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Bicycle Built for Two

A rhyming poem with no poetic style

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Comment from Jasmine Girl
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I really like this poem and it is so funny. You managed to put in humor with words and rhythm. I especially like the last two paragraphs.

Well done.

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2020

reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020
    Lisa, thank you, smiling back!
Comment from June Sargent
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This is a really fun piece with great rhythm - it flows beautifully like a wheel on a bicycle. No bumps. And it paints a lovely picture of the good old days. Great entry.

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2020

reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020
    June, I so appreciate your review and comments,I believe that we still have many "good days" ahead.
Comment from royowen
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Beautifully written, but perhaps not as much rhythm and "three blind mice, but that has even meter, which is what the contest means, but no rhyming, sorry, I'm actually a song writer, good luck, Good to meet you, blessings, Roy

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2020

reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020
    Thank you, so Roy... what is your genre of music?
Comment from Janet Foor
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I loved the topic of your rhyming poem and the artwork is perfect.

There are a few nits however.
Line 2. She would "be" the one with auburn locks
line 3. "a"nd wearing red socks

I did enjoy the story in this poem.

Blessings
Janet

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2020

reply by the author on 12-Aug-2020
    Janet, thanks made a bad edit on my iPhone, Will not to that again, LOL
Comment from Patty Palmer
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This poem reminds me of the old song about a bicycle built for two.... I can't afford a carrige but you'll look sweet on a bicycle built for two... I'm not that old but I remember hearing the song. I enjoyed the picture as well. Good job!
Patty

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2020

reply by the author on 12-Aug-2020
    Thank you so much for reviewing and commenting on my poem.
Comment from Margaret Bednar
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"nd wearing red socks,"... (and?)

So, he is smitten - reads almost more like a father than a suitor, perhaps. I like the sue of sassy lassie and how she stands straight as a steeple. Lets us get to know her a bit. I lie the use of internal rhyme - I like it so much better than end rhyme ;)

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2020

reply by the author on 12-Aug-2020
    Fixed, thanks for the fixes.
Comment from RShipp
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I enjoyed the read. I can see others stopping to stare- including the copper.

I believe that you have met all the requirements of this contest: Compose any type of poem with rhythm but no rhyme scheme.

Best of luck in the "Rhythm Poetry" writing contest.

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2020

reply by the author on 12-Aug-2020
    Thank you!
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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A rhyming poem with no poetic style
Bicycle Built for Two

Hello, anonymous,

Cool entry for the Rhythm Poetry writing prompt contest. I'm not a rhyme/meter expert but I know that to write a poem without it but with rhythm is a challenge. Well done. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2020

reply by the author on 12-Aug-2020
    Gypsy, thank you for the acknowledgement, and good wishes.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
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I think this is a great little poem with the rhyme littered about casually through the lines. There is also a rhythm that, when read aloud, is quite bouncy. The topic is fun, a bicycle made for two with the man's sassy lassie on it with another man! Well, that is so improper! I really enjoyed this one. Well done, and good luck! :)) Sandra xx

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2020

reply by the author on 12-Aug-2020
    Sandra, I do so appreciate your comments and well wishes.
Comment from Jacob David Collins
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I enjoyed this and it did make me smile as I was reading it. I particularly liked the last line. I thought your writing flowed well and it was well written. Good luck in the contest!

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2020

reply by the author on 12-Aug-2020
    Jacobs for the good wishes jacob.