A Shiver of Sharks
A 5-7-5 for the contest80 total reviews
Comment from pome lover
many congrats on all your winnings and accolades! well deserved.
Pantygynt may have inspired the 2nd line, but the 3rd is the clever one and the clincher. Sneaking in a little Shakespeare (and Merchant of Venice) always adds a touch of class. :) Enjoyable poem!
Katharine - pome lover
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2020
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many congrats on all your winnings and accolades! well deserved.
Pantygynt may have inspired the 2nd line, but the 3rd is the clever one and the clincher. Sneaking in a little Shakespeare (and Merchant of Venice) always adds a touch of class. :) Enjoyable poem!
Katharine - pome lover
Comment Written 01-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2020
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Many thanks for dropping by to review this one, Katharine, and for your congratulations. Much appreciated. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Father Flaps
Congratulations on winning the contest, Tony! Hot summers mean shark time. I like the way you combined "shiver" and "sharks". We do the shivering.
I'm not familiar with "shylocks" though. you fill me in?
I just wrote a poem about being shark bait.
Cheers
Kimbob
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2020
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Congratulations on winning the contest, Tony! Hot summers mean shark time. I like the way you combined "shiver" and "sharks". We do the shivering.
I'm not familiar with "shylocks" though. you fill me in?
I just wrote a poem about being shark bait.
Cheers
Kimbob
Comment Written 16-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2020
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Thanks for your review, Kimbob. Shylocks, as I am given to understand, is naval argot for dangerous, shallow waters.
Comment from MissMerri
Well, I think this is fantastic! No wonder it won the contest. The alliteration is wonderfully satisfying. I'm always full of admiration for a poet who can pack so much into three little lines. Good work and congratulations for winning the contest. This is a whole story in a half-pound.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2020
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Well, I think this is fantastic! No wonder it won the contest. The alliteration is wonderfully satisfying. I'm always full of admiration for a poet who can pack so much into three little lines. Good work and congratulations for winning the contest. This is a whole story in a half-pound.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2020
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Thank you so much, Adonna, for your congratulations and generous award of a sixth star. Greatly appreciated. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Mary Furlong
Sh-h-h! Don't tell anyone, but I think this is great. So full of humor as well as alliteration. By the way, does 'flesh' count? Really.? I'd say you went the way of all flesh with that one. Congratulations on your win.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2020
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Sh-h-h! Don't tell anyone, but I think this is great. So full of humor as well as alliteration. By the way, does 'flesh' count? Really.? I'd say you went the way of all flesh with that one. Congratulations on your win.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2020
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Thank you very much, Mary, for your congratulations and amusing comments. Much appreciated. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Mark Valentine
I can see why this one won. Given the additional meaning of 'Shylock" supplied by Pantygynt, your aquatic-usury analogy has many points of connection -sharks-pound of flesh - shylock -scavenge -shiver. The fact that it also evokes "The Merchant of Venice" only adds to its appeal. The alliteration with the "sh" sounds is great.
Fantastic!
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2020
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I can see why this one won. Given the additional meaning of 'Shylock" supplied by Pantygynt, your aquatic-usury analogy has many points of connection -sharks-pound of flesh - shylock -scavenge -shiver. The fact that it also evokes "The Merchant of Venice" only adds to its appeal. The alliteration with the "sh" sounds is great.
Fantastic!
Comment Written 15-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2020
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Thank you very much, Mark, for your congratulations and generous award of a sixth star. Greatly appreciated. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from livelylinda
Tony: I see how you won first in the contest . . .this is brilliance with humor and realism and a direct attack rather than pussy footing around (like politicians seem to do). Congrats! You keep safe. Linda
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2020
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Tony: I see how you won first in the contest . . .this is brilliance with humor and realism and a direct attack rather than pussy footing around (like politicians seem to do). Congrats! You keep safe. Linda
Comment Written 15-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2020
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Thank you very much, Linda, for your congratulations and generous award of a sixth star. Much appreciated. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Contests
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2020
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 A contest winning entry! A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for posting the winning contest entry. |
Comment Written 15-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2020
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Thank you very much for this. The loan sharks will be delighted, and I shall avoid losing a pound of flesh!
Comment from Eternal Muse
Oh, what a great entry in the 5-7-5 contest! Your humor and wit shine their best and I had a big smile on my face reading it. Thank you for educating us with "shylocks", the word unfamiliar to me until today. Adorable picture and artistic presentation. This should be a winner, you've got my vote.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2020
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Oh, what a great entry in the 5-7-5 contest! Your humor and wit shine their best and I had a big smile on my face reading it. Thank you for educating us with "shylocks", the word unfamiliar to me until today. Adorable picture and artistic presentation. This should be a winner, you've got my vote.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2020
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Thank you for your review, Muse. I'd not heard of 'shylocks' in that context before either. It was Pantgynt who introduced it to me, in an earlier review. Unfortunately, the Contest Committee did't share your high opinion of the poem. LOL
Comment from Brett Matthew West
A pound of flesh. Isn't that the way it feels when you have to repay a loan, especially from one of these "sharks"?
"A shiver of sharks" - very clear depiction.
Had to google "shylocks" as wasn't sure what that word meant. Google said it comes from a money lender in Merchant of Venice who charges extremely high interest rates. Perhaps, there is a British definition as well that pantygynt presented? Afterwards, in both cases, that line then made sense.
Would suggest this will be a strong entry for the contest.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2020
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A pound of flesh. Isn't that the way it feels when you have to repay a loan, especially from one of these "sharks"?
"A shiver of sharks" - very clear depiction.
Had to google "shylocks" as wasn't sure what that word meant. Google said it comes from a money lender in Merchant of Venice who charges extremely high interest rates. Perhaps, there is a British definition as well that pantygynt presented? Afterwards, in both cases, that line then made sense.
Would suggest this will be a strong entry for the contest.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2020
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Thanks for dropping by to review this, Brett. I hadn't heard the term 'shylocks' describing dangerous shallows but have taken it on trust from the mariner among us. I wasn't able to confirm its authenticity on Google, either.
Comment from Ben Colder
interesting. I learn something new every day on this site. Never knew what a shylock is until now. Hope you do well in the contest. I see nothing wrong.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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interesting. I learn something new every day on this site. Never knew what a shylock is until now. Hope you do well in the contest. I see nothing wrong.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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Thanks, Ben. I appreciate your review. Best wishes, Tony
