Me and You - 40+ years of Poems V2
Viewing comments for Chapter 52 "Ode to Shorty "Life, Love, Pain, Regrets, Struggles, Blessings
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Comment from Y. M. Roger
Such a wonderful offering for a special 'Shorty' dad... :) You have some great rhymes, but it is difficult to find a rhythm or a flow through the lines/quatrains. Perhaps try finding similar 'syllables' within the quatrains to add in this issue... :) :) Thanx for sharing and best of luck! ;)
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2020
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Such a wonderful offering for a special 'Shorty' dad... :) You have some great rhymes, but it is difficult to find a rhythm or a flow through the lines/quatrains. Perhaps try finding similar 'syllables' within the quatrains to add in this issue... :) :) Thanx for sharing and best of luck! ;)
Comment Written 22-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2020
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Hello and Thank you for your Continued Support and Encouragement. I struggled to truncate the complete story for this poem and decide I'd have to do a rewrite at a later date.
In a chapter of a book to include this poem offering.
Comment from Earl Corp
It's too bad your dad couldn't read this beautiful tribute which you wrote for him. It sounds like he embodied the American dream and was a great role model for you. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2020
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It's too bad your dad couldn't read this beautiful tribute which you wrote for him. It sounds like he embodied the American dream and was a great role model for you. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2020
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Thank you Very Much for Reading, Rating and The Kind Compliments on this poem offering. Blessings to you and your family.