Snake Oil Medicine
a 60 word story16 total reviews
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is the one contest entry that delivers the requirement of a complete story in a maximum of sixty words. It's great, especially as it's so mysterious and enigmatic. you can read it several times, peeling back the layers.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2020
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This is the one contest entry that delivers the requirement of a complete story in a maximum of sixty words. It's great, especially as it's so mysterious and enigmatic. you can read it several times, peeling back the layers.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2020
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Thank you, Katherine
Comment from Debra White
Hello :)
I enjoyed your 60 word story.
I like how the transformation happens as we read but we only really realise at the end. Clever snaky word choice :)
Good luck in the voting booth.
Best wishes, Debra
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2020
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Hello :)
I enjoyed your 60 word story.
I like how the transformation happens as we read but we only really realise at the end. Clever snaky word choice :)
Good luck in the voting booth.
Best wishes, Debra
Comment Written 02-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2020
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Thank you, Debra
Comment from humpwhistle
Well, that certainly took me by surprise. I expect the Doc's colleagues are in for a surprise, too. Nicely done. With only 'sliding' and 'slithering', you could have made your case, I think. The 'darting tongue' might have gilded the lily.
Best of luck.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2020
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Well, that certainly took me by surprise. I expect the Doc's colleagues are in for a surprise, too. Nicely done. With only 'sliding' and 'slithering', you could have made your case, I think. The 'darting tongue' might have gilded the lily.
Best of luck.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 02-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2020
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Thank you, Lee.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I could do with a dose of that liquid! I have trouble with arthritis which seems to be a common complaint with the elderly that I have suffered since my thirties, but I find exercise is the best cure so far, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2020
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I could do with a dose of that liquid! I have trouble with arthritis which seems to be a common complaint with the elderly that I have suffered since my thirties, but I find exercise is the best cure so far, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 02-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2020
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Thank you, Dolly
Comment from lyenochka
Lol! I like it! I guess this chemistry professor will have some more explaining to do - especially if he can't talk at all and he gets hauled away by the pest control folks. Cute title, too! Hope you do well in the contest!
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2020
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Lol! I like it! I guess this chemistry professor will have some more explaining to do - especially if he can't talk at all and he gets hauled away by the pest control folks. Cute title, too! Hope you do well in the contest!
Comment Written 02-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2020
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Thank you, lyenochka
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This was a fun plot. The character development and evolution draw the reader in. This could be an extended story. Imagine the stir unbeknownst to the professor. The reader can sit and giggle wondering what will happen.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2020
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This was a fun plot. The character development and evolution draw the reader in. This could be an extended story. Imagine the stir unbeknownst to the professor. The reader can sit and giggle wondering what will happen.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2020
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Thank you, Liz
Comment from Patty Palmer
This is rather interesting. He expected to take care of his pains and when he realized that his pain was gone, he rushed off to tell his colleagues not realizing that he now was a snake. Good luck with the contest.
Patty
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2020
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This is rather interesting. He expected to take care of his pains and when he realized that his pain was gone, he rushed off to tell his colleagues not realizing that he now was a snake. Good luck with the contest.
Patty
Comment Written 01-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2020
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Thank you, Patty
Comment from elchupakabra
I like this piece, it is well done and a nice twist on the classic Jekyll and Hyde tale. You did well with the limited words. Good luck in the contest, thank you for sharing, later daze.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2020
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I like this piece, it is well done and a nice twist on the classic Jekyll and Hyde tale. You did well with the limited words. Good luck in the contest, thank you for sharing, later daze.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2020
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Thank you, elchupakabra
Comment from LisaMay
This is a clever story - i love it. How appropriate that he took Snake Oil medicine - a cautionary tale. Hmmm... that's a toss up - whether to be free of arthritic joint pain or to be a snake. I guess his colleagues are in for a shock. That professor may have a short life... unless he is a talking snake and becomes a celebrity.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2020
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This is a clever story - i love it. How appropriate that he took Snake Oil medicine - a cautionary tale. Hmmm... that's a toss up - whether to be free of arthritic joint pain or to be a snake. I guess his colleagues are in for a shock. That professor may have a short life... unless he is a talking snake and becomes a celebrity.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2020
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Thank you, Lisa, for the encouraging review.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, anonymous,
LOL this is so cute... did he turn into a snake?
Excellent entry for the 60 WORD DASH writing prompt contest. Good word count. Nice presentation. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2020
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Hello, anonymous,
LOL this is so cute... did he turn into a snake?
Excellent entry for the 60 WORD DASH writing prompt contest. Good word count. Nice presentation. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 01-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2020
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Thank you, Gypsy, for the kind review.
