I'll Remember the Laughter
Remembering childhood activities14 total reviews
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written heartfelt childhood story that is familiar with everyone over fifty. The sun was our guide to send us home and after all the playing and running we were never late for dinner.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2020
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A very well-written heartfelt childhood story that is familiar with everyone over fifty. The sun was our guide to send us home and after all the playing and running we were never late for dinner.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2020
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Thanks for reviewing!
Comment from Bill Schott
I'll Remember the Laughter, is a fond look back to a family having a good life. The sad occurrences roll in to make us remember, we are human who must live in the moment.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2020
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I'll Remember the Laughter, is a fond look back to a family having a good life. The sad occurrences roll in to make us remember, we are human who must live in the moment.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2020
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Thanks for reviewing!
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, anonymous,
A wonderful entry for the Childhood writing prompt contest. You followed the rules of the contest well. Nice presentation and clear Syntex. Good rhyming scheme. It flows well. Your memories are bittersweet and most people can relate to that. Well done. Good luck.
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Hello, anonymous,
A wonderful entry for the Childhood writing prompt contest. You followed the rules of the contest well. Nice presentation and clear Syntex. Good rhyming scheme. It flows well. Your memories are bittersweet and most people can relate to that. Well done. Good luck.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2020
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Yes, you are right, keeps those memories closed to your heart for comfort and joy -
Now there's just me. When I look back, I see
days of freedom and fun in the sun --
riding our bikes, going camping, and hikes.
Oh, if only those days were re-run.
Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
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Yes, you are right, keeps those memories closed to your heart for comfort and joy -
Now there's just me. When I look back, I see
days of freedom and fun in the sun --
riding our bikes, going camping, and hikes.
Oh, if only those days were re-run.
Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2020
Comment from TommyWrites
I loved your poem, and that is the reason I am voting for you!
I related to yours the most, and I found it very touching. I liked how your rhymes were placed, and how they flowed nicely. In general, I just liked the poem! ;)
Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2020
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I loved your poem, and that is the reason I am voting for you!
I related to yours the most, and I found it very touching. I liked how your rhymes were placed, and how they flowed nicely. In general, I just liked the poem! ;)
Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 15-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2020
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I'm pleased you appreciated my poem. Thanks for reviewing!
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
What a lovely heartfelt poem! It is easy to read and understand, and I felt the gratefulness and thankfulness all the way through. Wonderful! Best of luck in the contest!
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What a lovely heartfelt poem! It is easy to read and understand, and I felt the gratefulness and thankfulness all the way through. Wonderful! Best of luck in the contest!
Comment Written 15-Jul-2020
Comment from Levi R Olsen
I like your poem, it brought up feelings in me that I haven't felt in a long time. But it didn't flow smoothly from start to end. It's clear you have talent though. Thanks for sharing.
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I like your poem, it brought up feelings in me that I haven't felt in a long time. But it didn't flow smoothly from start to end. It's clear you have talent though. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2020
Comment from Ogden
Yes, it was apparent early on that you are a Brit (the fact reinforced by other Britticisms)
Your childhood had much in common with memories of former kids from everywhere.
Excellent job!
Cheerio,
Ogden (Don)
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Yes, it was apparent early on that you are a Brit (the fact reinforced by other Britticisms)
Your childhood had much in common with memories of former kids from everywhere.
Excellent job!
Cheerio,
Ogden (Don)
Comment Written 14-Jul-2020
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
There are some ups and downs in your childhood here and experiencing a death in the family is something that is indeed challenging for a child, and you were so young when your Mum died, a poignant write and the last stanza brought a tear to my eye, love Dolly x
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There are some ups and downs in your childhood here and experiencing a death in the family is something that is indeed challenging for a child, and you were so young when your Mum died, a poignant write and the last stanza brought a tear to my eye, love Dolly x
Comment Written 14-Jul-2020
Comment from Brandi27
Your poem was amazing! I remembered my own childhood in the line, "Away at the park we played until dark," because our parents only came to look if we weren't home after dark. They never worried about what we were doing up until that point. Then when you were ten, life started to drastically change and that made the whole mood of the poem change. I thought it would be happy and carefree the whole way through. You were able to pack a whole lifetime story into one poem which is amazing but I wish your pain hadn't started at such a young age. I am so sorry for that! Great poem!
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Your poem was amazing! I remembered my own childhood in the line, "Away at the park we played until dark," because our parents only came to look if we weren't home after dark. They never worried about what we were doing up until that point. Then when you were ten, life started to drastically change and that made the whole mood of the poem change. I thought it would be happy and carefree the whole way through. You were able to pack a whole lifetime story into one poem which is amazing but I wish your pain hadn't started at such a young age. I am so sorry for that! Great poem!
Comment Written 14-Jul-2020
