The Missing Parcels
It pays to keep track of Post Office deliveries.11 total reviews
Comment from jaded831
My sister worked for the post office so I found your poem relatable. I didn't quite understand the last line. With all that is going on with the post office, your poem is timely. I believe although our president claims innocence, he is guilty as sin.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2020
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My sister worked for the post office so I found your poem relatable. I didn't quite understand the last line. With all that is going on with the post office, your poem is timely. I believe although our president claims innocence, he is guilty as sin.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2020
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Thanks for your review. I'll explain what I meant in the last line:
"But now, boo hoo, lacking tracking ? lost."
The writer is crying (boo hoo) because the parcel got lost due to not having a tracking number on it.
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Thanks for clearing that up.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Tyburn Poetry contest.
The words are used well and this flows.
Well done and I wish you good luck with the contest.
Sharon
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2020
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I think this is a good entry for the Tyburn Poetry contest.
The words are used well and this flows.
Well done and I wish you good luck with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 05-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2020
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Thanks for your review!
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is a great entry for the Tyburn poetry contest writing prompt. I hope it does very well in the contest. Best of luck to you!
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2020
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This is a great entry for the Tyburn poetry contest writing prompt. I hope it does very well in the contest. Best of luck to you!
Comment Written 05-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2020
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Thanks for your review!
Comment from Bill Schott
This tyburn, The Missing Parcels, has the proper formatting and seems to be adding yet another problem for the postal system to contend with. I hope that not my package.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2020
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This tyburn, The Missing Parcels, has the proper formatting and seems to be adding yet another problem for the postal system to contend with. I hope that not my package.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2020
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The package was mine! Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Fortunately this has not happened to me and none of my parcels have gone missing and indeed one did turn up after 3 months! The virus has caused some disruption to the post, you identifying it with some clever words here, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2020
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Fortunately this has not happened to me and none of my parcels have gone missing and indeed one did turn up after 3 months! The virus has caused some disruption to the post, you identifying it with some clever words here, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 04-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2020
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Thanks dolly - you are lucky to have received all your parcels.
Comment from lyenochka
You did a great job with this tyburn form. It's hard to do well and make logical sense but yours makes perfect sense and mail is one everyone's mind these days due to the vote by mail controversy in the US.
Hope you do well in the contest!
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2020
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You did a great job with this tyburn form. It's hard to do well and make logical sense but yours makes perfect sense and mail is one everyone's mind these days due to the vote by mail controversy in the US.
Hope you do well in the contest!
Comment Written 04-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2020
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Thank you! (I think the fuss about the mail-in votes is an engineered distraction.)
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your tyburn is in great form, Mystery Writer. The image plus your rhyming words match perfectly. So many use words that really don't rhyme only end with 'ing.' Yours are great choices. Your poem makes perfect sense and is a good message for all.
Best wishes.
Thank for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2020
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Your tyburn is in great form, Mystery Writer. The image plus your rhyming words match perfectly. So many use words that really don't rhyme only end with 'ing.' Yours are great choices. Your poem makes perfect sense and is a good message for all.
Best wishes.
Thank for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 03-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2020
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Thanks for your comments. When I first entered a tyburn I made the beginner's mistake of thinking it was sufficient to just have words ending in "ing"... I've been pointing it out to them gently in my reviews, as it was pointed out to me back then.
Comment from Tina Crute
This is so clever and well written. This is a new format for me to read, and it looks like you've adhered well to the requirements. I wish you well in the contest!
Tina
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2020
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This is so clever and well written. This is a new format for me to read, and it looks like you've adhered well to the requirements. I wish you well in the contest!
Tina
Comment Written 03-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2020
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Thanks for your comments. I've only written a couple of these - it is quite a tricky form to have it make sense.
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Yeah...I won't be attempting it soon, lol. Sometimes poems appear simple because they are small, but those are, in reality , the harder ones to write!
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I agree with you about brevity. A good haiku is a major exercise for instance.
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Exactly!! It is beyond brave to attempt brevity!
Comment from Ben1
I think this is a nice poem that does exactly what the contest says to. Just imagining the amount of letters and packages that go through the post office a day is pretty crazy it's has to be hard to keep track of everything. I really liked your ing rhymes that fit perfectly with the subject. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2020
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I think this is a nice poem that does exactly what the contest says to. Just imagining the amount of letters and packages that go through the post office a day is pretty crazy it's has to be hard to keep track of everything. I really liked your ing rhymes that fit perfectly with the subject. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2020
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Thanks for your remarks, Ben. I appreciate your review.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Ha, Ha, Ha delayed joy of unpacking because the package went missing:) "But now, boo hoo, lacking tracking - lost." thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
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reply by the author on 03-Sep-2020
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Ha, Ha, Ha delayed joy of unpacking because the package went missing:) "But now, boo hoo, lacking tracking - lost." thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
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Comment Written 03-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2020
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Thanks for reviewing!
