Heart Cafted Poems - 2020
Viewing comments for Chapter 30 "Run or Walk"Musings of an old man -2020
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Comment from Elaine Chiodi
Complementary use of words and art to create what should be the poster on the wall of Life. Visually and verbally graceful, this touches on the Zen of living. It's always the present... ...ec
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2020
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Complementary use of words and art to create what should be the poster on the wall of Life. Visually and verbally graceful, this touches on the Zen of living. It's always the present... ...ec
Comment Written 03-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2020
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EC thanks I can do Zen anytime, thanks for the validation
Comment from Mastery
A brilliant poem here, jim. I lofe your use of strong verbs, like here:
"wobble, stumble, tumble, go down...so fast,"
And here too: "simply slithering, dithering along."
Good write, my friend. : ) Bob
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2020
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A brilliant poem here, jim. I lofe your use of strong verbs, like here:
"wobble, stumble, tumble, go down...so fast,"
And here too: "simply slithering, dithering along."
Good write, my friend. : ) Bob
Comment Written 03-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2020
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Thanks my very good friend, as time marches on...so do I!
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Good. : ) Bob
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Good artwork and poem, Jim.
-The notes are appreciated,
but the form sounds like a lot of work.
-You did a good job with it, and
had a good topic, along with
effective imagery.
-My favorites are
"wobble, stumble, tumble, go down"
"simply slithering, dithering along."
-I'll go with the "slithering, dithering" approach.
-I like the concluding verse, too.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2020
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-Good artwork and poem, Jim.
-The notes are appreciated,
but the form sounds like a lot of work.
-You did a good job with it, and
had a good topic, along with
effective imagery.
-My favorites are
"wobble, stumble, tumble, go down"
"simply slithering, dithering along."
-I'll go with the "slithering, dithering" approach.
-I like the concluding verse, too.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2020
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Thanks much Pam..
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You are welcome.
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is a good entry for the 20 Line Poem writing prompt. It is easy to read and understand. I hope it does well in the contest. Great good luck!
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2020
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This is a good entry for the 20 Line Poem writing prompt. It is easy to read and understand. I hope it does well in the contest. Great good luck!
Comment Written 03-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2020
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Rebecca thanks for the good vibes you send.
Comment from Eternal Muse
I liked your quadruple Tetractys. A very interesting presentation. I like how use contrasts - first, Run - then Walk, and liked your summation:
Oh sure, it will take you so very long,
but rest assured,
take the time...
all you
need!
Best of luck in in the contest with this very strong entry.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2020
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I liked your quadruple Tetractys. A very interesting presentation. I like how use contrasts - first, Run - then Walk, and liked your summation:
Oh sure, it will take you so very long,
but rest assured,
take the time...
all you
need!
Best of luck in in the contest with this very strong entry.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2020
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Eternal muse, thank you. I appreciate your comments.
Comment from Sugarray77
Excellent job on this entry Jim. I loved your clever internal rhymes and catchy words that propelled this along at a wonderful clip. A great contest entry. I heard your voice in my head as I read along... so fun! So good to see you again, and look forward to July 8th at 11:00. :)
Melissa
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Excellent job on this entry Jim. I loved your clever internal rhymes and catchy words that propelled this along at a wonderful clip. A great contest entry. I heard your voice in my head as I read along... so fun! So good to see you again, and look forward to July 8th at 11:00. :)
Melissa
Comment Written 02-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2020
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Dear friend, thank you very much for your strong validation! I, too and looking very forward to the next series of engagements.
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear JLR, after one look I was sure that this contest entry of yours will take the prize for originality. The shaping and poetic discipline you have taken care to display this post, I know will be rated highly by the CEC .
Your theme is worthy advice at any stage in life too! Bravo!
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Dear JLR, after one look I was sure that this contest entry of yours will take the prize for originality. The shaping and poetic discipline you have taken care to display this post, I know will be rated highly by the CEC .
Your theme is worthy advice at any stage in life too! Bravo!
Comment Written 02-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2020
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Suzanna Ray, I am so very grateful fro your kind review.
Comment from Joan E.
What an intriguing title and matching artwork, plus the wonderful use of the quadruple Tetracyts form! Thank you for your good advice. Best wishes in the 20-Line Poem contest- Joan
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What an intriguing title and matching artwork, plus the wonderful use of the quadruple Tetracyts form! Thank you for your good advice. Best wishes in the 20-Line Poem contest- Joan
Comment Written 02-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2020
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Joan, thank you so very much!
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Life's choices are many; results also
Run..Walk
by JLR
Hello my friend
A wonderful entry for the
20 Line Poem contest. Your quadruple Tetractys looks hard to do but you did a good job. I like the snail topic...they are so disgusting. You can get rid of them in the garden with a bowl of beer. :)
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2020
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Life's choices are many; results also
Run..Walk
by JLR
Hello my friend
A wonderful entry for the
20 Line Poem contest. Your quadruple Tetractys looks hard to do but you did a good job. I like the snail topic...they are so disgusting. You can get rid of them in the garden with a bowl of beer. :)
Comment Written 02-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2020
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Gypsy,, my good friend first thank you for the great comments! Second thanks for teaching this old dog a new trick on solving a slug problem, great use for stale Guinness :)
Comment from Amanda Louise Davis
This poem was all right, but does one skin their bottom? I am really not wanting to say anything negative about this, but I think it needs a bit of work.
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This poem was all right, but does one skin their bottom? I am really not wanting to say anything negative about this, but I think it needs a bit of work.
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Comment Written 02-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2020
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Well I certainly have scraped by bottom in my lifetime, thanks for your comments... always honest and worthwhile, have a great 4th!
