Black Widow
Weaves a tempting web8 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
There are a few black widow spiders of the human kind to watch out for and their bite is often painful, I enjoyed your poem, great rhymes and flow and I enjoyed the sentiment too, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2020
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There are a few black widow spiders of the human kind to watch out for and their bite is often painful, I enjoyed your poem, great rhymes and flow and I enjoyed the sentiment too, love Dolly x
Comment Written 26-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2020
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Thank you for reading and reviewing my poem. :)
Comment from Deepali Pradhan
Nice poem. The introduction of a facet of human nature was a nice idea . In some places I thought the word choice/ sequence did not sit well with the overall flow but was none the less a good read. Good luck with writing
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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Nice poem. The introduction of a facet of human nature was a nice idea . In some places I thought the word choice/ sequence did not sit well with the overall flow but was none the less a good read. Good luck with writing
Comment Written 25-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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Thank you for reviewing my poem and for your valuable input. Much appreciated.
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Beacon,
I have read a couple of the poems intended for this contest already - and I can't imagine one that might beat yours. *smile* It is intense and purposeful; it has facts - but not in a boring way; it is vivid, and it relates the lurid ways of this female spider to the wicked ways of some human females. I truly think you have a winner. I'm wishing you success!
Great entry!
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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Dear Mystery Beacon,
I have read a couple of the poems intended for this contest already - and I can't imagine one that might beat yours. *smile* It is intense and purposeful; it has facts - but not in a boring way; it is vivid, and it relates the lurid ways of this female spider to the wicked ways of some human females. I truly think you have a winner. I'm wishing you success!
Great entry!
Comment Written 25-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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Thank you for this great review, it made my day brighter. :)
Comment from thoughtgame2
Very good.it Almost sounds like you are talking about different classes of evil people to me...im sure there is so many ways one could read this piece, and I know for a fact no two people will read it the same...thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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Very good.it Almost sounds like you are talking about different classes of evil people to me...im sure there is so many ways one could read this piece, and I know for a fact no two people will read it the same...thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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Thank you for reviewing. I was literally talking about the actual spider, as I find them fascinating. Thank you for reviewing my poem.
Comment from Gert sherwood
My what a well written and hymning about the Black Willow.
My favorite stanza-
Beware the widow's bite, for she
is deadly to us all it seems.
My fear of spiders causes dread.
Yes, I agree and another deadly fact about the Black Willow after she mates. Kills her Vitim
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reply by the author on 24-Jun-2020
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My what a well written and hymning about the Black Willow.
My favorite stanza-
Beware the widow's bite, for she
is deadly to us all it seems.
My fear of spiders causes dread.
Yes, I agree and another deadly fact about the Black Willow after she mates. Kills her Vitim
.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2020
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Thank you for reading my poem, I'm so glad you liked it.
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You are welcome
Gert
Comment from RodG
I really like the opening four stanzas of this poem where you focus exclusively on the female black widow and her mate. You're both dramatic and informative. I would end with stanza five. A lecture about some human women and Adam and Eve seems a bit superfluous.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2020
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I really like the opening four stanzas of this poem where you focus exclusively on the female black widow and her mate. You're both dramatic and informative. I would end with stanza five. A lecture about some human women and Adam and Eve seems a bit superfluous.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2020
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Thank you for your suggestion. I decided to change it because I agree with you. Let me know what you think. Thanks again. :)
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I still think it would be a stronger poem if you dropped the last two stanzas.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Oh, you bad Santa, of course your spider had to be the poor Eve right?:) Now jokes aside, this is a good entry for the contest and I love this stanza - Some women of the human race,
get bad ideas with similar ends.
Many men will be web caught,
and find themselves devoured, friends."
Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2020
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Oh, you bad Santa, of course your spider had to be the poor Eve right?:) Now jokes aside, this is a good entry for the contest and I love this stanza - Some women of the human race,
get bad ideas with similar ends.
Many men will be web caught,
and find themselves devoured, friends."
Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2020
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Thank you for this great review, I really appreciate it. :)
Comment from zanya
Ouch - I feel a shiver down my spine as I read this very effectively conveyed sentiment in relation to the dreaded Black Widow spider - not to be meddled with, I dare say !
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2020
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Ouch - I feel a shiver down my spine as I read this very effectively conveyed sentiment in relation to the dreaded Black Widow spider - not to be meddled with, I dare say !
Comment Written 23-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2020
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Thank you for this nice review, I appreciate hearing from you.
