Spinning Out Of Control
Free verse poem of current chaos.14 total reviews
Comment from Mary Furlong
No flimflam here. You have truly captured today's prevailing experience. The last line tells it all. Well done, including your choice of illustration.. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2020
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No flimflam here. You have truly captured today's prevailing experience. The last line tells it all. Well done, including your choice of illustration.. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2020
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Thanks for your comments, Mary.
We live in chaotic times to the detriment of our humanity.
Comment from Leigha Winfrey
I get a kind-of "As The World Turns," feel with this particular poem, like the reoccurring, everyday task that happen while the world is constantly turning. Everyday with life's ups and downs, trials and tribulations, happiness's and sorrows the world still spins regardless. That can easily create the feeling of life spinning out of control and how helpless we as humans can feel over our situations at times. Awesome job at describing that feeling. (Like I don't feel that enough) LOL.
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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2020
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I get a kind-of "As The World Turns," feel with this particular poem, like the reoccurring, everyday task that happen while the world is constantly turning. Everyday with life's ups and downs, trials and tribulations, happiness's and sorrows the world still spins regardless. That can easily create the feeling of life spinning out of control and how helpless we as humans can feel over our situations at times. Awesome job at describing that feeling. (Like I don't feel that enough) LOL.
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Comment Written 18-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2020
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Thanks for your comments, Leigha.
We live in chaotic times to the detriment of our humanity.
Comment from equestrik
This is certainly one way to look at things. It is a bit dismal to be as I tend to see the good and magic in life but it is well written and well expressed.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2020
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This is certainly one way to look at things. It is a bit dismal to be as I tend to see the good and magic in life but it is well written and well expressed.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2020
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I am more inclined to view life as you do too, but i'd just been watching a news broadcast and some anger-inducing interviews immediately prior to writing this poem and that is what influenced its creation.
I still find much to admire and enjoy in life.
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Comment from TommyWrites
This is so true-it's kind of painful. Everything IS spinning out of control. Which you depict very well in your poem. I liked how you used games to explain what is going on, because in a way...all of this is one big game against good and evil. Just a matter of which side of the chess board you're on, I suppose. Very good poem Mystery Writer! Good luck in the contest,
TommyWrites~
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This is so true-it's kind of painful. Everything IS spinning out of control. Which you depict very well in your poem. I liked how you used games to explain what is going on, because in a way...all of this is one big game against good and evil. Just a matter of which side of the chess board you're on, I suppose. Very good poem Mystery Writer! Good luck in the contest,
TommyWrites~
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Comment Written 18-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2020
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Thank very much for understanding the feeling of my poem. Games should be fun, but when we feel used as pawns or playthings in others' evil intentions it is no fun anymore.
