Diamond in the Rough
He wasn't what she was looking for.16 total reviews
Comment from Raul1
Poor Keith before he was a trouble maker, but now he changed his ways. Nice to read the happy ending. I have enjoyed reading your story. Excellent work! Congratulations on winning the contest!
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2020
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Poor Keith before he was a trouble maker, but now he changed his ways. Nice to read the happy ending. I have enjoyed reading your story. Excellent work! Congratulations on winning the contest!
Comment Written 20-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and comments.
Beth
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Congratulations on your win! I enjoyed reading your entry. You did a good job telling this story. I was engaged from start to finish to learn how it would end. I like the positive ending. It gives all a ray of hope. Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2020
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Congratulations on your win! I enjoyed reading your entry. You did a good job telling this story. I was engaged from start to finish to learn how it would end. I like the positive ending. It gives all a ray of hope. Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 20-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2020
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Thank you so much, Jan. I really appreciate your review and nice comments.
Beth
Comment from LisaMay
This is an inspirational story well told, as an example of "don't judge a book by its cover", and also blows away the common misconception that a bad family background condemns people to a difficult life forever. Keith overcomes his past and with love and his own motivation finds acceptance and success.
I found, though, that the story was riddled with typos and once I started noticing them it put me on alert, watching for more, when I should've been immersed in the story.
Susan had stated (started) drinking with friends,
"Yeah, I'd loved (remove the d) to if you two don't mind.
His dad had baled (bailed) him out of jail
Keith had moved in with with (remove with) a girl
My family would disown me if (add I) brought someone like him home
He was ever (every) bit as open and honest with them
with her parents (parents') blessings
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reply by the author on 20-Jul-2020
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This is an inspirational story well told, as an example of "don't judge a book by its cover", and also blows away the common misconception that a bad family background condemns people to a difficult life forever. Keith overcomes his past and with love and his own motivation finds acceptance and success.
I found, though, that the story was riddled with typos and once I started noticing them it put me on alert, watching for more, when I should've been immersed in the story.
Susan had stated (started) drinking with friends,
"Yeah, I'd loved (remove the d) to if you two don't mind.
His dad had baled (bailed) him out of jail
Keith had moved in with with (remove with) a girl
My family would disown me if (add I) brought someone like him home
He was ever (every) bit as open and honest with them
with her parents (parents') blessings
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2020
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Thank you for the review and comments. I'm surprised that it won the contest in spite of a few spags. I guess no one else saw them. My eyes have been really bad with allergies this week. Now that they are corrected I hope you can change the rating.
Thanks,
Comment from Carlos' girl
This story was captivating and held me interest from beginning to end. The pace and sense of timing was excellent and kept me waiting to see how it ended.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2020
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This story was captivating and held me interest from beginning to end. The pace and sense of timing was excellent and kept me waiting to see how it ended.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2020
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Thank;you so much for the review and delightful comments.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Delightful story--so pleased it is true! Well-written, grabs and holds interest throughout. Good luck. Cheers. LIZ (typos: baled out s/b bailed; used to loved s/b love)
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2020
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Delightful story--so pleased it is true! Well-written, grabs and holds interest throughout. Good luck. Cheers. LIZ (typos: baled out s/b bailed; used to loved s/b love)
Comment Written 18-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2020
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Thank you for the review and comments. I so pleased you like it.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is a well-written story, rich in events and emotion. I enjoyed reading it very much, except the end where I found that it rushed to closure.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2020
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This is a well-written story, rich in events and emotion. I enjoyed reading it very much, except the end where I found that it rushed to closure.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2020
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Thank you so much for the review. I was afraid I was going to end up making it too long for anyone to want to read.it.
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This story is very well developed. The reader is invited to examine their bias and prejudices. The main character shoots a whole right through those biases. Addicts & alcoholics are people just like you & me. "There but for the grace of God go you & I." I came to love some of the recovering patients where I worked in a substance abuse/psych hospital. This is a powerful story. Thank you.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2020
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This story is very well developed. The reader is invited to examine their bias and prejudices. The main character shoots a whole right through those biases. Addicts & alcoholics are people just like you & me. "There but for the grace of God go you & I." I came to love some of the recovering patients where I worked in a substance abuse/psych hospital. This is a powerful story. Thank you.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2020
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Thank you so much for the review. I loved reading your comments. and learning about your experience with addicts.
Comment from Beverly A McBride
Nice, hopeful story. It's always been amazing to me how an interesting, fully lived life story beats safe and dull every time. I also love hearing stories of someone who's been able to overcome those lesson barriers, and moved beyond. And giving back. Nicely done story.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2020
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Nice, hopeful story. It's always been amazing to me how an interesting, fully lived life story beats safe and dull every time. I also love hearing stories of someone who's been able to overcome those lesson barriers, and moved beyond. And giving back. Nicely done story.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2020
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Thank you so much for the review stars and the comments. I really appreciate you taking the time to read this.
Comment from Karen Estep
I truly enjoyed reading this story. I felt it flowed very well, and the story line held my interest. The
Graphic associated with this almost led me to believe that the romance would be between the woman and Tommy! Great writing!
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2020
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I truly enjoyed reading this story. I felt it flowed very well, and the story line held my interest. The
Graphic associated with this almost led me to believe that the romance would be between the woman and Tommy! Great writing!
Comment Written 18-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and comments. It was hard to find a graphic that really fit.
Comment from Bill Schott
As fiction, this is a great story, well told. As a true story it blows me away. What an incredible set of circumstances that lead two people together.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2020
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As fiction, this is a great story, well told. As a true story it blows me away. What an incredible set of circumstances that lead two people together.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and comment. I promise you it is a 100% true story. The person is very close to me that I write about.
