Heroes Lost
a 500 word story about a RAF pilot in WWII16 total reviews
Comment from Bobby Cunningham
This is a wonderful tribute to your countries lost soldiers. This is a very captivating story that held our attention throughout. Best of luck in the contest. Have a wonderful night.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2020
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This is a wonderful tribute to your countries lost soldiers. This is a very captivating story that held our attention throughout. Best of luck in the contest. Have a wonderful night.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2020
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Thank you both for sharing my story. I am very pleased it kept your attention throughout.
Comment from sibhus
Very dramatic with great descriptions that paint wonderful images. The dialogue feels authentic, which gives the reader a sense of being part of the action. A great entry for the contest, and good luck.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2020
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Very dramatic with great descriptions that paint wonderful images. The dialogue feels authentic, which gives the reader a sense of being part of the action. A great entry for the contest, and good luck.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2020
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I am so pleased I could put you there, I hugs. Many thanks for your kind praise of my story.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
WOW, your story is packed with action and vivid memories of a war that reclaimed and took lots of lives across the globe. Sometimes we go on repeat about what we know, just like your pilot, that his unique purpose is to fight and save his friends. ""I'll fly again. I will! For England. For the the guys in my squadron
who lost their lives . . . for the nurse who died saving me."
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Tears streamed down his cheeks.
"I--I never learned her name."
Thank you for sharing, I think this is amazing entry for the contest. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2020
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WOW, your story is packed with action and vivid memories of a war that reclaimed and took lots of lives across the globe. Sometimes we go on repeat about what we know, just like your pilot, that his unique purpose is to fight and save his friends. ""I'll fly again. I will! For England. For the the guys in my squadron
who lost their lives . . . for the nurse who died saving me."
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Tears streamed down his cheeks.
"I--I never learned her name."
Thank you for sharing, I think this is amazing entry for the contest. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2020
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Thank you very much, Iza, for your wonderful review of my short story.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
What a sad story of loss, Mystery Author. You did a great job with your contest entry. I was engaged from start tot finish reading it. Your progression was well-paced. Your use of descriptive words/phrases worked well, too. I could see everything you mentioned. Your story, though, fictional, pays tribute to the courageous pilots of the RAF in WW2. Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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What a sad story of loss, Mystery Author. You did a great job with your contest entry. I was engaged from start tot finish reading it. Your progression was well-paced. Your use of descriptive words/phrases worked well, too. I could see everything you mentioned. Your story, though, fictional, pays tribute to the courageous pilots of the RAF in WW2. Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
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Comment Written 05-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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Thank you, Jan, for this wonderful review of my story. I am especially pleased it engaged you from start to finish.
Comment from Sharon Denise Powell
Wow, didn't expect that! Reminds me of Ernest Hemingway's "A Farewell to Arms." I am retired navy and though I never saw combat I know many who have. For a few moments I was right there with the protagonist and with the nurse. I thought this would turn into a romance, however the ending was much better.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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Wow, didn't expect that! Reminds me of Ernest Hemingway's "A Farewell to Arms." I am retired navy and though I never saw combat I know many who have. For a few moments I was right there with the protagonist and with the nurse. I thought this would turn into a romance, however the ending was much better.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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Thank you so much Sharon, for this wonderful review of my story. I am especially pleased I could put you there in that make-shift tent with the pilot and the nurse.
Comment from H. Darwin Reeves
Well done. You did a good job of describing the horrors of war and what so many of the pilots from Britain and America suffered. Thanks for reminding us of what that air was was like and the mobile hospitals that struggled to treat the wounded. I like the way you wove what caused him to want to return to the battle, even though he was to injured, he had the desire. Thanks for posting.
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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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Well done. You did a good job of describing the horrors of war and what so many of the pilots from Britain and America suffered. Thanks for reminding us of what that air was was like and the mobile hospitals that struggled to treat the wounded. I like the way you wove what caused him to want to return to the battle, even though he was to injured, he had the desire. Thanks for posting.
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Comment Written 05-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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Thank you, H. Darwin, for sharing my tribute to these brave pilots and your kind praise.
