The Fearful Horse
(5-7-5) When the wind blows...14 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This nature 5-7-5, The Fearful Horse, has the right set up and finds the wrangler dealing with a skittish pony over unknown terrain. Sounds like no fun.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2020
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This nature 5-7-5, The Fearful Horse, has the right set up and finds the wrangler dealing with a skittish pony over unknown terrain. Sounds like no fun.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2020
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Yep, I'd rather be on a motorbike.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Your words here brought the scene to life with the horse twitching and the tussocks trembling, I was on the journey with you here, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2020
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Your words here brought the scene to life with the horse twitching and the tussocks trembling, I was on the journey with you here, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 18-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2020
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Well.... I'd rather be on a motorbike.
Comment from jaded831
You painted a picture with your words followed by a lesson on grasses. I love to learn, so was glad you took the time to teach me something. You should do well in the contest. Good luck.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2020
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You painted a picture with your words followed by a lesson on grasses. I love to learn, so was glad you took the time to teach me something. You should do well in the contest. Good luck.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2020
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When i wrote the poem and posted it i made the assumption that everyone would know what "tussocks" were, as they are very common in my country. When I saw that some reviewers did not know, i was happy to educate them! Otherwise the poem falls down in understanding, which is probably why it will not be among the top entries when voting is finalised.
Comment from CrystieCookie999
Gotta love those horse poems. And I learned a new word: tussocks. I guess the word 'midst' gives it an air of the past, a bit. Love that tip-of-the-tongue 't' alliteration with: twitches, thorny, tussocks, trembling, tawny. It's been years, but I do remember seeing the flanks of horses twitch when a horsefly or something irritated them. Nice moment captured in time.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2020
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Gotta love those horse poems. And I learned a new word: tussocks. I guess the word 'midst' gives it an air of the past, a bit. Love that tip-of-the-tongue 't' alliteration with: twitches, thorny, tussocks, trembling, tawny. It's been years, but I do remember seeing the flanks of horses twitch when a horsefly or something irritated them. Nice moment captured in time.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2020
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You're the second person who didn't know about tussocks - I guess there aren't any in Utah. I get so used to what the landscape is in my country that I think these areas must be universal. (We have lots of tussock grassland areas, especially in high country zones where they muster sheep and cattle.)
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We probably have a few here and there, but I never knew there was a word for them. We would probably say "wild grass."
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is a fine thought for the 5-7-5 Nature Poem entry. Sometime short thoughts can really hit the spot, touch our heart, and even be encouraging. Well done!
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This is a fine thought for the 5-7-5 Nature Poem entry. Sometime short thoughts can really hit the spot, touch our heart, and even be encouraging. Well done!
Comment Written 17-Aug-2020
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, anonymous,
Great entry for the 5-7-5 Nature writing prompt contest. Good syllable count and connection between lines that facilitates flow. Nice presentation. I like the horse and nature theme.
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Hello, anonymous,
Great entry for the 5-7-5 Nature writing prompt contest. Good syllable count and connection between lines that facilitates flow. Nice presentation. I like the horse and nature theme.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2020
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 5-7-5 nature poem about horses that can become nervous and fearful when they hear the thorny tussocks, trembling in the wind blowing on the hillside.
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A very well-written 5-7-5 nature poem about horses that can become nervous and fearful when they hear the thorny tussocks, trembling in the wind blowing on the hillside.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2020
Comment from equestrik
As a horse lover I was drawn to this and feel you have done a good job with the 5-7-5 challenge. Fearful horses are often difficult and unpredictable but can be calmed with patience.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2020
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As a horse lover I was drawn to this and feel you have done a good job with the 5-7-5 challenge. Fearful horses are often difficult and unpredictable but can be calmed with patience.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2020
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Thanks for reviewing. Patience is a good strategy in most situations. A horse can settle when it trusts.
Comment from ameen786
Picture perfect write with superb alliteration, vivid description and informative author notes; just curious, why you used "Scrawny" and not "Twiggy"-to sustain the 'T' alliteration; thanks for the treat and good luck!
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reply by the author on 16-Aug-2020
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Picture perfect write with superb alliteration, vivid description and informative author notes; just curious, why you used "Scrawny" and not "Twiggy"-to sustain the 'T' alliteration; thanks for the treat and good luck!
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Comment Written 16-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2020
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Twiggy might sustain a 'T' sound, but 'scrawny' rhymes with 'thorny' and 'tawny'. 'Twiggy' means little sticks (or that emaciated fashion model from the 60s), and I wanted to suggest that a skinny horse would be fearful in that landscape, feeling the thorns and the wind chill factor.
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Hats off! You're the best.
Comment from zanya
'T' sounds underline the theme /subject matter - a sense of a somewhat inhospitable location for both man and beast - it's always wonderful to come across a new word - just checked out the definition for 'tussock'!
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2020
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'T' sounds underline the theme /subject matter - a sense of a somewhat inhospitable location for both man and beast - it's always wonderful to come across a new word - just checked out the definition for 'tussock'!
Comment Written 16-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2020
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Thanks for your review. It never occurred to me that "tussock' isn't a commonly-known word. It must be regional to my country. i probably should put an explanation in a note below.
