Shifting Sands Of Time
A metaphorical lamentation52 total reviews
Comment from RodG
This is a sweet poem honoring the memory of a relationship that could not last. I like your use of sand castles as a metaphor for that relationship. Your rhythm is great except for line 10 where it slightly falters. Rod
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This is a sweet poem honoring the memory of a relationship that could not last. I like your use of sand castles as a metaphor for that relationship. Your rhythm is great except for line 10 where it slightly falters. Rod
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Comment Written 22-Jun-2020
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed reading your loving words although they are very poignant. Your lines read smoothly, the rhymes are great, and there is great imagery. Readers can feel your heartfelt desire and love for your wife who has passed.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
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I enjoyed reading your loving words although they are very poignant. Your lines read smoothly, the rhymes are great, and there is great imagery. Readers can feel your heartfelt desire and love for your wife who has passed.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
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Comment Written 22-Jun-2020
