The Heart Remembers
A Shadorma story in a poem20 total reviews
Comment from Cindy Decker
June,
What a beautiful heart-wrenching poem. At first its that tension of first glance; will they meet? They fall in love, marry, and then he is stricken with Alzheimer's. How very sad. Then, you lift up the reader with such a sweet surprise. June, you're such an exceptional writer. Have a good week.
Good luck in the contest.
Cindy
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2020
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June,
What a beautiful heart-wrenching poem. At first its that tension of first glance; will they meet? They fall in love, marry, and then he is stricken with Alzheimer's. How very sad. Then, you lift up the reader with such a sweet surprise. June, you're such an exceptional writer. Have a good week.
Good luck in the contest.
Cindy
Comment Written 16-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2020
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Glad you enjoyed this piece story in a poem.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is such an appropriate form for the subject matter here June and it is a sad tale, Alzheimer's robs a person of their memories which are a gift later in life, such a sad and well written story June, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020
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This is such an appropriate form for the subject matter here June and it is a sad tale, Alzheimer's robs a person of their memories which are a gift later in life, such a sad and well written story June, love Dolly x
Comment Written 13-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020
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Always glad to get your input. This was a sad- but something many can relate to.
Comment from Bill Schott
This story poem in Shadorma form, The Heart Remembers, takes the reader to a life lived well, yet brought to a sad ending by the mind-robbing disease. The ending is both somber and serene.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2020
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This story poem in Shadorma form, The Heart Remembers, takes the reader to a life lived well, yet brought to a sad ending by the mind-robbing disease. The ending is both somber and serene.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2020
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Thank you !
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, anonymous,
Great entry for the Story Poem writing prompt contest. I love the shadorma form, I use it all the time.
Your story about marriage and Alzheimer is powerful.
The story is well written and engaging. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2020
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Hello, anonymous,
Great entry for the Story Poem writing prompt contest. I love the shadorma form, I use it all the time.
Your story about marriage and Alzheimer is powerful.
The story is well written and engaging. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2020
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Thank you! I love trying out new formats and the shadorma resonated with me. You and Dolly always inspire me to learn more.
Comment from RShipp
What a simple but grand story. It is so sad when loved ones have 'lost' memories.
I believe you have met the requirements of this contest: Write a poem of any type and any length that tells a story.
Best of luck with the Story Poem writing contest.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2020
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What a simple but grand story. It is so sad when loved ones have 'lost' memories.
I believe you have met the requirements of this contest: Write a poem of any type and any length that tells a story.
Best of luck with the Story Poem writing contest.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2020
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Thank you!
Comment from mauial
This was a really rhytmic poem with a good story line that many really do experience. First time I saw this poem form and I really appreciate your notes on it. Got to give it a try.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2020
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This was a really rhytmic poem with a good story line that many really do experience. First time I saw this poem form and I really appreciate your notes on it. Got to give it a try.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2020
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Thank you!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was so sad, and so common these days. I wonder why? More families have a relative that has Alzheimer's, or Dementia, than ever before. It's the cruelest, most frightening of all todays illness's. Well done, this is a sad, but true poem. Good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2020
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That was so sad, and so common these days. I wonder why? More families have a relative that has Alzheimer's, or Dementia, than ever before. It's the cruelest, most frightening of all todays illness's. Well done, this is a sad, but true poem. Good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 12-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2020
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Thank you!
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
I could understand your subject in the words you chose for the entry for the Story writing prompt. I wish you great good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2020
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I could understand your subject in the words you chose for the entry for the Story writing prompt. I wish you great good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 12-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2020
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Thank you!
Comment from lyenochka
Great job with your story told so beautifully with this Shadorma form. I love that the love story showed that his "old sweet smile" showed his spirit was still there despite the disease. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2020
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Great job with your story told so beautifully with this Shadorma form. I love that the love story showed that his "old sweet smile" showed his spirit was still there despite the disease. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 12-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2020
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Thank you!
Comment from Liz O'Neill
I love how you featured the wink. You definitely pulled the reader in. They almost felt like they were being winked at and they caught the wink. This ends up very sad. Your will draw the reader in to reflect upon a similar experience. I am giving this A+ and voting for it.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2020
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I love how you featured the wink. You definitely pulled the reader in. They almost felt like they were being winked at and they caught the wink. This ends up very sad. Your will draw the reader in to reflect upon a similar experience. I am giving this A+ and voting for it.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for the insightful review and most generous rating!
