Twilight Hour
A 5-7-5-7-7 tanka for the Quiet contest7 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, my friend,
Lovely entry for the Quiet writing prompt contest. You fulfilled the rules of the contest. Great poetic form and presentation.
I love short poems. Your 5/7/5 is beautiful...great imagery. Syllable count is good. Connection between lines is good too. Well done.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2020
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Hello, my friend,
Lovely entry for the Quiet writing prompt contest. You fulfilled the rules of the contest. Great poetic form and presentation.
I love short poems. Your 5/7/5 is beautiful...great imagery. Syllable count is good. Connection between lines is good too. Well done.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2020
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I prefer short poems, but not everyone gets them. Thanks for the encouraging feedback!
Comment from RShipp
You have met the requirements of the contest- Your poem ends with the word "quiet".
A beautiful picture accompanies your poem.
I can picture tham quietly conversing.
Well done.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2020
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You have met the requirements of the contest- Your poem ends with the word "quiet".
A beautiful picture accompanies your poem.
I can picture tham quietly conversing.
Well done.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2020
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Thank you for your encouraging feedback. It is much appreciated!
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You're very welcome.
Comment from Mia Twysted
I love the picture you have choosen to go along with this piece. It helps create that imagain in your mind. I can see two lovers hiding in the bushes struring things us.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2020
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I love the picture you have choosen to go along with this piece. It helps create that imagain in your mind. I can see two lovers hiding in the bushes struring things us.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2020
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Thank you!
Comment from RodG
This very short poem sets a scene of romance that is easy to visualize. I can SEE the mist enveloping the village and the moon eavesdropping on the lovers. The whole scene has a very QUIET atmosphere. Rod
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2020
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This very short poem sets a scene of romance that is easy to visualize. I can SEE the mist enveloping the village and the moon eavesdropping on the lovers. The whole scene has a very QUIET atmosphere. Rod
Comment Written 06-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2020
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So glad you enjoyed this piece. I appreciate your insightful feedback.
Comment from lyenochka
That's a clever personification of the moon. The lovers thought they could keep their romance "quiet" but the moon's gold dust and eavesdropping reveals their tryst. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2020
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That's a clever personification of the moon. The lovers thought they could keep their romance "quiet" but the moon's gold dust and eavesdropping reveals their tryst. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 06-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2020
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Thank you for sharing your insightful thoughts!
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Oh, I do like the ambiance you've created through the first four lines and then introduce that image of the lovers wrapped around each other in the shadows.. :) Great idea and best of luck! ;)
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2020
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Oh, I do like the ambiance you've created through the first four lines and then introduce that image of the lovers wrapped around each other in the shadows.. :) Great idea and best of luck! ;)
Comment Written 06-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2020
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Thank you!
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice image
and presentation.
-A well written tanka
that includes the required word.
-Effective imagery and good
opening lines.
-A good pivot line.
-Effective personification as
the moon eavesdrops,
and a very good concluding line.
-A good entry; good luck.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2020
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-Very nice image
and presentation.
-A well written tanka
that includes the required word.
-Effective imagery and good
opening lines.
-A good pivot line.
-Effective personification as
the moon eavesdrops,
and a very good concluding line.
-A good entry; good luck.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for sharing your insightful thoughts!
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You are welcome.
