Sailors In The Storm
A song of the sea's dangers.16 total reviews
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Sailor and mermaid reunited by a storm at sea. "In stormy ocean swells
staunch sailors chant shanties,
awaiting death's embrace -
while mermaids murmur,
untangling golden strands
lapped by nets of lace." Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings and the contest.
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Sailor and mermaid reunited by a storm at sea. "In stormy ocean swells
staunch sailors chant shanties,
awaiting death's embrace -
while mermaids murmur,
untangling golden strands
lapped by nets of lace." Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings and the contest.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2020
Comment from Royette Dickenson
This is a good example of a play on words. Nicely said even though a tad bit scary. You can actually see and feel this situation even without the picture . The words are powerful .
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This is a good example of a play on words. Nicely said even though a tad bit scary. You can actually see and feel this situation even without the picture . The words are powerful .
Comment Written 26-Aug-2020
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Sailors in the storm are not demoralized for the song of the sea's danger motivates the sailors; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
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Sailors in the storm are not demoralized for the song of the sea's danger motivates the sailors; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
Comment Written 26-Aug-2020
Comment from roof35
You followed the rules and penned an excellent thirty-four syllable poem. I appreciate your notes explaining "shanties." Your illustration, of course pairs perfectly. Nicely done.
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You followed the rules and penned an excellent thirty-four syllable poem. I appreciate your notes explaining "shanties." Your illustration, of course pairs perfectly. Nicely done.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2020
Comment from RShipp
'In stormy ocean swells
staunch sailors chant shanties,'
Great lines!
Your picture was perfect!
Best of luck in the 34 Syllables writing prompt contest.
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'In stormy ocean swells
staunch sailors chant shanties,'
Great lines!
Your picture was perfect!
Best of luck in the 34 Syllables writing prompt contest.
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Comment Written 26-Aug-2020
Comment from AnnieDawn
I was having trouble with this until I read your explanation about the word shanties. Thank you as it makes your entry make sense. This is a good one as I count exactly 34 syllables and it flows well. Great job.
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I was having trouble with this until I read your explanation about the word shanties. Thank you as it makes your entry make sense. This is a good one as I count exactly 34 syllables and it flows well. Great job.
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Comment Written 26-Aug-2020
