Rough-Sleeper's Day Ends
A Lune Poem: Layers of pain...34 total reviews
Comment from Janice Canerdy
The reasons for homelessness are as varied as the homeless themselves.
Your lune is packed with meaning, despite its required brevity. The metaphor in line 3 is very moving.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2020
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The reasons for homelessness are as varied as the homeless themselves.
Your lune is packed with meaning, despite its required brevity. The metaphor in line 3 is very moving.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2020
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Hello Janice!
So pleased my words resonated with you.
Thank you!
Comment from rspoet
This is an excellent lune poem for the contest
with a good commentary on the state of the world
and situation some people find themselves in.
Excellent photo to match.
Best wishes.
Robert
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2020
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This is an excellent lune poem for the contest
with a good commentary on the state of the world
and situation some people find themselves in.
Excellent photo to match.
Best wishes.
Robert
Comment Written 20-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2020
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Hello Robert,
So pleased my words resonated with you.
Thank you!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written lune poem about the homeless man who sleeps on a park bench and will go have a rough night on a hard surfaces with very little to cover him from the cold air and rain.
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reply by the author on 20-Jul-2020
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A very well-written lune poem about the homeless man who sleeps on a park bench and will go have a rough night on a hard surfaces with very little to cover him from the cold air and rain.
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Comment Written 20-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2020
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Hello Sandra,
Thank you!
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
This is a powerful poem. Really think the last line is the icing on the cake with a strong and impactful message. You say a lot with just three lines. Well done.
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reply by the author on 20-Jul-2020
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This is a powerful poem. Really think the last line is the icing on the cake with a strong and impactful message. You say a lot with just three lines. Well done.
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Comment Written 20-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2020
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Thank you, Michael.
A difficult write.
An even more difficult situation...
Thank you!
