Cleaning Is A Drag
(534 words) Mothers might not like this!27 total reviews
Comment from JudyE
How very creative! I can imagine how much laughter must have gone on before the floor was finished. And what a magnificent room! It would be an honour, I should think, to show people round such an establishment.
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2020
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How very creative! I can imagine how much laughter must have gone on before the floor was finished. And what a magnificent room! It would be an honour, I should think, to show people round such an establishment.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2020
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Hi Judy. Thanks for your review (and others i haven't managed to respond to).
Yes, it does feel like an honour to work there. All the guides are very proud of being able to share it with others. Unfortunately, we are getting so few visitors now that I am hardly ever called upon to be there.
Comment from Debra White
Haha! I like this LisaMay (AND I'm a mother!)
Please take my daughter and use her as a human duster - it might make her appreciate how damn good she actually has it here!!
I enjoyed your piece. Well presented and easy to follow - I'm sure any one could get this right using your method!
Thanks for the fun read and good luck in the contest.
Best wishes, Debra
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2020
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Haha! I like this LisaMay (AND I'm a mother!)
Please take my daughter and use her as a human duster - it might make her appreciate how damn good she actually has it here!!
I enjoyed your piece. Well presented and easy to follow - I'm sure any one could get this right using your method!
Thanks for the fun read and good luck in the contest.
Best wishes, Debra
Comment Written 29-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2020
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Thanks for your fun review. I wonder if there will be a flurry of cleaning now, with mothers dragging their children around?
Comment from Pantygynt
This is definitely required reading for all the millions of us who can boast a billiard room in our homes. N.B. For the benefit of Americans for billiard table read pool table.
This contest has resulted in some really interesting article. I can now make two more kinds of soup and clean under the billiard table I do not have on the polished oak flooring that is not present. What I need to do is to teach the dog how to clean up her hair that she moults not on the oak floor but on to the carpet. Sometimes I wonder why I bought a carpet as the amount of hair produced would easily make one.
I really enjoyed this piece of fun. It restored my faith in human nature after reading some of those so-called horror stories yesterday.
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2020
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This is definitely required reading for all the millions of us who can boast a billiard room in our homes. N.B. For the benefit of Americans for billiard table read pool table.
This contest has resulted in some really interesting article. I can now make two more kinds of soup and clean under the billiard table I do not have on the polished oak flooring that is not present. What I need to do is to teach the dog how to clean up her hair that she moults not on the oak floor but on to the carpet. Sometimes I wonder why I bought a carpet as the amount of hair produced would easily make one.
I really enjoyed this piece of fun. It restored my faith in human nature after reading some of those so-called horror stories yesterday.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2020
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Yes, I thought it would appeal to all the privileged masses. Enjoy your soup (I think you must have watered down the stew)... and your salt facial scrub. How is your sunset painting coming along?
(I can't stand reading horror stories - I used to read Dean's poetry, but he was an extremely skilled wordsmith.)
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I wish we could bring DK back he would show 'em.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written prose about how to clean under a billiard table and having fun while doing it. As long as the big is willing to partake in the fun it seems okay. I'm sure he enjoyed it also.
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2020
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A very well-written prose about how to clean under a billiard table and having fun while doing it. As long as the big is willing to partake in the fun it seems okay. I'm sure he enjoyed it also.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2020
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He did enjoy it, but probably only because he left his cell phone at home.
Comment from Vedika2
What else can you expect from a No. 1 ranked author. Delight to read, a learning for newbies like me that there is always a new and innovative way to look at everything. How to clean contest - in not so poetic way with humorous ingredients and method.
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reply by the author on 29-Jul-2020
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What else can you expect from a No. 1 ranked author. Delight to read, a learning for newbies like me that there is always a new and innovative way to look at everything. How to clean contest - in not so poetic way with humorous ingredients and method.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2020
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Hello Newbie!! Welcome to FanStory. Thanks for your comments about my story. I try to think of different scenarios, to use my imagination and present something a bit different to what other people do. Luckily, I have an interesting life that I can write about, so sometimes my stories are true (like this one), but more often i make them up.
Thanks for becoming a fan too - I hope i continue to write items that you enjoy reading.
What country do you live in? I am in New Zealand.
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Thank you replying. I am in UAE, originally from India. Did not get much support and push from family or friends in this area. So could not purse this earlier. Have only started blogging a year ago or so. This is my page on Wordpress. https://wordpress.com/home/seeking2balance.wordpress.com
Have a good day
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I travelled in India extensively when I was younger (twice), and i have been to Dubai and enjoyed it.
Good luck with your writing - you will find the FanStory community very helpful.
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Thanks.
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My first attempt to participate in story contest, can I request you to have a read and give your comments. Contest name: Someone Else.
Thanks
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ok I will do that.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Wow Lisa, this is an inventive write and full of your unique sense of humour! Ha ha ha, dragging a boy as a broom, never heard of such a thing, but if it gets the job done, then I'm all for it! His blazer is gonna need more than just a wash after this escapade. A fun write, well thought out and amusing, I was certainly entertained, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2020
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Wow Lisa, this is an inventive write and full of your unique sense of humour! Ha ha ha, dragging a boy as a broom, never heard of such a thing, but if it gets the job done, then I'm all for it! His blazer is gonna need more than just a wash after this escapade. A fun write, well thought out and amusing, I was certainly entertained, love Dolly x
Comment Written 29-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2020
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Thanks for your complimentary review. I had as much fun writing it as the boy and I did while doing the dusting. Not so much fun facing his cross mother, though.
Comment from RodG
I like how you get your reader involved in this essay, Lisa, and have fun doing so. I can almost visualize this human broom at work cleaning under that huge billiard table. A fun read that should appeal to all ages. Rod
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2020
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I like how you get your reader involved in this essay, Lisa, and have fun doing so. I can almost visualize this human broom at work cleaning under that huge billiard table. A fun read that should appeal to all ages. Rod
Comment Written 28-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2020
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Thanks for reviewing, Rod.
Comment from Lucy de Welles
Why do I completely and totally believe this story! I'm falling out of my chair! Writers are the most creative people on earth. Bet the kid fell for it and probably a piece of candy from behind the front desk.
Well done!
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2020
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Why do I completely and totally believe this story! I'm falling out of my chair! Writers are the most creative people on earth. Bet the kid fell for it and probably a piece of candy from behind the front desk.
Well done!
Comment Written 28-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2020
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You believe it because it's TRUE.
No candy for the kid - his mother works at the front desk and she wasn't very amused. The floor might have got clean, but he got filthy and she would've had to clean him up.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Interesting choice for a human broom and I like your technique of cleaning. Question one; are you going to patent this technique? Are you going to include the human element as a mandatory part of the technique. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2020
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Interesting choice for a human broom and I like your technique of cleaning. Question one; are you going to patent this technique? Are you going to include the human element as a mandatory part of the technique. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2020
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Thank you very much for your appreciation of my poem.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Separated at birth! This is delightful fun--right up my alley! My flash on the subject of short-cuts to housecleaning wold make a perfect companion. Good luck--this may well be a winner! Cheers. LIZ
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2020
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Separated at birth! This is delightful fun--right up my alley! My flash on the subject of short-cuts to housecleaning wold make a perfect companion. Good luck--this may well be a winner! Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 28-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2020
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Thanks for your encouraging comments.
