Remembering Yesterday
Viewing comments for Chapter 59 "Baby Number Five"A widow's journey into her relationship with her
21 total reviews
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
It looks like I missed this one and did "The Addition" before the birth. However this was a good chapter. That Minister really was asking too much of you and I'm surprised you conceded. All worked out in the end.
My problem is I am really behind on my reviews.
Ralf
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2020
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It looks like I missed this one and did "The Addition" before the birth. However this was a good chapter. That Minister really was asking too much of you and I'm surprised you conceded. All worked out in the end.
My problem is I am really behind on my reviews.
Ralf
Comment Written 05-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2020
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i appreciate you going back and reading this one even though the promotion had ended. Yes, I think the pastor was asking too much. If I hadn't had my three going, I wouldn't have done it.
Beth
Comment from Mary Vigasin
enjoyed this story in its simplicity and richness of your life with your community and children. I think some writers are so wordsmith they lose the main goal, i.e. tell a story that has warm and captures the readers and keeps their readers interest.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2020
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enjoyed this story in its simplicity and richness of your life with your community and children. I think some writers are so wordsmith they lose the main goal, i.e. tell a story that has warm and captures the readers and keeps their readers interest.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2020
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Thank you for the review and comments. I appreciate you reading my story and I'm so pleased you found it worthy of six stars.
Beth
Comment from Ben Colder
Please forgive me, but I am still laughing and feeling sorry for the preacher. A ton of responsibility and the under-breath consent prayer asking God to make things right.
Glad to see you guys made it through the night. My Mary had our sixth child when we in our forties also.
Good one Beth
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2020
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Please forgive me, but I am still laughing and feeling sorry for the preacher. A ton of responsibility and the under-breath consent prayer asking God to make things right.
Glad to see you guys made it through the night. My Mary had our sixth child when we in our forties also.
Good one Beth
Comment Written 30-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and six stars. You're the only one who read it that feels sorry for the preacher. Everyone else wanted to sting him up for insisting that I go, but I understand why you would put yourself in his place. That same preacher now lives around Hot Springs, in Arkansas, so he survived the ordeal plus many more. His wife died a few months ago. His name's Jim Griffin
Beth
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I really like the story and the bit about the skunk was so real. LOL
Comment from Veenbee
This is a very cute story. When you go into your past and recall all the good times. You can't get those days back. Throughout the story it was my and I and then all of a sudden you switched to 'You'-referring to your husband. Maybe if you just stated my husband....it would be less confusing. As I read I understood who it was you referred to. When I said confusing, I guess I meant that it made me feel like you were writing the story to him. In other paragraphs you made it very clear.
'Roslyn Marchand, the lady from across the street', The pastor, my daughter... I don't know, it could just be me. Overall, excellent story. Veenbee
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2020
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This is a very cute story. When you go into your past and recall all the good times. You can't get those days back. Throughout the story it was my and I and then all of a sudden you switched to 'You'-referring to your husband. Maybe if you just stated my husband....it would be less confusing. As I read I understood who it was you referred to. When I said confusing, I guess I meant that it made me feel like you were writing the story to him. In other paragraphs you made it very clear.
'Roslyn Marchand, the lady from across the street', The pastor, my daughter... I don't know, it could just be me. Overall, excellent story. Veenbee
Comment Written 30-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2020
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Thank you so very much for the review. I appreciate your comment. Since you just gotten in on the 59th chapter, you couldn't be expected to know but I began this story to honor my husband who had died. The whole story is me talking to my deceased husband. I'm writing this because I want my children to understand both of us from not just as their parents but as people. Therefore I have always been speaking to him. I'm sure it is confusing to new readers which is why I try to explain in my notes. I'm so glad you read it and shared your thoughts.
Beth
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ok, that makes sense and now that you mentioned writing for your children I do believe I read one of your earlier chapters. Your kids should love it.
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear Beth, Thank you for throwing in a little historic background not only for us, but mostly for your children, for whom this story is primarily written. It will help explain the world they grew up in.
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2020
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Dear Beth, Thank you for throwing in a little historic background not only for us, but mostly for your children, for whom this story is primarily written. It will help explain the world they grew up in.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for reading and for the great comments.
Beth
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Thank you so much for reading and for the great comments.
Beth
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
(ironically s/b coincidentally; omit commas: it was at least an hour (,) before someone ... could bring a key (,) and let us in; (OMIT: all the) rest of them; AND make sure s/b TO make sure)
Delightful--masterful narration--touches of humor: look at that monster!--historical context and descriptions of people and place fleshes out the story. Fine work! Cheers. LIZ
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2020
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(ironically s/b coincidentally; omit commas: it was at least an hour (,) before someone ... could bring a key (,) and let us in; (OMIT: all the) rest of them; AND make sure s/b TO make sure)
Delightful--masterful narration--touches of humor: look at that monster!--historical context and descriptions of people and place fleshes out the story. Fine work! Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 29-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and comments and corrections.
Beth
Comment from elchupakabra
This interpersonal and introspective piece is like a window into your memories. Your voice shines through every time I read an entry. Great work, thanks for sharing. Later daze.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2020
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This interpersonal and introspective piece is like a window into your memories. Your voice shines through every time I read an entry. Great work, thanks for sharing. Later daze.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for continuing to read my story. I really appreciate your review.
Beth
Comment from eliz100
This was a great read for a number of reasons. I like the layout and the font. It made it an easy read. The story flowed easily with your style of writing.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2020
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This was a great read for a number of reasons. I like the layout and the font. It made it an easy read. The story flowed easily with your style of writing.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and the comments. I need it easy to read for my eyes as well.
Beth
Comment from RShipp
'We left about eight o'clock in the evening and it was around ten-thirty that night when we arrived at the campsite to find the gate locked and no one around to let us in.' Yes, a very LATE time to leave to go set up a campsite! I think I might have kicked this pastor in tech butt on several occasions.
'I heard the doctor say, "Look at the size of this monster." When I confronted him later, he denied that he's said it. She weighed 10 pounds and her face was so fat she looked like a little sumo wrestler.' (Sorry, that one caused me a great deal of laughter.)
'Don told you to ask the doctor to go back and look again, and make sure that he hadn't left a boy in there.' (What a great memory!)
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2020
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'We left about eight o'clock in the evening and it was around ten-thirty that night when we arrived at the campsite to find the gate locked and no one around to let us in.' Yes, a very LATE time to leave to go set up a campsite! I think I might have kicked this pastor in tech butt on several occasions.
'I heard the doctor say, "Look at the size of this monster." When I confronted him later, he denied that he's said it. She weighed 10 pounds and her face was so fat she looked like a little sumo wrestler.' (Sorry, that one caused me a great deal of laughter.)
'Don told you to ask the doctor to go back and look again, and make sure that he hadn't left a boy in there.' (What a great memory!)
Comment Written 29-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and for repeating the passages that you liked. As for the sumo wrestler, I was tempted to put her real picture in and you would have really gotten a laugh. I wasn't lying about the sumo wrestler but it was a little too embarrassing.
Beth
Comment from lyenochka
Oh my goodness!! I can't believe your pastor insisted you go on that camping trip!! And his poor wife! I'm so glad you didn't go into labor at that time. And a 10 pound baby! Wow! And you delivered naturally. Amazing! Thanks for putting this all in perspective. In 1973, I started high school. You're doing amazing and am so glad to learn about your personal experiences.
Some minor comments:
Durio's / Juneau's. (Durios and Juneaus) I know it looks wrong but I think you just add 's' for those plural family names. Apostrophe 's' is for possessive. https://grammarist.com/style/last-names/
but It was up to the adults (it)
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2020
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Oh my goodness!! I can't believe your pastor insisted you go on that camping trip!! And his poor wife! I'm so glad you didn't go into labor at that time. And a 10 pound baby! Wow! And you delivered naturally. Amazing! Thanks for putting this all in perspective. In 1973, I started high school. You're doing amazing and am so glad to learn about your personal experiences.
Some minor comments:
Durio's / Juneau's. (Durios and Juneaus) I know it looks wrong but I think you just add 's' for those plural family names. Apostrophe 's' is for possessive. https://grammarist.com/style/last-names/
but It was up to the adults (it)
Comment Written 29-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and the comments. I'm glad I didn't go into to labor to. I think everyone that has read was expecting that. Thanks also for pointing out the misplaced punctuation ant the typo.
Beth
