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Viewing comments for Chapter 24 "First Class Kisser"A collection of stories: Some True, some not
20 total reviews
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This was well constructed with the 100 word limit. I've tried to write one. It is extremely difficult. You have a good lead to draw the reader in and the rest of the plot makes the reader along with the speaker ask, "what just happened?" Clever setting.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2020
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This was well constructed with the 100 word limit. I've tried to write one. It is extremely difficult. You have a good lead to draw the reader in and the rest of the plot makes the reader along with the speaker ask, "what just happened?" Clever setting.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2020
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Luz, thanks so much for your validating words.
Comment from Justin Chopin
Sounds like a pretty amazing experience. I thought the descriptions you used to describe the woman's lips puckered and ruby red were very effective because they made this whole strange situation much more vivid and detailed. Great job with this piece.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2020
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Sounds like a pretty amazing experience. I thought the descriptions you used to describe the woman's lips puckered and ruby red were very effective because they made this whole strange situation much more vivid and detailed. Great job with this piece.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2020
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Justin thanks tough to pull off in 100 words.
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You're welcome.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, anonymous,
Interesting entry for the
100 Word Dash writing prompt contest. You incorporated the first kiss into your flash fiction. Good job with the word count. It's hard to write flash fiction. You did well. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2020
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Hello, anonymous,
Interesting entry for the
100 Word Dash writing prompt contest. You incorporated the first kiss into your flash fiction. Good job with the word count. It's hard to write flash fiction. You did well. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2020
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Thank you!
Comment from Patty Palmer
Now, how cool would that be for a stranger to plant one on ya unexpectingly~ Must have been some plane ride!! LOL Good luck with the contest! God bless!
Patty
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2020
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Now, how cool would that be for a stranger to plant one on ya unexpectingly~ Must have been some plane ride!! LOL Good luck with the contest! God bless!
Patty
Comment Written 18-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2020
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Smiling back!
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You're welcome!
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is a good strong entry for the 100 Word Dash writing prompt. It should do very well in the contest. I wish you the very best of luck.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2020
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This is a good strong entry for the 100 Word Dash writing prompt. It should do very well in the contest. I wish you the very best of luck.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2020
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Rebecca, thank you we shall see.
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You're very welcome.
Comment from GWHARGIS
Great sense of mystery in this. Your fiction made me visualize someone like Ingrid Bergman. I could see the scene in black and white. Great job. Good luck in the contest. Have a great week. Gretchen
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2020
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Great sense of mystery in this. Your fiction made me visualize someone like Ingrid Bergman. I could see the scene in black and white. Great job. Good luck in the contest. Have a great week. Gretchen
Comment Written 17-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2020
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Gretchen thank you, ahh Ingrid in black and white no less...smiles
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
This is a very nice capture of a brief snippet of time. Good tonal quality to the write. Within the word count as per comp instructions.
Best of luck to you.
GMG
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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Hi there,
This is a very nice capture of a brief snippet of time. Good tonal quality to the write. Within the word count as per comp instructions.
Best of luck to you.
GMG
Comment Written 17-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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GMG thank you.
Comment from Ric Myworld
My daddy always said that if you don't speak up boy you won't eat. But I guess this lady cat got your tongue. LOL. Great job, and good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2020
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My daddy always said that if you don't speak up boy you won't eat. But I guess this lady cat got your tongue. LOL. Great job, and good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 16-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2020
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Ric, roger that!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written hundred word flash fiction about the kiss from a stranger that lasted a few minutes and when it ended it was the end forever not any connections whatsoever.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2020
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A very well-written hundred word flash fiction about the kiss from a stranger that lasted a few minutes and when it ended it was the end forever not any connections whatsoever.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2020
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Sandra, thank you!
Comment from oliver818
This is a nice story, a bit mysterious because I can't imagine why someone would just kiss a stranger after only a two hour flight together without even talking by the sounds of it. It's a good entry for this competition though. Thanks for sharing this
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2020
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This is a nice story, a bit mysterious because I can't imagine why someone would just kiss a stranger after only a two hour flight together without even talking by the sounds of it. It's a good entry for this competition though. Thanks for sharing this
Comment Written 16-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2020
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Oliver, that is the intent ...mystery.. thanks, much!
