Schnoz
a 75 word contest entry13 total reviews
Comment from LisaMay
Your story captures the thrill of a close race very well. I used to compete in track events so i know exactly how it feels to get beaten by an unfair physical advantage - my rival had a bigger bust than i did when "breasting the tape" at the finish line. (I think running shoes are more likely to have spikes rather than cleats... that sounds like football boots.)
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2020
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Your story captures the thrill of a close race very well. I used to compete in track events so i know exactly how it feels to get beaten by an unfair physical advantage - my rival had a bigger bust than i did when "breasting the tape" at the finish line. (I think running shoes are more likely to have spikes rather than cleats... that sounds like football boots.)
Comment Written 31-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2020
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Hi, Lisa. I am not surprised you could relate to my story having run track. But I was surprised by HOW your rival beat you. You should write a story about that. And you are right. The correct word is ?spikes,? not ?cleats,? and I should have known this. I was always present when the shoe guy showed up in his truck to sell regular running shoes and spikes to my cross-country runners. Rod
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Yes, I probably could write an entertaining tale about a running race from a female perspective. I did 100 and 200 yard sprints, so the story would be brief!
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, my friend,
Excellent entry for the 75 Word Flash Contest. It's hard to tell a complete story in flash fiction but you managed well. The excitement of a race won by a nose!
Gypsy
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2020
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Hello, my friend,
Excellent entry for the 75 Word Flash Contest. It's hard to tell a complete story in flash fiction but you managed well. The excitement of a race won by a nose!
Gypsy
Comment Written 30-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2020
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This tale was fun to tell. I am glad you liked it, Gypsy, and sure appreciate the kind words. Rod
Comment from Mia Twysted
Nice description of a moment in the life of a runner in a race. I didn't unerstand the nickname or what it meant, but that could have been hard to fit in when the words are limited.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2020
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Nice description of a moment in the life of a runner in a race. I didn't unerstand the nickname or what it meant, but that could have been hard to fit in when the words are limited.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2020
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Hi, Mia. Thank you for sharing my story. ?Schnoz? is slang for a big nose like Wiley Coyote?s.
Comment from RShipp
I liked the names 'Schnoz' and "Legs'. It seems that many times athletes get nicknames- some of which they likely DON'T enjoy?
Best of luck in the 75 Word Flash writing prompt contest.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2020
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I liked the names 'Schnoz' and "Legs'. It seems that many times athletes get nicknames- some of which they likely DON'T enjoy?
Best of luck in the 75 Word Flash writing prompt contest.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2020
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I am delighted you enjoyed the nicknames I used in my shorty. Many thanks for sharing.
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
I like this. It's cute, clever, and very well thought out. I like how you've presented this and enjoyed reading this humorous and well written work. Great job and well done!
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2020
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I like this. It's cute, clever, and very well thought out. I like how you've presented this and enjoyed reading this humorous and well written work. Great job and well done!
Comment Written 29-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2020
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It?s so nice to get such positive feedback, Jeffrey. So glad you enjoyed my short-short.
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
I enjoyed this story. Billy won! It should do well as an entry for the 75 Word Flash writing prompt. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2020
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I enjoyed this story. Billy won! It should do well as an entry for the 75 Word Flash writing prompt. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 29-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2020
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I am delighted you enjoyed my very short story. Thank you for sharing, Rebecca.
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You're quite welcome.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Ha ha ha, encouragement always wins the day and pushes us towards the winning post and thank goodness for big noses! He he he, a fun post, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2020
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Ha ha ha, encouragement always wins the day and pushes us towards the winning post and thank goodness for big noses! He he he, a fun post, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 29-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2020
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I am delighted you enjoyed my very short short story, Dolly. Many thanks for sharing.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Haha, I imagine there will no more complaints about being called Schnoz in the future. I enjoyed your contest entry. It all reads fine with a great image and a fun presentation.
Best wishes.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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Haha, I imagine there will no more complaints about being called Schnoz in the future. I enjoyed your contest entry. It all reads fine with a great image and a fun presentation.
Best wishes.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 28-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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I am delighted you enjoyed my short-short, Jan. Thank you for sharing.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written seventy five word flash fiction. When we have supporters screaming for us to perform better we do try harder until the finish line where we may win with a nose.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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A very well-written seventy five word flash fiction. When we have supporters screaming for us to perform better we do try harder until the finish line where we may win with a nose.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much, Sandra, for reviewing my short story and your kind praise.
Comment from Tina Crute
You did a great job on this amusing story and entry! Having two daughters who did track, I really get the funny of this! Their teammates had all sorts of nicknames. Hearing others yell their nickname really did help them kick into high gear.
Good luck in the contest!
Tina
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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You did a great job on this amusing story and entry! Having two daughters who did track, I really get the funny of this! Their teammates had all sorts of nicknames. Hearing others yell their nickname really did help them kick into high gear.
Good luck in the contest!
Tina
Comment Written 27-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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I am so pleased you could easily relate to my story, Tina. I used to coach cross-country and the nicknames both the girls and boys received were often hilarious and did motivate.
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Aha...I knew it! A track coach. Track is a sport where the athletes become like family:)
