You Go On
a 5-7-513 total reviews
Comment from The Death
It's a poignant poem about the narrator missing his Mom. One can feel the sadness here, and that how much he misses her. It describes how the game bonded these two. Good luck!
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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It's a poignant poem about the narrator missing his Mom. One can feel the sadness here, and that how much he misses her. It describes how the game bonded these two. Good luck!
Comment Written 22-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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Thank you for giving this a look.
Comment from Raul1
I have enjoyed reading your piece of poetry. It is clear and concise. I like how you structured it. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Nice job. I like it. Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2020
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I have enjoyed reading your piece of poetry. It is clear and concise. I like how you structured it. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Nice job. I like it. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 20-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2020
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Thanks, Raul
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
There is some sadness here in your words as you reminisce about watching a game with your Mom and as you ask the question, there is no answer, a poignant write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2020
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There is some sadness here in your words as you reminisce about watching a game with your Mom and as you ask the question, there is no answer, a poignant write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 20-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2020
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Thanks, Dolly
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Beautiful and sad in the same time. Did anybody was knocked out by the old bitch, life? In memorial, life goes on. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2020
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Beautiful and sad in the same time. Did anybody was knocked out by the old bitch, life? In memorial, life goes on. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2020
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Thanks, Iza
Comment from Ogden
This believable letter raises questions about its backstory, especially why the writer and his mom are separated on the day of the big baseball game, about which he is so excited.
Ogden (Don)
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2020
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This believable letter raises questions about its backstory, especially why the writer and his mom are separated on the day of the big baseball game, about which he is so excited.
Ogden (Don)
Comment Written 19-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2020
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Death is a factor here.
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Oh, that explains it.
Don
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is a strong entry for the 5-7-5 writing prompt. It is easy to read and understand. I hope it does well in the contest, and I wish the best of luck to you!
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2020
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This is a strong entry for the 5-7-5 writing prompt. It is easy to read and understand. I hope it does well in the contest, and I wish the best of luck to you!
Comment Written 19-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2020
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Thank you, TT
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You're welcome.
Comment from H. Darwin Reeves
Very poignant. Could mean different things. Did mom die? Was it a divorce situation? Perhaps a mom with a drug habit that kept her away. Whatever, it remains a poignant question, "Did you see me, Mom?" Thought provoking. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2020
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Very poignant. Could mean different things. Did mom die? Was it a divorce situation? Perhaps a mom with a drug habit that kept her away. Whatever, it remains a poignant question, "Did you see me, Mom?" Thought provoking. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2020
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Thank you, HD
Comment from roof35
This is certainly concise but extremely topical. You have said it well in this short poem. Your illustration, of course, pairs perfectly and sets the stage for your words.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2020
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This is certainly concise but extremely topical. You have said it well in this short poem. Your illustration, of course, pairs perfectly and sets the stage for your words.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2020
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Thank you, roof
Comment from lyenochka
I was thinking about the meaning of the title but as I read the poem the title now makes sense. Even if our loved ones are already in Heaven, we can still keep doing our best. "We go on" is well done. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2020
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I was thinking about the meaning of the title but as I read the poem the title now makes sense. Even if our loved ones are already in Heaven, we can still keep doing our best. "We go on" is well done. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 19-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2020
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Thank you, lyenochka
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
While "Mom' could not ne there due to the virus, she was there in spirit. I enjoyed your contest entry, Mystery Writer. Your syllable count is correct per line, the image is perfect, and your words are heartfelt. Thanks for sharing and best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2020
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While "Mom' could not ne there due to the virus, she was there in spirit. I enjoyed your contest entry, Mystery Writer. Your syllable count is correct per line, the image is perfect, and your words are heartfelt. Thanks for sharing and best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 19-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2020
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Thank you, Jan
