Great way to bring up some very important issues that we are all facing today. I think that if people had frank and open conversations with their children, much like your story, there would be a lot less chances for racism to exist. Good stuff, Mrs. KT.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2020
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Great way to bring up some very important issues that we are all facing today. I think that if people had frank and open conversations with their children, much like your story, there would be a lot less chances for racism to exist. Good stuff, Mrs. KT.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2020
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Hello sibhus!
So pleased my words resonated with you!
Thank you!
diane
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
What a great story! I grew in Alabama during the sixties, but I never experience racial discrimination and racism. I treated everyone as I wanted to be treated, and I got along fine with the Black students.
Your story is great and a good lesson to all. I really enjoyed it.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2020
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What a great story! I grew in Alabama during the sixties, but I never experience racial discrimination and racism. I treated everyone as I wanted to be treated, and I got along fine with the Black students.
Your story is great and a good lesson to all. I really enjoyed it.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2020
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So pleased you enjoyed, Rebecca!
Thank you!
diane
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You're very welcome.
Comment from Melissa Russell Deur
A lot of people are writing about these issues now--more often as essays, so your tackling the subject in a conversation was refreshing. I don't know if you really had this discussion or used the device of dialogue to make your points. I had a very similar experience in college in the 70s with two black girls who were in my Sociology class and lived on my dorm floor. Now that I've seen the green beaded necklace, I think it would match some of the Pappagallo shoes from that decade! By the way, congratulations on your first place win in the 5-7-5 contest.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2020
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A lot of people are writing about these issues now--more often as essays, so your tackling the subject in a conversation was refreshing. I don't know if you really had this discussion or used the device of dialogue to make your points. I had a very similar experience in college in the 70s with two black girls who were in my Sociology class and lived on my dorm floor. Now that I've seen the green beaded necklace, I think it would match some of the Pappagallo shoes from that decade! By the way, congratulations on your first place win in the 5-7-5 contest.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2020
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Hello Melissa!
So pleased you enjoyed!
I smiled when I read "Pappagallo shoes!" Capezzios were high-stylin' back then in Michigan!
Thank you!
diane
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Capezios we?re on the list too!
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Wonderful story--great punchline. Effective device--conversation between mother (you?) and son. Clever humor re white bread on desk as ice-breaker. Cheers. LIZ
Congrats on your prize--not surprised!
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2020
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Wonderful story--great punchline. Effective device--conversation between mother (you?) and son. Clever humor re white bread on desk as ice-breaker. Cheers. LIZ
Congrats on your prize--not surprised!
Comment Written 15-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2020
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Good Morning, Liz!
So pleased you enjoyed!
Thank you!
diane
Comment from Drew Delaney
Brilliant and awesomely written! Wow! You blew me away with this one. Some really good points as to the why's with such great examples. So glad I did not miss this one.
Drew xx
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2020
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Brilliant and awesomely written! Wow! You blew me away with this one. Some really good points as to the why's with such great examples. So glad I did not miss this one.
Drew xx
Comment Written 14-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2020
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Hello Drew!
I am honored by your exceptional rating and complimentary review!
I snuck over to this side of FanStory; I do that every once in awhile... :)
So very pleased you enjoyed!
Thank you!
diane
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
A heart warming story about a mother and daughter and how they discuss things going on in society today-- and yesterday. I love the interplay, I love the way the mother handled the situation with the other students who discriminated against her.
Well written and warm,
Take care,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2020
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A heart warming story about a mother and daughter and how they discuss things going on in society today-- and yesterday. I love the interplay, I love the way the mother handled the situation with the other students who discriminated against her.
Well written and warm,
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment Written 14-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2020
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Thank you, Rhonda!
Morgan is my son...
So pleased you enjoyed!
Thank you!
diane
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Oops, sorry. I assumed daughter, or at least that?s what I pictured in my head. I didn?t realize it was a true story. I?m even more impressed now!
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No worries, Rhonda!
So pleased you enjoyed!
Thank you!
diane
