Jungle Waterfall
Using the words rain, steam, bellow, song16 total reviews
Comment from Mistydawn
What a beautifully written, poem. Your great word choice, description paints a vivid picture in the reader's head. Makes us feel, wish we were there with you. It puts the reader in a tranquil mood as well. Good luck with your contest.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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What a beautifully written, poem. Your great word choice, description paints a vivid picture in the reader's head. Makes us feel, wish we were there with you. It puts the reader in a tranquil mood as well. Good luck with your contest.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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Thanks for your comments. If only I could travel again!
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Jungle Waterfall, uses the needed words: rain - steam - bellow - song, and sets a scene for a cool experience in the dreamland jungle lagoon. Nice.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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This poem, Jungle Waterfall, uses the needed words: rain - steam - bellow - song, and sets a scene for a cool experience in the dreamland jungle lagoon. Nice.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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Thanks for reviewing!
Comment from Jen Seale
This work brought me that much closer to going on that tropical vacation covid's been keeping everyone from. :-) Thank you! Was there a reason for the first line existing outside of the rhyming scheme? I think you could play with that even more--what gets included, and why.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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This work brought me that much closer to going on that tropical vacation covid's been keeping everyone from. :-) Thank you! Was there a reason for the first line existing outside of the rhyming scheme? I think you could play with that even more--what gets included, and why.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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Good luck with that tropical vacation - it won't be happening any time soon probably.
With my rhyme scheme, I don't like to be too predictable because it begins to sound too sing-song to my ear. I thought "vines" and "entwined" were close enough in sound to provide a rhyme at the beginning.
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Ah! Nice, I didn't see that before. V. cool.
Comment from Rubypond
I really enjoyed reading this. It had a calming and soothing effect. A mood elevator! Lovely rhythm and wonderful nature poem. Your descriptions were spot on
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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I really enjoyed reading this. It had a calming and soothing effect. A mood elevator! Lovely rhythm and wonderful nature poem. Your descriptions were spot on
Comment Written 28-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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I started to feel soothed as i was writing it, imagining a lovely place.
Thanks for your comments.
Comment from Debra White
Hello :)
I enjoyed reading your poem.
I really like the soothing picture that you paint with your beautifully descriptive words. It makes me feel peaceful.
The rhyme pattern is varied and compliments the different aspects of nature that you mention.
Nicely done.
Good luck in the voting booth.
Best wishes, Debra :)
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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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Hello :)
I enjoyed reading your poem.
I really like the soothing picture that you paint with your beautifully descriptive words. It makes me feel peaceful.
The rhyme pattern is varied and compliments the different aspects of nature that you mention.
Nicely done.
Good luck in the voting booth.
Best wishes, Debra :)
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Comment Written 28-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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I was soothing myself into a nice place while writing it. If only I could travel again I'd be inclined to seek such a place.
Thanks for your review comments.
Comment from Jacob David Collins
It will be a sad day if these forests no longer exist. I can't believe that there are people who are willing to tear them down to make money, meaning all that beauty will be lost forever. A well written, descriptive piece of writing. I enjoyed reading it. Good luck in the contest!
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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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It will be a sad day if these forests no longer exist. I can't believe that there are people who are willing to tear them down to make money, meaning all that beauty will be lost forever. A well written, descriptive piece of writing. I enjoyed reading it. Good luck in the contest!
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Comment Written 28-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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Thanks for reviewing! I agree with you; it's tragic how much forestry is being destroyed - it's such short-term thinking.
