Next Stop Normandy
One man in the right place can matter30 total reviews
Comment from Veenbee
That was cool. I liked how you placed yourself in the story of Leonard Moore. The description of the war events held my attention all the way. I can't imagine war time, but so many have lived it. Great job. Veenbee
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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That was cool. I liked how you placed yourself in the story of Leonard Moore. The description of the war events held my attention all the way. I can't imagine war time, but so many have lived it. Great job. Veenbee
Comment Written 25-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much Veenbee. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my story.
Comment from Ben B.
Wait, I'm lost here. What was that blue haze in the end? Sounds effects should be either italicized or quoted. I heard capitalizing it is frowned upon. Despite all that, I liked you blend of history and action in this story.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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Wait, I'm lost here. What was that blue haze in the end? Sounds effects should be either italicized or quoted. I heard capitalizing it is frowned upon. Despite all that, I liked you blend of history and action in this story.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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If you ever watched the tv show the blue haze appeared when he leaped in and out. Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my story.
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Mystery Writer.
Excellent story. You have captured many of the thoughts and emotions of the soldiers storming Omaha Beach. Your details were vivid and you transitioned into the Quantum Leap with details about Leonard Moore.
Good luck in the contest.
Robert
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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Hello Mystery Writer.
Excellent story. You have captured many of the thoughts and emotions of the soldiers storming Omaha Beach. Your details were vivid and you transitioned into the Quantum Leap with details about Leonard Moore.
Good luck in the contest.
Robert
Comment Written 25-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much Robert. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my story.
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You're welcome
Comment from Ayan3
That was an amazing story and I hope you can write more stories and I also could not stop reading it and I hope you get the recognition you need for this story.
Sincerely, Ayan
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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That was an amazing story and I hope you can write more stories and I also could not stop reading it and I hope you get the recognition you need for this story.
Sincerely, Ayan
Comment Written 25-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much Ayan. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my story.
Comment from zanya
It's a very realistic description of what those Normandy beach landings might have felt like way back then with convincing dialogue to move the action along
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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It's a very realistic description of what those Normandy beach landings might have felt like way back then with convincing dialogue to move the action along
Comment Written 25-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my story.
Comment from RShipp
'I dropped to the ground. The only thing between me and the dirt were my buttons.' This was a great line!
I did not realize that this prompt was (likely) a take off on the TV show Quantum Leap. When I was younger- It was one of my favorites!
Best of luck in the 'Quantum Leap Into Time' writing prompt contest.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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'I dropped to the ground. The only thing between me and the dirt were my buttons.' This was a great line!
I did not realize that this prompt was (likely) a take off on the TV show Quantum Leap. When I was younger- It was one of my favorites!
Best of luck in the 'Quantum Leap Into Time' writing prompt contest.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my story.
Comment from pome lover
I never saw the show, but this is good. The only part I didn't get was when you said - in the middle of saying the Germans had tied themselves in, you say the sniper hung from a rope. What was that?
Anyway it is a good account and captivating present tense story telling.
I enjoyed it.
pome lover
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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I never saw the show, but this is good. The only part I didn't get was when you said - in the middle of saying the Germans had tied themselves in, you say the sniper hung from a rope. What was that?
Anyway it is a good account and captivating present tense story telling.
I enjoyed it.
pome lover
Comment Written 25-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much pome lover. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my story.
Comment from poetwatch
Enjoy? I loved that show too! One never knew where Ziggy would send Al and that was what made it so awesome, author. I had forgotten that show. They don't make them like they used too. You did a great job of quantum leaping. This is a very good offering for the Quantum Leap into Time contest.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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Enjoy? I loved that show too! One never knew where Ziggy would send Al and that was what made it so awesome, author. I had forgotten that show. They don't make them like they used too. You did a great job of quantum leaping. This is a very good offering for the Quantum Leap into Time contest.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my story.
Comment from equestrik
Wow! Good and exciting write here as you really expressed the emotion of war from a soldier's perspective. This kept me really engaged and reading. I did not expect that twist at the end. Nice writing.
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reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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Wow! Good and exciting write here as you really expressed the emotion of war from a soldier's perspective. This kept me really engaged and reading. I did not expect that twist at the end. Nice writing.
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Comment Written 25-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my story.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
I like the theme, I have enjoyed the read all the way, fast forward and briefly structured plot development, the beginning and resolved ending; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
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reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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I like the theme, I have enjoyed the read all the way, fast forward and briefly structured plot development, the beginning and resolved ending; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
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Comment Written 25-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much ALCREATOR. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my story.
