Joy of Early Spring
a Wordsworth sonnet25 total reviews
Comment from BHWatson
Very Wordsworth! I grew up reading aloud Wordsworth in my English primary school. The feel of the words is very Victorian and pastoral. A note: I am not sure whether the word corral (to gather in group) should have been coral (the color). The latter makes more sense to me. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2020
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Very Wordsworth! I grew up reading aloud Wordsworth in my English primary school. The feel of the words is very Victorian and pastoral. A note: I am not sure whether the word corral (to gather in group) should have been coral (the color). The latter makes more sense to me. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2020
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I am flattered you think my sonnet has the ?feel? of Wordsworth and the Victorian era. Thank you so much for sharing and your suggestion.
Comment from roof35
You have expressed joy in a format that is way beyond my talents so I salute your style. This poems flows and rhymes where it should in proper meter. It is simply nicely done.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2020
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You have expressed joy in a format that is way beyond my talents so I salute your style. This poems flows and rhymes where it should in proper meter. It is simply nicely done.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2020
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Wow! I am flattered by your very kind praise. Thank you!
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Joy of early spring is expressed in spiritual appreciation as God's presence is seen wherever beauty is seen; well said, well done; enjoyed the read; thank you for sharing this, wish your contest entry good luck, never quit, keep writing, respectfully, ALCREATOR.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2020
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Joy of early spring is expressed in spiritual appreciation as God's presence is seen wherever beauty is seen; well said, well done; enjoyed the read; thank you for sharing this, wish your contest entry good luck, never quit, keep writing, respectfully, ALCREATOR.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2020
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Thank you, Alcreator, for sharing my sonnet and your very kind praise.
Comment from phill doran
Hello Anon
Very polished. I enjoyed the read and the syllable count is spot on. It is very much a fitting subject to associate with Wordsworth too.
In passing, i think there is a format issue with line 6? It may be my eyes, but the font appears larger than the other lines. If I am correct, I am sure you can clear this in the editor.
An attractive piece this - I wish you well in your contest.
cheers
phill
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reply by the author on 01-Jul-2020
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Hello Anon
Very polished. I enjoyed the read and the syllable count is spot on. It is very much a fitting subject to associate with Wordsworth too.
In passing, i think there is a format issue with line 6? It may be my eyes, but the font appears larger than the other lines. If I am correct, I am sure you can clear this in the editor.
An attractive piece this - I wish you well in your contest.
cheers
phill
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Comment Written 01-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2020
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Phil, your eyesight is excellent. Thank you for the heads-up and your very kind praise of my sonnet.
Comment from Eternal Muse
A brilliantly written sonnet - a true gem. I am very fond of sonnets myself, having written quite a few. I absolutely loved your iambic meter, rhyme and rhythm. The visuals are amazing.
I am just not sure about the final envoy. Usually it's two rhyming lines, GG. You have 3 lines:
God's presence--felt wherever beauty's seen--
astounds all visitors who wanders here,
uplifts their spirits; smiles soon reappear.
Unless I am missing something, and it's a structure of William Wordswoth sonnets.
How about:
God's presence shakes each man who wander here,
uplifts their spirits; smiles soon reappear.
lol. Just a thought.
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reply by the author on 01-Jul-2020
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A brilliantly written sonnet - a true gem. I am very fond of sonnets myself, having written quite a few. I absolutely loved your iambic meter, rhyme and rhythm. The visuals are amazing.
I am just not sure about the final envoy. Usually it's two rhyming lines, GG. You have 3 lines:
God's presence--felt wherever beauty's seen--
astounds all visitors who wanders here,
uplifts their spirits; smiles soon reappear.
Unless I am missing something, and it's a structure of William Wordswoth sonnets.
How about:
God's presence shakes each man who wander here,
uplifts their spirits; smiles soon reappear.
lol. Just a thought.
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Comment Written 01-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2020
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Thank you so much, Eternal Muse, for sharing my sonnet and reading it so carefully. I truly appreciate your kind praise and suggestion. Wordsworth's stanzas are a real challenge because of their unique rhyme scheme and that final couplet.
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I love the picture you added. I guess, I have to try a Wordworth sonnet.
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Congratulation on winning the contest. It was a well-deserved win.
