Next Stop Normandy
One man in the right place can matter30 total reviews
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I loved Quantum Leap, and your story would have made a great part in the series. I especially liked the line...The only thing between me and the dirt was my buttons.... That was brilliant, I wish I'd thought of that! I often wonder what difference one single life would make to our future if that person hadn't died, we'll never know, but if we did have the capability to quantum leap, think of all the changes we'd make! Would it be a good thing? I think this one should do well in the contest, well done, and good luck! :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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I loved Quantum Leap, and your story would have made a great part in the series. I especially liked the line...The only thing between me and the dirt was my buttons.... That was brilliant, I wish I'd thought of that! I often wonder what difference one single life would make to our future if that person hadn't died, we'll never know, but if we did have the capability to quantum leap, think of all the changes we'd make! Would it be a good thing? I think this one should do well in the contest, well done, and good luck! :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 27-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much Sandra. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my story.
Comment from Steven Hicks
This is a great flash fiction for this particular contest. It fulfills the rules to the letter but what I really like is that what your protagonist did made a minor change to the current day, but a much greater change in the future. Well done -- good luck. I'm glad I didn't enter this one.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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This is a great flash fiction for this particular contest. It fulfills the rules to the letter but what I really like is that what your protagonist did made a minor change to the current day, but a much greater change in the future. Well done -- good luck. I'm glad I didn't enter this one.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my story.
Comment from writer723
I really enjoyed your entry. It was very interesting and it had me on the edge of my seat, waiting to find out what would happen next. I liked how you incorporated Al into the story. It made me feel like I was watching an episode of Quantum Leap. You did a great job writing this story. I'm glad the character, Leonard Moore, received a second chance at life because of Sam's bravery in taking the big leap.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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I really enjoyed your entry. It was very interesting and it had me on the edge of my seat, waiting to find out what would happen next. I liked how you incorporated Al into the story. It made me feel like I was watching an episode of Quantum Leap. You did a great job writing this story. I'm glad the character, Leonard Moore, received a second chance at life because of Sam's bravery in taking the big leap.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my story.
Comment from Tpa
I enjoyed your story. It was very well-paced. You brought your characters and descriptions to life with the action that you instilled. I wish you the best in your contest.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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I enjoyed your story. It was very well-paced. You brought your characters and descriptions to life with the action that you instilled. I wish you the best in your contest.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my story.
Comment from elchupakabra
"In the original history that sniper you took out killed seven men, but it's the one who was wounded is why you were here."
"In the original timeline, that sniper you took out killed seven men. However, you changed that, to protect the wounded soldier. This is the reason you're here."
This one sentence needs a bit of a re-working to be more clear, but otherwise I thought the piece was well done. Good work and good luck in the contest, thanks for sharing. Later daze.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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"In the original history that sniper you took out killed seven men, but it's the one who was wounded is why you were here."
"In the original timeline, that sniper you took out killed seven men. However, you changed that, to protect the wounded soldier. This is the reason you're here."
This one sentence needs a bit of a re-working to be more clear, but otherwise I thought the piece was well done. Good work and good luck in the contest, thanks for sharing. Later daze.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my story.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Wow, a luck shot or not, that kept a famous person fighting for more 27 years: " You did it!"
"What did I do?"
"In the original history that sniper you took out killed seven men, but it's the one who was wounded is why you were here."
"Why was he so special?'
"His name is Leonard Moore. Originally he died. His shoulder wound healed up and he made a full recovery."
"What's so special about that?"
"Moore stayed in the Army for 27 years and was awarded the Medal of Honor for keeping his platoon from being overrun by the Vietcong in 1969." Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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Wow, a luck shot or not, that kept a famous person fighting for more 27 years: " You did it!"
"What did I do?"
"In the original history that sniper you took out killed seven men, but it's the one who was wounded is why you were here."
"Why was he so special?'
"His name is Leonard Moore. Originally he died. His shoulder wound healed up and he made a full recovery."
"What's so special about that?"
"Moore stayed in the Army for 27 years and was awarded the Medal of Honor for keeping his platoon from being overrun by the Vietcong in 1969." Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my story.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written science fiction story about a quantum leap into time to change the way history was written into a new ending that has great impact on the world history.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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A very well-written science fiction story about a quantum leap into time to change the way history was written into a new ending that has great impact on the world history.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my story.
Comment from Jacob David Collins
This was a fun piece to read. I couldn't imagine suddenly landing in one of the bloodiest battles of the Second World War. I thought your writing was really engaging and the dialogue was believable and flowed well. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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This was a fun piece to read. I couldn't imagine suddenly landing in one of the bloodiest battles of the Second World War. I thought your writing was really engaging and the dialogue was believable and flowed well. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 26-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my story.
Comment from LisaMay
Your story certainly did prove that "One man in the right place can matter". You took us through a harrowing landing scene - i could feel the bullets zinging past my ears and wounding others - then tweaked history for an interesting ending.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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Your story certainly did prove that "One man in the right place can matter". You took us through a harrowing landing scene - i could feel the bullets zinging past my ears and wounding others - then tweaked history for an interesting ending.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my story.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I remember the show. Your lines read well to go along with its premise, Mystery Writer. I was engaged from start to finish. Your words were filled with great imagery. I could see everything as it unfolded. I like the way your story opened and closed with the story like the in the series.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
May I suggest:
he only thing between me and the dirt were (was)--[you have a single subject that needs a single verb--thing was] my buttons.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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I remember the show. Your lines read well to go along with its premise, Mystery Writer. I was engaged from start to finish. Your words were filled with great imagery. I could see everything as it unfolded. I like the way your story opened and closed with the story like the in the series.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
May I suggest:
he only thing between me and the dirt were (was)--[you have a single subject that needs a single verb--thing was] my buttons.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my story.
