The Win
Use These Words Contest Entry7 total reviews
Comment from Iza Deleanu
This is so beautiful, and here it is a different game of daisy - or she loves me or loves me not: "The kitchen shears dissect the rose.
The crimson petals predefined.
She hears its thorny, final cry.
Her sink disposal starts to grind." Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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This is so beautiful, and here it is a different game of daisy - or she loves me or loves me not: "The kitchen shears dissect the rose.
The crimson petals predefined.
She hears its thorny, final cry.
Her sink disposal starts to grind." Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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Thank you for this great review, Iza! I also appreciate all of these gracious stars. I'm glad you liked this. Enjoy the rest of your week. Lynda
Comment from RodG
This narrative poem VIVIDLY describes one scene in this woman's life from the moment she discovers the rose to after its disposal and she's had her pipe and wiped this man out of her life. You employ each of the words in a natural way and bring this woman to life. Rod
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2020
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This narrative poem VIVIDLY describes one scene in this woman's life from the moment she discovers the rose to after its disposal and she's had her pipe and wiped this man out of her life. You employ each of the words in a natural way and bring this woman to life. Rod
Comment Written 14-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2020
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Wow! Thank you so very much, Rod, for this amazing review! I don't post that much so comments like this are very encouraging and definitely fun. You understood exactly what I was trying to say in this challenge. Very rewarding. Also appreciate all those stars. Thank you again.
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My pleasure. Rod
Comment from roof35
You followed the rules and used all the required words. And, you did it beautifully if a bit sadly. Your illustration pairs perfectly with your poem. The words flow nicely. This is well written.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2020
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You followed the rules and used all the required words. And, you did it beautifully if a bit sadly. Your illustration pairs perfectly with your poem. The words flow nicely. This is well written.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2020
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Thank you so very much for this great review! These are lovely comments and I appreciate your gracious stars. I'm glad you liked this. Enjoy the rest of your weekend.
Comment from ESOSTINE
The poem tends to create an image of a lady who has 'overcome' the initial pains of broken relationship and though he kept coming back to reconcile with her, she felt she no longer had anything to do with him. Thanks for sharing. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2020
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The poem tends to create an image of a lady who has 'overcome' the initial pains of broken relationship and though he kept coming back to reconcile with her, she felt she no longer had anything to do with him. Thanks for sharing. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2020
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Wow! What a great review! You understood exactly what I wrote and that is high praise, indeed. I appreciate all those stars and good luck wishes. Thank you, sir!
Comment from January L'Angelle
This sounds like she had a nice relaxing smoke after a fun night with her girlfriends. I like that she ground up the rose in the garbage disposal, that he left her at the door. That was real anger. You used the words wisely and fulfilled the contest prompt. Well done. -January L.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2020
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This sounds like she had a nice relaxing smoke after a fun night with her girlfriends. I like that she ground up the rose in the garbage disposal, that he left her at the door. That was real anger. You used the words wisely and fulfilled the contest prompt. Well done. -January L.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2020
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Thank you so much, January. (Love your name.) It's always great when a reviewer totally gets it and praises your work. Your gracious stars are much appreciated. Lovely comments! Thank you again.
Comment from DragonSkulls
Wow, so eight people have read this and it doesn't even have a second review. I swear, people on this site are friggin' ignorant. Great piece, L. I looked in your profile. That's how I knew it was you. Great poem. I hope you do well in the contest but like I said, these people are ignorant. Lol
Ds
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2020
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Wow, so eight people have read this and it doesn't even have a second review. I swear, people on this site are friggin' ignorant. Great piece, L. I looked in your profile. That's how I knew it was you. Great poem. I hope you do well in the contest but like I said, these people are ignorant. Lol
Ds
Comment Written 13-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2020
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Thank you, Mr. Skulls for this great review. Love the sixer. Don't understand how, in the wee hours, I continue to break my own rule of don't drink and post. LOL Much appreciated.
Comment from oliver818
This is a very nice poem, I enjoyed reading it. It flows well and has a nice feel to it. Just one little error- you wrote 'the CD player stars to play' but I guess you mean starts. Thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2020
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This is a very nice poem, I enjoyed reading it. It flows well and has a nice feel to it. Just one little error- you wrote 'the CD player stars to play' but I guess you mean starts. Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 13-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2020
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Lord! I must have read this thing through 15 times and didn't catch that. I am truly indebted to you. I thank you for your excellent review and all those stars! (not starts LOL) You saved me from looking like a dolt. Much appreciated, Oliver!
