Ghost Orchid
Swap quatrain using words animal, horror, short10 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello my friend
Nice entry for the 3 Words In A Poem writing prompt contest. You used the required words...animal - horror - short....good job.
I like the Deforestation theme. It is a true horror.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Hello my friend
Nice entry for the 3 Words In A Poem writing prompt contest. You used the required words...animal - horror - short....good job.
I like the Deforestation theme. It is a true horror.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Thank you for your supportive review. Ir;s a shame what rhey're doing to the environment...
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for seamlessly including the required words in your poem. I am sorry to learn that this special orchid will soon be a ghost. I admired your "swap" repeats for emphasis as well.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2020
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Thank you for seamlessly including the required words in your poem. I am sorry to learn that this special orchid will soon be a ghost. I admired your "swap" repeats for emphasis as well.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2020
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Thank you for your kind comments.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written swap quatrain about the endangered ghost orchid that once again are threatened by man's need for more land to build homes that destroy the environment once again.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2020
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A very well-written swap quatrain about the endangered ghost orchid that once again are threatened by man's need for more land to build homes that destroy the environment once again.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2020
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Thank you for sharing your thoughts,
Comment from zanya
This is simply a superb swap quatrain effectively and almost imperceptibly lacing the required words into the fabric of the poem - another sad tale for our planet of endangered species - wish I had a 6 for this - it should most definitely make it to the winners enclosure - has my vote
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
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This is simply a superb swap quatrain effectively and almost imperceptibly lacing the required words into the fabric of the poem - another sad tale for our planet of endangered species - wish I had a 6 for this - it should most definitely make it to the winners enclosure - has my vote
Comment Written 25-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
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I?m glad you enjoyed this piece. Thank you for dropping.
Comment from roof35
You followed the rules and incorporated all the words. While you did not have to, you rhymed it, too. The beautiful illustration, of course, pairs perfectly and sets the stage for your words. Well written.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
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You followed the rules and incorporated all the words. While you did not have to, you rhymed it, too. The beautiful illustration, of course, pairs perfectly and sets the stage for your words. Well written.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
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So glad you enjoyed this piece!
Comment from The Death
I liked how you this poem to raise awareness about this endangered species. In the opening stanzas, you have captured how it's vital for the moths. Excellent use of rhyming and meter make this flow well. Nice presentation. Good luck!
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
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I liked how you this poem to raise awareness about this endangered species. In the opening stanzas, you have captured how it's vital for the moths. Excellent use of rhyming and meter make this flow well. Nice presentation. Good luck!
Comment Written 25-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
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Thank you so much!
Comment from rama devi
Great theme of saving creation, and I like how this zooms the lens in on a single flower and then expands awareness of how all of life is affected. The moth needs the flower...and other animals. And eco-systems are interlaced and interdependent. I like your rhyme of deforestation and creation, and short and abort. The last one, abort, sounds slightly forced due to reversed syntax, but some people find that device poetic. Just my two cents.
Using a dash might remedy this a bit:
deforestation--abort.
Also, I suggest adding THE in here:
from (the) horror of life cut short,
Fine work. Lovely presentation.And you've used those words well. Good luck in the contest.
Warmly,
rd
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2020
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Great theme of saving creation, and I like how this zooms the lens in on a single flower and then expands awareness of how all of life is affected. The moth needs the flower...and other animals. And eco-systems are interlaced and interdependent. I like your rhyme of deforestation and creation, and short and abort. The last one, abort, sounds slightly forced due to reversed syntax, but some people find that device poetic. Just my two cents.
Using a dash might remedy this a bit:
deforestation--abort.
Also, I suggest adding THE in here:
from (the) horror of life cut short,
Fine work. Lovely presentation.And you've used those words well. Good luck in the contest.
Warmly,
rd
Comment Written 24-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2020
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Thank you! The swap quatrain is a bit of a challenge when it comes to natural flow. I?ll take your suggestions and see if I can improve it.
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Indeed, it's a challenging form! Warmly, rd
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This is a good contest entry, Mystery Writer. Your swap quatrain works well to tell of this story of the ghost orchid. The swap lines reverse perfectly in each verse. Your rhymes are good as is the imagery and image.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2020
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This is a good contest entry, Mystery Writer. Your swap quatrain works well to tell of this story of the ghost orchid. The swap lines reverse perfectly in each verse. Your rhymes are good as is the imagery and image.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 24-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2020
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Thank you!
Comment from Janice Canerdy
It is mankind's need--often simply greed-- for more that places plants and animals on the endangered species lists. Your poem is vividly descriptive and thought-provoking.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2020
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It is mankind's need--often simply greed-- for more that places plants and animals on the endangered species lists. Your poem is vividly descriptive and thought-provoking.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2020
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Thank you for sharing your thoughtful comments.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice image and
presentation.
-Your notes are appreciated.
-A well written poem that includes
the required words that your use well.
-A good topic, imagery, and rhyme.
-A good comparison between the
orchid and the mist.
-A very good message
in the closing verse.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2020
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-Very nice image and
presentation.
-Your notes are appreciated.
-A well written poem that includes
the required words that your use well.
-A good topic, imagery, and rhyme.
-A good comparison between the
orchid and the mist.
-A very good message
in the closing verse.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2020
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Thank you for reading and reviewing! Always a pleasure to hear from you.
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You are welcome.
