Cascading Memories of Love
Entry for the Repetition contest17 total reviews
Comment from Liz O'Neill
Your metaphors are vivid. The imagery is strong. The reader will be drawn in to reflect upon their cascading memories. They could be inspired to write their own poem as this. Well expressed.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
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Your metaphors are vivid. The imagery is strong. The reader will be drawn in to reflect upon their cascading memories. They could be inspired to write their own poem as this. Well expressed.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much!
Comment from Mia Twysted
That is very pretty. The piece was easy to read and carried through from beginning to end as if I was in the tunnel of love. I felt warmth and trust and as if each and every memory was cherrished.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
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That is very pretty. The piece was easy to read and carried through from beginning to end as if I was in the tunnel of love. I felt warmth and trust and as if each and every memory was cherrished.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much!
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is an easy to read, easy to understand poem entry for the Repetition Poetry contest. This is very revealing, and it should do well. I wish you the best of luck!
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
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This is an easy to read, easy to understand poem entry for the Repetition Poetry contest. This is very revealing, and it should do well. I wish you the best of luck!
Comment Written 21-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
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Thank you!
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You're welcome. Good luck!
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your poem is very skillfully and creatively written, descriptive, and romantic. The repeat line is effectively placed. I just wonder why this is in past tense, since the love described seems so enduring (makes me wonder why it ended~~"Pearls from above" implies death).
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Your poem is very skillfully and creatively written, descriptive, and romantic. The repeat line is effectively placed. I just wonder why this is in past tense, since the love described seems so enduring (makes me wonder why it ended~~"Pearls from above" implies death).
Comment Written 21-Aug-2020
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, anonymous,
Good job with the entry for the Repetition writing prompt contest. Nice imagery. You repeated one line in each stanza as the rules requires. Nice presentation. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
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Hello, anonymous,
Good job with the entry for the Repetition writing prompt contest. Nice imagery. You repeated one line in each stanza as the rules requires. Nice presentation. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
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Thanks for the reminder that I was repeating words, but not a full line. I revised it - not sure if I improved the poem. But at least it fits the rules.
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It's great, I updated the review. :)
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I placed third! June Sargent
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Congratulations!!
Comment from victor 66
This is a very well rhymed poem about one of my favorite subjects, love. The only suggestion, a minor one of that, is in the second stanza, rather than using "kidskin", I'd just use "very smooth". Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
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This is a very well rhymed poem about one of my favorite subjects, love. The only suggestion, a minor one of that, is in the second stanza, rather than using "kidskin", I'd just use "very smooth". Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
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Ok. Will see how that works. Thank you for sharing your insights!
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You are most welcome.
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Cascading Memories, is nicely metered and set to rhyme. The repeating line provides the continued expression of remembrance for a treasured time.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
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This poem, Cascading Memories, is nicely metered and set to rhyme. The repeating line provides the continued expression of remembrance for a treasured time.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much!
Comment from royowen
A beautifully written poem that is a marvellous entry in this contest. I love your choice of cascading was always a great word choice as it signifies flowing, whether it be water or love flowing from a loving heart, this is a great entry in this contest, great rhyme and "flow", with great rhyme in aabb couplets, well dine, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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A beautifully written poem that is a marvellous entry in this contest. I love your choice of cascading was always a great word choice as it signifies flowing, whether it be water or love flowing from a loving heart, this is a great entry in this contest, great rhyme and "flow", with great rhyme in aabb couplets, well dine, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 20-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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Thank you for sharing your deep insights.
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Welcome
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My pleasure
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job with y9our contest entry, Mystery Writer. I enjoyed reading it. Your lines flow smoothly with good rhymes and great imagery. I like the way you used your repeating line. Many kyrielles have it as the last line of a verse. Yours works well where it is place. The image is a good choice.
Thanks for sharing. Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2020
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You did a great job with y9our contest entry, Mystery Writer. I enjoyed reading it. Your lines flow smoothly with good rhymes and great imagery. I like the way you used your repeating line. Many kyrielles have it as the last line of a verse. Yours works well where it is place. The image is a good choice.
Thanks for sharing. Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 19-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2020
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Thank you!
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My sister died 2 years ago, and it feel lie yesterday.
Comment from Mimi Linny
Such soft and tender "cascading memories of love!" A beautiful poem reflecting those special moments. The photo is a beautiful match to your sweet poem!
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2020
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Such soft and tender "cascading memories of love!" A beautiful poem reflecting those special moments. The photo is a beautiful match to your sweet poem!
Comment Written 19-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2020
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Thank you!
