Love Lives On
When hope seems gone still...18 total reviews
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This is excellent. There were many mentions serving as foreshadowing. Even a simile, how rich. Tears were forming and a lump in my throat with your open descriptions of the little family getting ready for the dream journey which turned in a nightmare. I like how you left the reader in suspense as to whether the parents or anyone would survive. Well written. A+
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2020
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This is excellent. There were many mentions serving as foreshadowing. Even a simile, how rich. Tears were forming and a lump in my throat with your open descriptions of the little family getting ready for the dream journey which turned in a nightmare. I like how you left the reader in suspense as to whether the parents or anyone would survive. Well written. A+
Comment Written 18-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2020
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Thank you for this wonderful six star review. I really appreciate your kind words. :)
Comment from lightink
You made me cry! I think your approach to the the 'Big Historical Event' was spot on! Describing a loving little family - one that the reader can attach to and appreciate and one we root for - is a really good way to present this tragedy. It makes it emotionally very engaging as opposed to a more factual description. Also, I so appreciate that you saved the parents at the end! Beautiful story!
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2020
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You made me cry! I think your approach to the the 'Big Historical Event' was spot on! Describing a loving little family - one that the reader can attach to and appreciate and one we root for - is a really good way to present this tragedy. It makes it emotionally very engaging as opposed to a more factual description. Also, I so appreciate that you saved the parents at the end! Beautiful story!
Comment Written 08-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2020
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Thank you, I'm so glad you liked it. I think most of the entries are stories rather than poems...so I'm a little worried that it won't be recieved well. At the end of the day though, I'm happy with it. Thanks again for reading. :)
Comment from Eternal Muse
Oh, another tragedy on Titanic. The death and devastation from that tragic day in 1912 will reverberate for centuries. Thousands of lives lost - and what made is most poignant, the first class was saved first. Excellent poetic presentation and remarkable words that tear at your soul.
I want to pray for the souls of the departed on board of that ship.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2020
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Oh, another tragedy on Titanic. The death and devastation from that tragic day in 1912 will reverberate for centuries. Thousands of lives lost - and what made is most poignant, the first class was saved first. Excellent poetic presentation and remarkable words that tear at your soul.
I want to pray for the souls of the departed on board of that ship.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2020
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Thank you for this great review, I'm so glad you liked it. :)
Comment from Shell St James
Wow! What a great poem! You had me hopeful at the beginning, so sad in the middle and happy at the end. I'm so glad you didn't end this on a tragic note. Kudos! Job well done!
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2020
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Wow! What a great poem! You had me hopeful at the beginning, so sad in the middle and happy at the end. I'm so glad you didn't end this on a tragic note. Kudos! Job well done!
Comment Written 07-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2020
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Thank you for this nice review. I almost had it end tragically but my daughter insisted on a happy ending, at least for that family. Thanks again for reading. :)
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about a historical event that seems to be good at the time but now, many years later we know that was the biggest human error in all history that took many innocent lives.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2020
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A very well-written poem about a historical event that seems to be good at the time but now, many years later we know that was the biggest human error in all history that took many innocent lives.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2020
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Thank you for reading. You are right, it was more human error than anything that caused the sinking...so sad.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
When hope seems gone still...
Love Lives On
Hello my friend
Wow, an epic poem about the Titanic. Your poem grabbed my attention from beginning to end. It's an excellent entry for the Big Historical Event contest. I will look for it in the voting booth.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2020
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When hope seems gone still...
Love Lives On
Hello my friend
Wow, an epic poem about the Titanic. Your poem grabbed my attention from beginning to end. It's an excellent entry for the Big Historical Event contest. I will look for it in the voting booth.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2020
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Thank you so much for reading my poem and for this awesome review. :)
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Your poem sounds like a legend: a family with big dreams crossing the ocean, getting separated and then reunite. I like the rhyme you choose, it carries the story till the end towards an utopia happy ending. I like this stanza , it gives the tone of the entire peom - apa had worked so long and hard,
bought tickets to a brand new life.
They packed up everything they owned,
four daughters and his loving wife.
Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2020
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Your poem sounds like a legend: a family with big dreams crossing the ocean, getting separated and then reunite. I like the rhyme you choose, it carries the story till the end towards an utopia happy ending. I like this stanza , it gives the tone of the entire peom - apa had worked so long and hard,
bought tickets to a brand new life.
They packed up everything they owned,
four daughters and his loving wife.
Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2020
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Thank you for such a lovely review. I really appreciate it. :)
Comment from Laurie Holding
This took a lot of work, and I admire it for the same reason I've admired everything written and produced about this event: the story just never, ever, gets stale. Amazing. Your rhyming scheme works here, and the poem tells another story within the story, which is so welcome and helps to freshen it all up again for us. Thank you for writing it, and I wish you great luck!
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reply by the author on 06-Jul-2020
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This took a lot of work, and I admire it for the same reason I've admired everything written and produced about this event: the story just never, ever, gets stale. Amazing. Your rhyming scheme works here, and the poem tells another story within the story, which is so welcome and helps to freshen it all up again for us. Thank you for writing it, and I wish you great luck!
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2020
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Thank for your kind review. I always appreciate hearing from fellow writers. Because you gave me 4 stars I was wondering if there is anything you feel I can do to improve upon this peice. I always welcome constructive criticism as it helps me improve as a writer. Thank you for reading my work! : )
Comment from Barnaby Wilde
Really great images painted with your words. I felt sure they would all be lost, then that only the children would make it alive. I'm happy to finish the poem and find that they were all united. NICE! (Check the spelling on "The food more then they'd ever seen) Might change "then" to "than" - Nit-picky I know.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2020
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Really great images painted with your words. I felt sure they would all be lost, then that only the children would make it alive. I'm happy to finish the poem and find that they were all united. NICE! (Check the spelling on "The food more then they'd ever seen) Might change "then" to "than" - Nit-picky I know.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2020
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Thank you...already fixed! I really appreciate you pointing that out and for this great review. Thanks again. :)
Comment from Bobby Cunningham
This is an incredibly beautiful poetic story. The photo accompanying this is perfect. Continually bringing up the four daughters is a lovely sentiment. The rhyming is impeccable and the syllable count is excellent which allows this poem to flow effortlessly. Best of luck in the contest. Have a wonderful day.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2020
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This is an incredibly beautiful poetic story. The photo accompanying this is perfect. Continually bringing up the four daughters is a lovely sentiment. The rhyming is impeccable and the syllable count is excellent which allows this poem to flow effortlessly. Best of luck in the contest. Have a wonderful day.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2020
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Thank you for this wonderful review, it truly made my day. I appreciate the six stars, it means a lot. :)
