Remembering Yesterday
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Comment from zanya
Wow ! I was getting worried that lovely baby was going to arrive during the camping trip !! -told with wonderful immediacy - looking forward to the next chapter -
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2020
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Wow ! I was getting worried that lovely baby was going to arrive during the camping trip !! -told with wonderful immediacy - looking forward to the next chapter -
Comment Written 29-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and the great comments. I'm so glad your reading my story.
Beth
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
Wow! I seem to have missed a few chapters, along the way. We're on baby number FIVE? Congratulations, Mrs. Shelby!
It's terrible that you ended up going on that awful camping trip, so far along in your pregnancy, and spotting blood. I'm a Bible believing Christian too, but I have to say that your Pastor wasn't very sensitive to the needs of women, including his own wife! What if you had started contractions during the trip? But you were really a trooper, and God was watching over you, as He apparently was, many times throughout your life.
Some suggested revisions:
Three houses down were the Durio's.
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Three houses down were the Durios. [I don't think the apostrophe is needed.]
Next door to them were the Juneau's.
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Next door to them were the Juneaus.
The only contact we'd had with the family, before was when her husband...
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The only contact we'd had with the family before, was when her husband...
I'm taking our family camping trailer...
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I'm taking our family camping in a trailer...
because there isn't enough cars...
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because there aren't enough cars... [or maybe he really said "isn't"!]
My baby was due June second,
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My baby was due June 2nd, [I could be wrong, but I've never seen the day of a month spelled out like that, in literature, except in wedding invitations!]
but my labor didn't start until around two in the morning on June seventh.
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but my labor didn't start until around two in the morning on June 7th.
Since this was my fourth pregnancy and fifth child he expected a quick delivery.
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Since this was my fourth pregnancy and fifth child, he expected a quick delivery.
I just wanted to know it be healthy since I was a bit older than when the other three were born.
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I just wanted to know it would be healthy, since I was a bit older than I was, when the other four were born.
When I confronted him later, he denied that he's said it.
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When I confronted him later, he denied that he'd said it.
I was anticipating your fourth baby, but in this chapter, you really surprised me with your fifth. You raised quite a large family.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2020
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Wow! I seem to have missed a few chapters, along the way. We're on baby number FIVE? Congratulations, Mrs. Shelby!
It's terrible that you ended up going on that awful camping trip, so far along in your pregnancy, and spotting blood. I'm a Bible believing Christian too, but I have to say that your Pastor wasn't very sensitive to the needs of women, including his own wife! What if you had started contractions during the trip? But you were really a trooper, and God was watching over you, as He apparently was, many times throughout your life.
Some suggested revisions:
Three houses down were the Durio's.
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Three houses down were the Durios. [I don't think the apostrophe is needed.]
Next door to them were the Juneau's.
-->
Next door to them were the Juneaus.
The only contact we'd had with the family, before was when her husband...
-->
The only contact we'd had with the family before, was when her husband...
I'm taking our family camping trailer...
-->
I'm taking our family camping in a trailer...
because there isn't enough cars...
-->
because there aren't enough cars... [or maybe he really said "isn't"!]
My baby was due June second,
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My baby was due June 2nd, [I could be wrong, but I've never seen the day of a month spelled out like that, in literature, except in wedding invitations!]
but my labor didn't start until around two in the morning on June seventh.
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but my labor didn't start until around two in the morning on June 7th.
Since this was my fourth pregnancy and fifth child he expected a quick delivery.
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Since this was my fourth pregnancy and fifth child, he expected a quick delivery.
I just wanted to know it be healthy since I was a bit older than when the other three were born.
-->
I just wanted to know it would be healthy, since I was a bit older than I was, when the other four were born.
When I confronted him later, he denied that he's said it.
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When I confronted him later, he denied that he'd said it.
I was anticipating your fourth baby, but in this chapter, you really surprised me with your fifth. You raised quite a large family.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and wonderful comments. Our pastor expected too much and I wouldn't have done it except three of my own kids were going. I only have four children because my first baby only lived two months. You are an absolute angel to go to so much trouble to help me correct my writing and give me six stars to boot. I really appreciate you. My eyes are messed up tonight with allergens tonight. I'll have to make the corrections tomorrow.Beth
Beth
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You're very welcome, dear Beth. Thank you for clearing up my confusion about the number of children you had. I am so sorry that you lost a child, early on in your marriage. Losing an infant two months old is probably worse than a stillbirth, because you have already named the child, spent time together and so on... I am so sorry that you went through that. I can understand why you didn't begin your story with such a sad event. Having twins in your next pregnancy must have given you so much joy. Yet the loss of a child, at any age, is something you always remember. That little one is safe with Jesus.
I'm glad I could help with the revisions, and I hope your eyes feel better now. Love, Mary Kay xoxo
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You missed the chapter where I went into the death of Susan. She was the vicitm of the DPT vaccination. Years later the vaccine company had to pay parents who lost children in this way.
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So sorry -- my mistake! I probably started reading early on in your book, but not from the very first chapter. I would like to catch up, when I can.
I was not aware of what happened with the DPT vaccinations -- how catastrophic and heartbreaking for so many families! I am a baby boomer myself, born in '58, and I had the vaccination -- it wore off when I was in my 40s, and I got whooping cough, or pertussis, how weird, right?
They must have fixed whatever was wrong with that vaccination, because apparently it's not affecting little ones that way anymore, or maybe they're waiting longer to administer it. I'll have to ask my Mom if she remembers what happened with the DPT vaccine in those days.
I must have stumbled across your book shortly after its beginning, and then stayed with it. I don't know if I was a fan, before then. I'm so glad I found you. Blessings and hugs, Mary Kay
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I wanted to say, also, that no amount of money could have been enough to make up for the loss of a child.
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My book started when I was 16 and first met the man I was to marry. I didn't have Susan until I was 23 so I lot went on before then. Not every child had a problem with the shot but I knew three that did the year mine died. Some survived with brain damage. It was the whooping cough portion that gave the problem. I hope it is corrected now.
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I'm looking forward to reading more about your life from when you were 16, until you had your twins.
I googled the DPT shot, but the results were confusing, and it seems that they were compensating some families in the 80s, but I will have to look deeper to find out more about what happened before then. It's really very sad. I know there is a strong anti-vaxxer movement today, but it seems more focused on autism and I don't
recall hearing about the infant deaths (and brain damage), until you made me aware of it. Thank you.
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It was very hard to prove in order to get compensation. We'd had an autopsy done which showed encephalitis. If she lived she would have had brain damage which could have be autism or much worse.
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It's a good thing you had the autopsy done; as difficult as I'm sure it was, it showed damage beyond what would have been expected in most crib deaths. I'm sorry for your little baby girl, and I hope she didn't suffer. She would have suffered, had she lived, and you would have suffered with her. I am sorry you endured such a terrible loss.
Comment from Dick Waters
Thanks for sharing another part of your life with us. A very interesting story and I'm glad you didn't deliver in the middle of that camping storm. I can't believe the pastor made you go on the camping trip. Maybe he wanted to be the hero and deliver the baby...what a mistake that would have been.
Nothing to change and thanks again for sharing.
Dick
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2020
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Thanks for sharing another part of your life with us. A very interesting story and I'm glad you didn't deliver in the middle of that camping storm. I can't believe the pastor made you go on the camping trip. Maybe he wanted to be the hero and deliver the baby...what a mistake that would have been.
Nothing to change and thanks again for sharing.
Dick
Comment Written 29-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2020
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Thank you Dick, I appreciate the review and comments. It would have something if I'd gone into labor on that trip. With the way my luck runs, I'm surprised it didn't happen that way.
Beth
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I was forty when my last son was born. His older brother was embarrassed that his mom was pregnant. LOL Love the story.
When we got up the next morning, & The next morning the sun came out, (The following morning in both cases.)
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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2020
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I was forty when my last son was born. His older brother was embarrassed that his mom was pregnant. LOL Love the story.
When we got up the next morning, & The next morning the sun came out, (The following morning in both cases.)
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Comment Written 29-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and comments. I always say next morning because that is what everyone says but you always correct that. I'm not sure what the difference is but you're a teacher so you should know why next is wrong. I'll try to remember. Is that why you gave me four stars or was it an accident?
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I had an editor correct my every next. I has to do with the definition of both words.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Beth, is that adorable little baby in the photo yours?? I hope it is.
I would say that was quite a responsibility that the priest brought on his shoulders pressurising you to come along. Not very godly if I may say so. Rather selfish from a priest. But then again, I'm not religious, one of the reasons I'm not. I'm sorry that your husband felt almost embarrassed to be a father. Forty-four is no age.
I just found one thing:
because they needed me longer. = because they needed me no longer.
I love to follow along your riveting story. You write it so very well. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2020
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Hi Beth, is that adorable little baby in the photo yours?? I hope it is.
I would say that was quite a responsibility that the priest brought on his shoulders pressurising you to come along. Not very godly if I may say so. Rather selfish from a priest. But then again, I'm not religious, one of the reasons I'm not. I'm sorry that your husband felt almost embarrassed to be a father. Forty-four is no age.
I just found one thing:
because they needed me longer. = because they needed me no longer.
I love to follow along your riveting story. You write it so very well. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 29-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and and comments. I really appreciate you following my story.
Beth
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
What a life you led! I am relieved to know that Connie Lynnae arrived safely after that camping trip. I was surprised that you were called on to drive as big pregnant as you were.
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What a life you led! I am relieved to know that Connie Lynnae arrived safely after that camping trip. I was surprised that you were called on to drive as big pregnant as you were.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2020
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Thank you for the review and comments. I was relieved as well. i also concerned about us having had someone wreck into our car a couple of months before, and wasn't sure if that might have caused problems.
Beth
Beth
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Oh, the life you have led!
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It is boring compared with the one you've led.
Betj
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I would prefer a normal American life.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
One of those times when If something could go wrong it would. I wonder if your pastor ever planned another such outing again. Another girl. I know your son wanted a brother in the worst way with all those sisters. He was heavily outnumbered. LOL Well done, Beth. Nancy ð???
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2020
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One of those times when If something could go wrong it would. I wonder if your pastor ever planned another such outing again. Another girl. I know your son wanted a brother in the worst way with all those sisters. He was heavily outnumbered. LOL Well done, Beth. Nancy ð???
Comment Written 29-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and comments. Yes it was a big disappointment for Don. He was counting on a brother. The pastor didn't learn anything. He had the women around to do most of the work. LOL There were other campouts.
Beth
Comment from Mistydawn
Poor Don is outnumbered worse than before. That must've been horrid your tents blowing over and all. I was so afraid you were going to go into labor stuck out in the middle of nowhere. Your story is well-written, interesting start to finish. I look forward to reading more.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2020
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Poor Don is outnumbered worse than before. That must've been horrid your tents blowing over and all. I was so afraid you were going to go into labor stuck out in the middle of nowhere. Your story is well-written, interesting start to finish. I look forward to reading more.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and nice comments. Yes, poor Don. He was outnumbered but he treated her like he would have treated a little boy. You'll see in the next chapter.
Beth
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This is a scribble for your family members today to let them know about the memories you speak or talk or refer to about the birth of your baby, event is memorable; well said, well done, thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2020
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This is a scribble for your family members today to let them know about the memories you speak or talk or refer to about the birth of your baby, event is memorable; well said, well done, thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
Comment Written 29-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2020
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Thank you for the nice review and comments. I'm pleased you are continuing to read my story.
Beth
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Beautiful chapter and you are an warrior. Despite your condition you drove to a campsite and even stayed in those harsh condition and you made back to delkver a healthy baby. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your next chapter.
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Beautiful chapter and you are an warrior. Despite your condition you drove to a campsite and even stayed in those harsh condition and you made back to delkver a healthy baby. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your next chapter.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and for you lovely comments. I appreciate you readi;ng my story.
Beth
