Viewing the World With Fresh Eyes
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Swimming Lesson"The fifteen Years of My Life
20 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
That is one story your parents didn't need to know about, of course, you couldn't lie, but if they don't ask don't tell. LOL I enjoyed reading your story and wish you the best of luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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That is one story your parents didn't need to know about, of course, you couldn't lie, but if they don't ask don't tell. LOL I enjoyed reading your story and wish you the best of luck with the contest.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and comments. No telling that to my parents might have meant I wouldn't be allowed out of the house again.
Beth
Comment from Mastery
Great human interest story here, Beth. Only one thong bothered me about it:
"We had no TV, as they were not yet popular in our part of the world, and my family didn't even own a phone." Why in the world wouldn't you just say where it was that you were located? Much more interesting that way in my opinion.
Good story though. lucky for all of us, you dog paddled. :) Bob
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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Great human interest story here, Beth. Only one thong bothered me about it:
"We had no TV, as they were not yet popular in our part of the world, and my family didn't even own a phone." Why in the world wouldn't you just say where it was that you were located? Much more interesting that way in my opinion.
Good story though. lucky for all of us, you dog paddled. :) Bob
Comment Written 20-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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You are right. Most all my fans are aware that I lived in a small town in Mississippi because I've said it many times, but I should have remembered there would be reviewer that didn't know that. I'll fix that. You're the first to mention it.
Beth
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If I am the first, perhaps don't change a thing, Beth. Wow
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is a great entry for the True Story writing prompt. I was glued to it from the beginning to the end. I hope this story does well in the contest. Good luck!
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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This is a great entry for the True Story writing prompt. I was glued to it from the beginning to the end. I hope this story does well in the contest. Good luck!
Comment Written 20-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and comments. I remember your own true story being extremely good. It was fun to remember whether it does well or not. I like true story contests.
Beth
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Me too.
Comment from Dick Waters
Thanks Beth for sharing your interesting story. It's too bad your childhood was experienced this way. You must have read many books. I feel for you.
I see nothing that needs to be changed in your story. It drew me in from the first paragraph. The picture was perfect for the story also.
Our current world is more of a time/place to be concerned about kids. The past are the good old days. We all learn from our experiences, and I'm sure you parented in a different manner.
One recommendation regarding a picture, is to find an applicable Norman Rockwell drawing for your next story. I have found that people seem to look at the related story more often. Just a suggestion.
Thanks for sharing.
Dick
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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Thanks Beth for sharing your interesting story. It's too bad your childhood was experienced this way. You must have read many books. I feel for you.
I see nothing that needs to be changed in your story. It drew me in from the first paragraph. The picture was perfect for the story also.
Our current world is more of a time/place to be concerned about kids. The past are the good old days. We all learn from our experiences, and I'm sure you parented in a different manner.
One recommendation regarding a picture, is to find an applicable Norman Rockwell drawing for your next story. I have found that people seem to look at the related story more often. Just a suggestion.
Thanks for sharing.
Dick
Comment Written 20-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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I did read a lot as a child, but although I complained, I had a great childhood. I wouldn't change a thing. Children today are different. There was a big difference between my first three born it the sixties and the last one born in the seventies. I can't imagine what they're like today. I gave mine more freedom than I had, but they still turned out okay.
Beth
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Of course they turned out okay, you gave them the right role model.
Best regards,
Dick
Comment from nancy_e_davis
That's how I learned. I was pushed into the water by kids runny past at the pool and I learned to swim very fast. Then it became my new found love! I spent every summer after that in the water enjoying the sun and pool. Good luck in the True Story Contest. Nancy xxx
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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That's how I learned. I was pushed into the water by kids runny past at the pool and I learned to swim very fast. Then it became my new found love! I spent every summer after that in the water enjoying the sun and pool. Good luck in the True Story Contest. Nancy xxx
Comment Written 20-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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Nancy, It is one way to learn but I wouldn't recommend. Somehow, the instinct to survive takes over. To this day I do love the water and it is the only form of exercise that interests me. I try to do water aerobics three a week.
Beth
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
Your story resonates with me because I never learned to swim either. I could float, but that was it. Because of a scary near drowning when I was younger, I never wanted to go in any deep water. I can understand how panicked you must have been when they pushed that boat out into deep water. How proud you must been that you maintained your equilibrium and dog paddled. Good story for the contest.
Ralf
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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Your story resonates with me because I never learned to swim either. I could float, but that was it. Because of a scary near drowning when I was younger, I never wanted to go in any deep water. I can understand how panicked you must have been when they pushed that boat out into deep water. How proud you must been that you maintained your equilibrium and dog paddled. Good story for the contest.
Ralf
Comment Written 20-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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I know I can stay afloat now by kicking and paddling, but I prefer not to be in deep water. A kid got on my back and almost drowned me while we were living in the apartments. I'm glad you liked my story.
Beth
Comment from Mistydawn
What a great story. It's a very well-written, interesting piece start to finish. The end was suspenseful. Wasn't sure if someone could save your friend in time. That was a heck of a way to swim, poor thing. I wish I had a six to give but I'm all out. Good luck with your contest.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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What a great story. It's a very well-written, interesting piece start to finish. The end was suspenseful. Wasn't sure if someone could save your friend in time. That was a heck of a way to swim, poor thing. I wish I had a six to give but I'm all out. Good luck with your contest.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and the great comments. No problem about the stars. We never have enough. I'm pleased your like it.
Beth
Comment from Jacob David Collins
This was a well written piece, Beth about your childhood experience. I could see how frustrating it must have been for you when your parents didn't allow you to do what other children were doing. But I could also see that your dad wanted to protect you. I enjoyed reading it and I thought your writing flowed well. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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This was a well written piece, Beth about your childhood experience. I could see how frustrating it must have been for you when your parents didn't allow you to do what other children were doing. But I could also see that your dad wanted to protect you. I enjoyed reading it and I thought your writing flowed well. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 20-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for the review. I enjoyed your comments.
Beth
Comment from RShipp
"She suggested that we sit in a boat docked by the edge of the lake." As soon as I read that line, I knew the boat was going in the deep waters- I just didn't know about the teen boys.
Loved the wisdom of keeping this story to herself at the end!
Question- Have you told your Dad yet? What happened?
Best of luck in the True Story Contest.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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"She suggested that we sit in a boat docked by the edge of the lake." As soon as I read that line, I knew the boat was going in the deep waters- I just didn't know about the teen boys.
Loved the wisdom of keeping this story to herself at the end!
Question- Have you told your Dad yet? What happened?
Best of luck in the True Story Contest.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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Once I had a bit more freedom in my life, I told my mom, I'd learned to swim. I;m sure Dad learned eventually. There is much kids keep from their parents. My kids are now confessing to things I knew nothing about when they were growing up. I really appreciated the review and comments.
Comment from Ben Colder
LOL. Most surely. Your Poppa would have had cow. Sounds like something my buddies and me would have done but made sure you would not have drown.
Good one BETH. Out of six.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2020
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LOL. Most surely. Your Poppa would have had cow. Sounds like something my buddies and me would have done but made sure you would not have drown.
Good one BETH. Out of six.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2020
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Thanks for the review and comments. So you would have been one of those guys, I would have had to worry about. LOL
Beth
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More than likely. Afterwards I would probably need to pray through about it, but knowing me at the time, yep I'm sure I would. Have a great evening
