Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

This poem tells clearly about the chronic agony, why and how it comes and grows, and how to get relief; enjoyed the read; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this; wish you good luck in the contest. ALCREATOR

 Comment Written 09-Jul-2020

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reply by the author on 09-Jul-2020

Thanks much for the read and review.

Comment from lightink

Excellent

Ah, you definitely captured the immense suffering caused by this - I imagine genetic disease. At the beginning you defined what the disease is, then showed us the depth of the struggle by describing the symptoms. Of course the real shock comes when we realize there's no real cure, just managing symptoms! The medical word offers little comfort and faith is the only lifeline here... "passport to heaven" is a heartbreakingly beautiful expression at the end.
The poem definitely cover's the topic of the contest - leaving the reader feeling the helplessness of those who suffer this condition.
May the medical word advance enough to find a real cure!

 Comment Written 09-Jul-2020

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reply by the author on 09-Jul-2020

Thanks much for the read and review and thoughtful comments. Much appreciated.

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

You did a good job describing this condition, Mystery Author. Your color scheme is perfect for this as is your image. Your lines are filled with good imagery. Thanks for sharing and best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan

 Comment Written 09-Jul-2020

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reply by the author on 09-Jul-2020

Thanks much for the read and encouraging review.