Remembering Yesterday
Viewing comments for Chapter 45 "Life in Our New Home"A widow's journey into her relationship with her
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Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This, too, is a great chapter!
Notice typos:
They put together makeshift sleds out of what ever ( whatever) they could find and had so much fun sliding down the dip from the front of our house to the driveway.
I didn't want to be a prig, and I seldom when (went) on outing (outings) with girlfriends.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2020
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This, too, is a great chapter!
Notice typos:
They put together makeshift sleds out of what ever ( whatever) they could find and had so much fun sliding down the dip from the front of our house to the driveway.
I didn't want to be a prig, and I seldom when (went) on outing (outings) with girlfriends.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and for the catching the spags.
Beth
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You're welcome. Anytime.
Comment from Earl Corp
I wondered why you were writing the way until I read your notes. Actually Spiro Agnew was Nixon's running mate in 1968 and served as vice president until he had to resign in 1973.
You have a grammar error: when should be WENT on outings.
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reply by the author on 22-Jun-2020
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I wondered why you were writing the way until I read your notes. Actually Spiro Agnew was Nixon's running mate in 1968 and served as vice president until he had to resign in 1973.
You have a grammar error: when should be WENT on outings.
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Comment Written 21-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2020
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Thank you for the review. I usually put more in for new readers but I hadn't any new ones for a while. You are correct about Agnew. I looked it up because I didn't remember the the site I found had it wrong. I'll change that. Thanks for stopping by
Beth
Comment from Spitfire
First paragraph summarizes what's happening in the outside world. Excellent opening. I can't imagine what the doctor gave Don. When prescribing a doctor needs to lessen the dose for children, I would think.
Loved the story of the fortune teller. You did well with the dialect. Good idea to compare notes. Seems she did give some generic fortelling.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2020
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First paragraph summarizes what's happening in the outside world. Excellent opening. I can't imagine what the doctor gave Don. When prescribing a doctor needs to lessen the dose for children, I would think.
Loved the story of the fortune teller. You did well with the dialect. Good idea to compare notes. Seems she did give some generic fortelling.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2020
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Thank you for the review and comments. The fortune teller turned out to be more accurate than I would have liked.
Beth
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
(...involved Maggie and I s/b involved.....ME; off of (omit of) our house...typos in I didn't want to be a PRUDE and I seldom WENT on OUTINGS with...) This is a captivating story from start to finish--always havoc and injuries with the kids--skillful interweaving of narrative with current cultural details. Great bit about the fortune teller! Cheers. LIZ
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2020
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(...involved Maggie and I s/b involved.....ME; off of (omit of) our house...typos in I didn't want to be a PRUDE and I seldom WENT on OUTINGS with...) This is a captivating story from start to finish--always havoc and injuries with the kids--skillful interweaving of narrative with current cultural details. Great bit about the fortune teller! Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 21-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and nice comments. I appreciate you catching my errors too.
Beth
Comment from royowen
Yes, before I was a Christian I used to read horoscopes, but they were invariably wrong. From what I know of the devil, he understands our propensities, but can't read the future, but I don't really know. Just love your biography Beth, I wonder if they turned out? Well done, blessings Roy
Typo : I didn't want to be a prud(e)
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reply by the author on 21-Jun-2020
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Yes, before I was a Christian I used to read horoscopes, but they were invariably wrong. From what I know of the devil, he understands our propensities, but can't read the future, but I don't really know. Just love your biography Beth, I wonder if they turned out? Well done, blessings Roy
Typo : I didn't want to be a prud(e)
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Comment Written 21-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2020
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Thank you Roy, I appreciate the review. This was the last time I went near a fortune teller. I felt guilty. I think there more to it that I need to know about.
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I would too
