Winter
Chilling Out11 total reviews
Comment from Liz O'Neill
I feel envious of people who have never seen Jack Frost's work. And yet they may mutually envy me; especially after these read this poem. Our first snow is the lovliest. I am most energized when I go out to sweet the walkway with only 2 inches accumulation. It is still snowing so I know I will be backout in a couple of hours to sweep another 2 inches. Then depending upon the energy level, one more time. then in the late morning I only have to sweep 3 inches. Otherwise it would be too deep to sweep. You have done a good job.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2020
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I feel envious of people who have never seen Jack Frost's work. And yet they may mutually envy me; especially after these read this poem. Our first snow is the lovliest. I am most energized when I go out to sweet the walkway with only 2 inches accumulation. It is still snowing so I know I will be backout in a couple of hours to sweep another 2 inches. Then depending upon the energy level, one more time. then in the late morning I only have to sweep 3 inches. Otherwise it would be too deep to sweep. You have done a good job.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2020
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Thank you for reading my poem and for your delightful comments. :)
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, anonymous,
A fine entry for the
Seasons acrostic writing prompt contest. Good words and connection between lines that improve the flow. Nice Winter imagery.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2020
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Hello, anonymous,
A fine entry for the
Seasons acrostic writing prompt contest. Good words and connection between lines that improve the flow. Nice Winter imagery.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
Comment Written 01-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2020
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Thank you for this great review.
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is an easy to read, easy to understand poem entry for the Seasons acrostic contest. It should do well. I wish you the best of luck!
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2020
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This is an easy to read, easy to understand poem entry for the Seasons acrostic contest. It should do well. I wish you the best of luck!
Comment Written 01-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2020
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Thank you for reading and reviewing my poem. :)
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You're quite welcome!
Comment from RShipp
'Revealed is work that Jack Frost wrought when storm clouds clear the sky.' Your closing line is the best!
Best of luck in the Seasons acrostic writing prompt contest.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2020
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'Revealed is work that Jack Frost wrought when storm clouds clear the sky.' Your closing line is the best!
Best of luck in the Seasons acrostic writing prompt contest.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2020
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Thank you, I like that line also. I really appreciate you taking time to resd my poem.
Comment from Patty Palmer
Very descriptive poetry. I can imagine the snowy scene and oof course the picture you used helped a lot! lol I love the beginning of winter right up to Christmas. Then I wish it would hurry and get it over with! LOL
Patty
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2020
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Very descriptive poetry. I can imagine the snowy scene and oof course the picture you used helped a lot! lol I love the beginning of winter right up to Christmas. Then I wish it would hurry and get it over with! LOL
Patty
Comment Written 01-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2020
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Me too! At first it's great, but after constant shoveling and cars getting stuck, it gets old. Not to mention the bitter cold of Minnesota winters. Thanks for reading. :)
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Acrostic about winter that despite its coldness we enjoy the beauty of the snow that causes a white wonderland that no one can forget the scenes if white everywhere.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2020
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A very well-written Acrostic about winter that despite its coldness we enjoy the beauty of the snow that causes a white wonderland that no one can forget the scenes if white everywhere.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2020
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Thanks for reading and reviewing. :)
Comment from LisaMay
I had to change the stress of my natural speech to make 'landscape' in the 3rd line fit the rhythm, but once i did that I found your poem very appealing. The internal rhymes carry the poem along nicely, so it feels much longer than its 6 lines. Your wintry details are very effective; i especially liked "Trees put on their winter garb, pale gowns of heavy weight."
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2020
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I had to change the stress of my natural speech to make 'landscape' in the 3rd line fit the rhythm, but once i did that I found your poem very appealing. The internal rhymes carry the poem along nicely, so it feels much longer than its 6 lines. Your wintry details are very effective; i especially liked "Trees put on their winter garb, pale gowns of heavy weight."
Comment Written 31-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2020
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That's my favorite line also. Thank you for reading my poem, I'm always appreciative of hearing from my fellow writers.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You brought the chilly winter days here with your clever well metered acrostic. Line 5 is slightly out of meter as it is short of one syllable, but easily fixed here:
Epic storms will sweep across as inches pile (up) high.
I thought your words here magical, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2020
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You brought the chilly winter days here with your clever well metered acrostic. Line 5 is slightly out of meter as it is short of one syllable, but easily fixed here:
Epic storms will sweep across as inches pile (up) high.
I thought your words here magical, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 31-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for this wonderful six star review. I really value your opinion, and you made my day. Thanks again. :)
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your winter acrostic is skillfully and creatively composed and vividly descriptive. Word choices are a lively and expressive, and figures of speech are impressive.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2020
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Your winter acrostic is skillfully and creatively composed and vividly descriptive. Word choices are a lively and expressive, and figures of speech are impressive.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2020
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Thank you for reading and for this nice review. :)
Comment from Fonda Little
My favorite part was, "Trees put on their winter garb, pale gowns of heavy weight.", because you compared snow covering tress to white dresses and I thought that was pretty neat and creative!
The Lord led me to these verses after I read this,
Ecclesiastes 3:1-11
New International Version
3 There is a time for everything,
and a season for every activity under the heavens:
2 a time to be born and a time to die,
a time to plant and a time to uproot,
3 a time to kill and a time to heal,
a time to tear down and a time to build,
4 a time to weep and a time to laugh,
a time to mourn and a time to dance,
5 a time to scatter stones and a time to gather them,
a time to embrace and a time to refrain from embracing,
6 a time to search and a time to give up,
a time to keep and a time to throw away,
7 a time to tear and a time to mend,
a time to be silent and a time to speak,
8 a time to love and a time to hate,
a time for war and a time for peace.
9 What do workers gain from their toil? 10 I have seen the burden God has laid on the human race. 11 He has made everything beautiful in its time. He has also set eternity in the human heart; yet no one can fathom what God has done from beginning to end.
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reply by the author on 31-Aug-2020
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My favorite part was, "Trees put on their winter garb, pale gowns of heavy weight.", because you compared snow covering tress to white dresses and I thought that was pretty neat and creative!
The Lord led me to these verses after I read this,
Ecclesiastes 3:1-11
New International Version
3 There is a time for everything,
and a season for every activity under the heavens:
2 a time to be born and a time to die,
a time to plant and a time to uproot,
3 a time to kill and a time to heal,
a time to tear down and a time to build,
4 a time to weep and a time to laugh,
a time to mourn and a time to dance,
5 a time to scatter stones and a time to gather them,
a time to embrace and a time to refrain from embracing,
6 a time to search and a time to give up,
a time to keep and a time to throw away,
7 a time to tear and a time to mend,
a time to be silent and a time to speak,
8 a time to love and a time to hate,
a time for war and a time for peace.
9 What do workers gain from their toil? 10 I have seen the burden God has laid on the human race. 11 He has made everything beautiful in its time. He has also set eternity in the human heart; yet no one can fathom what God has done from beginning to end.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2020
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That's also my favorite line. Thank you so much for this nice review. :)
